Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be slightly more concise and correct small grammar errors (use plural/singular and articles). Add one linking phrase to connect duties and an example to make it clearer. Keep under five sentences.

예시: I work as a quality engineer. My main responsibility is to monitor supplier quality and make sure products meet our standards. For example, I review inspection reports and coordinate with suppliers to resolve defects. This helps prevent faulty products from reaching customers.

제안: Good clear answer. Improve coherence by using a linking word between sentences and correct small phrasing (e.g., “compared with the city centre” → “compared with the city centre”). Keep it concise and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

예시: I work in an industrial park on the outskirts of Bangkok. I have worked there for about seven years, and compared with the city centre it is much less crowded, which I appreciate.

제안: Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and use linking phrases to make reasoning clearer. Be specific about what makes it good (examples: commute, facilities, noise level) and avoid vague expressions like “more present.”

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the industrial park has many factories, so there are plenty of job opportunities in manufacturing. Also, it is less crowded, which makes commuting easier and provides a quieter working environment.

제안: Fix pronunciation/word choice errors (prick → place) and use a linking word to connect reasons. Add a brief detail about how this benefits you (e.g., reduces stress) to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I like the place where I work because it is quiet and not crowded. It is close to Kaoya International Park, so there is a lot of greenery and fresh air, and I often go for a walk during my breaks to relax.

제안: Improve grammar (article use: “a master’s degree”) and tighten phrasing. Use a linking word to show sequence and be specific about what skills or role you hope to develop to make the plan more informative.

예시: I haven't decided on a detailed career plan yet because I intend to pursue a master's degree first. After I complete my studies, I plan to continue in my current job so I can apply the new skills, such as advanced quality management techniques, and progress into a senior engineer role.

× My main responsibility is to monitor supplier quality and ensure the products are consistent and meet our standards, for example by reviewing inspection report and coordinating with supplier to resolve the defect.

✓ My main responsibility is to monitor supplier quality and ensure the products are consistent and meet our standards, for example by reviewing inspection reports and coordinating with suppliers to resolve defects.

Use plural nouns when referring to general or multiple items. 'Inspection report' -> 'inspection reports' and 'supplier' -> 'suppliers' because the role involves dealing with many reports and suppliers. 'The defect' -> 'defects' because problems are typically multiple or unspecified.

× I have been working there for about 7 years and the area is not very crowded compared with the city centre.

✓ I have been working there for about 7 years and the area is not very crowded compared with the city centre.

No correction needed. Sentence is grammatically correct; 'the area is not very crowded compared with the city centre' correctly uses 'there is' concept implicitly and compares two areas.

× Yes, it's a good place to work because the industrial park has many factory so there are plenty of job opportunity in the manufacturing.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to work because the industrial park has many factories, so there are plenty of job opportunities in manufacturing.

'Factory' should be plural 'factories'. 'Job opportunity' should be plural 'job opportunities'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'manufacturing' and no article needed for the field 'manufacturing'.

× Also the area is not crowded which make community easier and the working environment more present.

✓ Also the area is not crowded, which makes community life easier and creates a more pleasant working environment.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'which make' should be 'which makes' because 'which' refers to 'the area' (singular). 'Community easier' is unclear; use 'community life easier'. 'More present' is incorrect; likely meant 'more pleasant' and use a verb 'creates' to connect ideas.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

No correction needed. The sentence is correct and uses pronouns appropriately.

× Yes, I like the prick where I work because it is quiet and not crowded.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because it is quiet and not crowded.

Typo: 'prick' is incorrect word choice; replace with 'place'. This is an issue of incorrect word choice rather than grammar rule list but fits under adjective/word misuse.

× It is close to Kaoya International Park so there is a lot of greenery and fresh air and I can go for a walk during my breaks.

✓ It is close to Kaoya International Park, so there is a lot of greenery and fresh air, and I can go for a walk during my breaks.

No major article errors; correction adds commas for clarity. Sentence structure is fine; articles 'a lot of' and 'fresh air' are used correctly.

× I have not decided on a detailed career plan yet because I intend to pursue a master degree first.

✓ I have not decided on a detailed career plan yet because I intend to pursue a master's degree first.

Use possessive form 'master's degree' rather than 'master degree'. This is an article/term convention error.

× After I complete my study, I plan to continue working in my current job so I can apply the new skills and develop my career future.

✓ After I complete my studies, I plan to continue working in my current job so I can apply the new skills and develop my future career.

Plural 'studies' is more natural than 'study' when referring to a degree program. 'Develop my career future' is awkward; use 'develop my future career'.