Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with article use and minor grammar: say "an Australian university". Keep answers concise with a clear topic sentence then one supporting detail. Use linking words if adding more detail (e.g., "I've been working there for over five years, so I have..." ).

예시: I work as a program coordinator for an Australian university. I have been in this role for over five years, so I have developed strong organizational and communication skills.

제안: Good clear answer and useful clarification. To be more natural, combine sentences and avoid repetition ("Australian organization" and "Australia"). Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., "which means").

예시: I work remotely for an Australian organization, which means I do my job from home while the main office is based in Australia.

제안: Answer contains useful content but is a bit wordy and repetitive. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid repeating the same point (comfort and finishing at home).

예시: Yes, it's a great place to work because I can do my job comfortably from home and avoid long commutes, which saves me time and reduces stress.

제안: Very good: clear topic sentence and supporting details. Improve slight tense/word choice ("ask me if I needed" -> "ask if I need" or "ask whether I need"). Use one linking word to tighten flow (e.g., "for example").

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because the remote team is cooperative and supportive. For example, my supervisors regularly check in to see whether I need help.

제안: Good content but somewhat repetitive and wordy ("compensation" and "remuneration", "current needs" and "right now"). Use one clear reason and concise phrasing. Replace repetitive words and avoid redundancy.

예시: I plan to stay with this organization because it offers a healthy work environment and fair compensation that meets my current needs.

× I work as a program coordinator for a Australian university and I've been working for over 5 years now.

✓ I work as a program coordinator for an Australian university and I've been working for over 5 years now.

Use 'an' before a word beginning with a vowel sound. 'Australian' begins with a vowel sound /ɔː/, so the indefinite article should be 'an' instead of 'a'. Suggestion: use 'an Australian university.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× I work remotely for an Australian organization. This means that I work from home, but my main office is located in another country, specifically in Australia.

✓ I work remotely for an Australian organization. This means that I work from home, but my main office is located in another country, specifically Australia.

When specifying a country after 'specifically', the preposition 'in' or no preposition is acceptable; 'in Australia' or simply 'Australia' is more natural. The phrase 'specifically in Australia' or 'specifically Australia' is preferred. Removing 'in' before 'Australia' avoids awkward repetition. Suggestion: use 'specifically Australia' or 'specifically in Australia.' Grammar problem type ID:12

× It is definitely a great place to work because since I work from home, I do my office work in the comfort of my house and with that I do not need to get up early to go on a long commute and face traffic jams.

✓ It is definitely a great place to work because, since I work from home, I do my office work in the comfort of my house and therefore do not need to get up early to go on a long commute or face traffic jams.

The connector 'with that' is informal and awkward here; 'therefore' or 'so' fits better. Also use 'or' to link alternatives 'go on a long commute' and 'face traffic jams.' Suggestion: replace 'with that' with 'therefore' and use 'or' between alternatives. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I comfortably do my work at home and I finish at home as well.

✓ I comfortably do my work at home, and I finish my work at home as well.

The sentence omits the object 'work' after 'finish,' which can cause ambiguity. Repeating 'my work' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence balance. Suggestion: include the object: 'finish my work at home.' Grammar problem type ID:12

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

'Would you like' asks about preference or desire; the examiner likely meant to ask current opinion. Use simple present 'Do you like' to ask about present feelings. Suggestion: use 'Do you like the place where you work?' Grammar problem type ID:6

× I like my workplace because the remote team has always been cooperative and accommodating.

✓ I like my workplace because the remote team has always been cooperative and accommodating.

No grammatical error requiring correction under the listed types; sentence is acceptable. No change needed. (Included to indicate checked.) Grammar problem type ID:12

× My supervisors always check on me and ask me if I needed help or support, and the team works together even if we are actually far apart.

✓ My supervisors always check on me and ask me if I need help or support, and the team works together even though we are far apart.

Maintain present tense 'need' to match 'always check' and 'ask.' 'Needed' is past tense and inconsistent. Also 'even if' suggests a hypothetical; 'even though' or 'although' is better for a real situation. Suggestion: use present tense 'need' and 'even though.' Grammar problem type ID:5

× I plan to continue working in this organization because they promote a healthy work environment and at the same time they have compensation that I think is fair and remuneration is really aligned with my current needs right now.

✓ I plan to continue working in this organization because they promote a healthy work environment, and they offer compensation that I think is fair; the remuneration is aligned with my current needs.

Awkward phrasing and redundancy: 'have compensation' is better as 'offer compensation.' 'Remuneration is really aligned' is wordy; remove 'really' and 'right now' as 'current' already indicates present. Also using a semicolon or comma improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'offer compensation' and streamline redundant adverbs. Grammar problem type ID:22}]} (Note: Grammar problem type IDs are provided in explanations above.)