Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and prepositions, and avoid extra words. Keep it natural and concise (max 2-3 sentences).

예시: I work as a staff nurse at a private hospital in Kuala Lumpur. I have been in this role for almost four years, mainly caring for critically ill patients.

제안: Fix grammar and naming: use correct verb forms and punctuation, give one clear sentence about the workplace and a second with a specific detail. Avoid unclear names and slang.

예시: I work in the Intensive Care Unit of a well-known private hospital in Kuala Lumpur. I have been a staff nurse in the ICU for almost four years, caring for patients with life‑threatening conditions.

제안: Organize response with linking words and correct grammar: state opinion first, then give two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because I gain a lot of clinical knowledge and practical experience. However, it is stressful since we care for critically ill patients, which makes maintaining work‑life balance challenging.

제안: Be concise, avoid repetition and filler words. Give one clear opinion sentence and add two specific supporting points using linking words (for example 'because' and 'also').

예시: Yes, I like working there because my colleagues and seniors actively share knowledge and support junior staff. Although the environment is stressful, the teamwork makes the job rewarding and enjoyable.

제안: Clarify timeline and use correct verb forms: state current status, immediate plans, and a clear future intention using linking words like 'after' or 'in'. Avoid uncertain phrases like 'might' unless explaining uncertainty.

예시: I recently completed a postgraduate training in critical care and I am now pursuing a nursing degree. After I finish my degree in about four years, I plan to look for work opportunities in Singapore.

× I'm currently as a staff nurse working in a private hospital at KL.

✓ I'm currently working as a staff nurse in a private hospital in KL.

Incorrect use and order of prepositions: 'as' should follow 'working' (working as a...), and the preposition for locations in city abbreviations is 'in' not 'at'. Reorder phrase to 'working as a staff nurse' and use 'in KL'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I working in the private hospital at KL which very well known as clangers.

✓ I work in a private hospital in KL which is very well known as Clangers.

Missing auxiliary verb and subject-verb agreement: present simple requires 'I work' rather than 'I working'. Also add the verb 'is' for the relative clause: 'which is very well known.' Use 'in' for location and capitalize proper noun 'Clangers'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I've been working at ICU department as a staff nurse for almost 4 years already.

✓ I've been working in the ICU department as a staff nurse for almost four years.

Use preposition 'in' with 'department'. Spell out numbers in formal speech optionally 'four'. 'at ICU department' is incorrect. The present perfect continuous 'I've been working' is correct, but include 'the' before ICU and remove redundant 'already'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It's a stressful and challenging department which you need to take care, critical patient but at the same time I gain a lot of knowledge and also face the reality on life and working balance also.

✓ It's a stressful and challenging department where you need to care for critical patients, but at the same time I gain a lot of knowledge and also learn about the reality of life and work-life balance.

Incorrect clause connector and preposition: use 'where' for a place clause, and 'care for' for patients. 'Critical patient' should be plural 'critical patients'. 'Face the reality on life and working balance' is awkward: use 'learn about the reality of life and work-life balance'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, I like the place that I'm working right now.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I'm working right now.

Use 'where' rather than 'that' when referring to a place. The rest is fine. Grammar problem type ID:16

× It's a critical area, but it's the place that the whole group of colleagues will share the knowledge to you.

✓ It's a critical area, but it's a place where the whole group of colleagues share knowledge with you.

Use 'where' for place clauses and prefer present simple 'share' for habitual action. Use 'share knowledge with you' instead of 'share the knowledge to you'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× The seniors will teach, uh, junior to learn and share the knowledge also.

✓ The seniors teach juniors and encourage them to learn and share knowledge.

Incorrect verb structure and pronoun reference: use plural 'juniors', use direct object 'them' or rephrase. Use present simple 'teach' for habitual actions rather than future 'will teach' unless intending future. Remove filler 'uh'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So it's a stressful environment, but also at the same time you can enjoy with the.

✓ So it's a stressful environment, but at the same time you can still enjoy your work.

Incomplete sentence and incorrect preposition: 'enjoy with the' is ungrammatical and leaves the object missing. Provide a clear object like 'your work' and remove redundant phrases 'also at the same time'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Recently I just completed my postpacing in critical care, so currently I'm proceeding my degree in nursing.

✓ Recently I completed my post-basic training in critical care, and currently I'm pursuing my degree in nursing.

Wrong word 'postpacing' likely intended 'post-basic' or 'post-training'. Use simple past 'I completed' for a finished action. Use 'pursuing' or 'working toward' a degree rather than 'proceeding'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× So in four years after I'm might plan to go for Singapore to work.

✓ So in about four years I might plan to go to Singapore to work.

Incorrect word order and preposition: 'in four years' should come before the subject or use 'in about four years'. Use 'go to Singapore' not 'go for Singapore'. Remove extra 'I'm' before 'might'. Grammar problem type ID:7