Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "test and test"). Also correct vocabulary mistakes ("audit report" not "audio report").

예시: I work as an auditor at a Big Four firm and I have been there for about five years. My main tasks are examining clients' financial statements and preparing audit reports, and I also test transactions to ensure accuracy. Because of the variety and problem‑solving involved, I find the job enjoyable.

제안: Use correct verb forms and be specific about location and features. Begin with a topic sentence, then add one or two clear details using linking words. Remove filler sounds like "uh" and avoid vague phrases like "AI" alone—explain what you mean.

예시: I work in a newly established office building in central Hong Kong. The space is tastefully decorated and includes modern features, such as AI‑equipped meeting rooms and smart collaboration tools, which make meetings more efficient.

제안: Give a clear, complete answer with coherent supporting reasons. Use linking words (e.g. "because", "also") correctly and finish your thoughts. Avoid hesitations and vague endings; provide concrete examples of how the place improves productivity.

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work because there are multifunctional rooms for collaborative work and quiet focus. For example, the quiet booths help me concentrate on complex audit tasks, while the team rooms make it easy to discuss issues quickly.

제안: Keep the answer concise and correct grammar ("suits" → "suit", "flexible seating" is fine). Begin with a direct statement, then briefly explain with a specific reason and example of how flexibility helps you.

예시: Yes, I really like it because we have flexible seating instead of fixed desks. This lets me choose a quiet corner when I need concentration or sit with colleagues when I need to collaborate on a project.

제안: Be specific and confident; avoid fillers like "umm". State your plan clearly and give one or two concrete steps you will take to achieve it (e.g. study, certification, or on‑the‑job experience). Use linking words such as "therefore" or "for example" to connect ideas.

예시: I plan to transition into the financial sector within the next five years and build on my audit experience. For example, I intend to take the CFA Level 1 exam and gain exposure to financial analysis tasks so I can move into roles such as financial analyst or risk manager.

× I working a newly established office building in central of Hong Kong.

✓ I am working in a newly established office building in the center of Hong Kong.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous and incorrect preposition 'in central of' should be 'in the center of' or 'in central'. Use 'am working' for 'I' + present continuous; include article 'the' before 'center'.

× Uh, it is tastefully decorated with modern technologies such as AI meeting room or AI.

✓ It is tastefully decorated and equipped with modern technologies, such as an AI meeting room.

Awkward structure: 'decorated with modern technologies' is odd; use 'decorated and equipped with'. Also need article 'an' before 'AI meeting room' and remove redundant 'or AI'.

× My daily routine is to examine clients financial statements, prepare audio report and to test and test transactions.

✓ My daily routine is examining clients' financial statements, preparing audit reports, and testing transactions.

When listing activities after 'daily routine is', use gerunds for parallel structure: 'examining, preparing, and testing'. Possessive apostrophe needed in 'clients'' and 'audio report' is likely 'audit report'.

× I have worked for about 5 years as an auditor in one of the BIG4 audit firms.

✓ I have worked for about five years as an auditor in one of the Big Four audit firms.

Numeric style: write 'five' in formal speech; 'BIG4' should be 'Big Four' and consistency in capitalization. No grammar error type? This mainly article/capitalization but fits article/style; kept as correction.

× You would like to have, uh, to boost your performance and productivity.

✓ You would like to have ways to boost your performance and productivity.

Original is ungrammatical: 'would like to have, to boost' lacks an object. Add 'ways' to complete the sentence and maintain modal 'would like'.

× And I also find this a very pleasant to work in this, uh, in this environment because you can either focus or.

✓ I also find it very pleasant to work in this environment because you can either focus or collaborate, depending on your needs.

Sentence missing noun after 'pleasant' and ends abruptly. Use 'find it very pleasant to work in this environment' and complete the contrast 'either focus or collaborate'.

× Yes, I definitely love the place I work because I don't have a fixed seat so I can have a flexible seating plan to find a place where it can suits my purpose of that particular working day.

✓ Yes, I definitely love the place where I work because I don't have a fixed seat, so I can choose a flexible seating spot that suits the purpose of that particular work day.

Several issues: add 'where' after 'place'; 'seating plan' -> 'seating spot' or 'seat'; 'it can suits' incorrect verb form and extra pronoun; use 'that suits' with singular verb. 'working day' -> 'work day' or 'working day' consistent.

× I plan to transition into financial sectors in the next 5 years.

✓ I plan to transition into the financial sector within the next five years.

Use 'the financial sector' (singular) and 'within the next five years' is idiomatic. Also write 'five' in words for formality.

× I would very much like to leverage my current experience to advance my career.

✓ I would very much like to leverage my current experience to advance my career.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. Included here to show no applicable error from list; kept original.

× Umm for example, I'm very interested in roles like financial analysis or risk management.

✓ For example, I'm very interested in roles such as financial analyst or in risk management.

Use 'roles such as' and correct noun 'financial analysis' (a field) to 'financial analyst' (a role), or rephrase to 'roles in financial analysis or risk management.' This fixes noun-role mismatch.