Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で簡潔ですが、より自然で効果的にするために主語の詳細や職種の説明を短く加えるとよいです。また一文で完結させ、冗長な語句を避けてください。

예시: I work as a doctor at General Hospital — I specialize in urology and manage both surgeries and outpatient care.

제안: 時制の整合性と言い換えの工夫が必要です。現在の職務について話す際は現在形を用い、短く論理的に整理してください。またリンク語（for example, mainly, mostly）で列挙を繋ぐと自然です。

예시: I work at General Hospital as a urologist. I mainly perform surgeries and also see patients in outpatient clinics.

제안: 理由が明確で良いです。さらに具体性（どのように親切か、どんな点で快適か）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。接続詞 because の後を短く詳述してください。

예시: Yes, it is. My colleagues are very supportive, so we collaborate well during busy shifts, and the hospital provides good rest facilities for staff.

제안: 文法と語順、語彙の誤り（'work best stressful'など）を直す必要があります。肯定の理由は簡潔に説明し、具体例は一つに絞って自然な表現で述べてください。不要なフィラー（uh）は控えましょう。

예시: Yes, I do. Although the job can be stressful at times, the hospital is flexible with leave, so I can take time off when I need to recover.

제안: 将来計画は明確ですが、文を整理して目的と方法をはっきり示すと良いです。繰り返しを避け、リンク語（so, in order to, to focus on）を用いて構成を良くしてください。フィラーは減らしましょう。

예시: I plan to study abroad to improve my English and pursue research in Singapore, focusing on new treatments for kidney cancer.

× I work in General Hospital and I worked as a urologist.

✓ I work at General Hospital and I worked as a urologist.

The primary issue is preposition use with 'hospital' (use 'at' for workplaces) which maps to Grammar Problem Type 11, but because instruction 2 says only correct mistakes that meet list, we identify the sentence also contains a tense/context issue: mixing present 'I work' and past 'I worked' without clear time reference. This is a Present/Past tense issue so map to ID 9 is for past participle which does not match; however, to follow the user's required mapping, correct the preposition and keep tense but clarify: use 'at' for institutions. Suggestion: if you mean current role, say 'I work at General Hospital and I am a urologist.' Use 'at' for workplaces and maintain consistent present tense for current roles.

× I always perform surgery and treat patients.

✓ I perform surgeries and treat patients regularly.

The original sentence places 'always' before the verb which is acceptable, but 'perform surgery' is more natural as plural when referring to the general activity. This maps to Grammar Problem Type 20 (adverb placement). Improved sentence uses 'regularly' and plural 'surgeries' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use 'perform surgeries' when referring to routine actions and place adverbs like 'regularly' after the verb for smoother flow.

× Yes, I think so, because my colleagues are very kind and I can work comfortably.

✓ Yes, I think so because my colleagues are very kind and I can work comfortably there.

The sentence is generally grammatical but lacks a location reference after 'work comfortably'. Adding 'there' clarifies the place. This relates to Grammar Problem Type 17 (definite article) indirectly because 'General Hospital' earlier might need 'the' in some varieties; however here the correction provides clarity. Suggestion: add 'there' or repeat 'at the hospital' to specify where you can work comfortably.

× Yes, I like because I can work best stressful.

✓ Yes, I like it because I can work best under stress.

Original sentence has multiple issues: missing object after 'like' and incorrect collocation 'work best stressful.' This maps to Grammar Problem Type 26 (sentence structure errors). Correct sentence adds 'it' as the object and uses the idiomatic phrase 'work best under stress.' Suggestion: include the object of 'like' and use common expressions: 'work best under stress' or 'perform best under pressure.'

× For example, if I want to take a rest, I can uh, have a holiday whenever I want.

✓ For example, if I want to take a rest, I can have a holiday whenever I want.

The sentence has filler 'uh' which is not grammatical error but should be removed in formal speech. Preposition use is correct. This suggestion focuses on removing disfluency. Map to Grammar Problem Type 11 for prepositions if needed, but here simply remove fillers for clarity. Suggestion: avoid fillers in formal responses and keep the sentence concise.

× Well, I want to study abroad so I'm studying English now and I want to go, uh, Singapore and I want to research medical treatment about kidney cancer.

✓ Well, I want to study abroad, so I'm studying English now, and I want to go to Singapore to research medical treatments for kidney cancer.

Errors include missing preposition 'to' before 'Singapore', awkward phrase 'research medical treatment about', and repetitive 'I want to'. These map to Grammar Problem Types 6 (present tense issue) for continuity and 11 (preposition). Correct use: 'go to Singapore', 'research medical treatments for kidney cancer', and combine clauses for fluency. Suggestion: use 'go to' before country names and 'research X for Y' or 'research treatments for Y.' Also remove fillers and vary sentence structure to avoid repetition.