Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변은 직접적이고 이해되지만 조금 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 말할 수 있습니다. 대학 이름과 전공을 말한 뒤 간단한 한 문장으로 공부하는 이유나 관심 분야를 덧붙이면 더 풍부해 보입니다. 예를 들어 불필요한 반복(예: 'I study accounting management' 뒤에 같은 의미 반복)을 피하세요. 또한 대학교 이름이 자연스럽게 들리도록 발음을 또렷하게 유지하세요.

예시: I'm a student at UH Tango University, where I study accounting management. I'm particularly interested in financial reporting and hope to work in corporate finance after graduation.

제안: 문장이 어색하고 말 더듬임과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 부정문('I do not work presently')과 이어서 파트타임을 언급하는 방식이 혼란스러우므로 한 번에 명확히 말하세요. 불필요한 'uh'와 중복되는 단어를 줄이고, 파트타임 직업의 성격을 구체적으로 설명해 보세요.

예시: I don't have a full-time job at the moment. Instead, I work part-time at my university, helping with administrative tasks in the academic office.

제안: 답변의 의도는 전달되지만 문법과 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다('short time' 대신 'short hours'나 'flexible hours'가 적절). 또한 'select time'은 잘못된 표현입니다. 이유를 하나만 말하기보다, 연결어를 사용해 근거를 논리적으로 제시하세요.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because the hours are short and flexible, which suits my study schedule. Also, I enjoy interacting with children, so the role is rewarding.

제안: 표현은 긍정적이지만 시제와 형용사 사용이 조금 어색합니다('I satisfied' → 'I am satisfied' 또는 'I like my workplace'). 장소를 좋아하는 이유를 연결어로 덧붙여 구체화하세요.

예시: Yes, I'm satisfied with my workplace because the atmosphere is friendly and cheerful, and my colleagues are supportive.

제안: 문법 오류(복수형·관사 사용)와 어순이 어색합니다. 파트타임이라 아직 계획이 없다는 점을 말하되, 장기적 목표나 관심 분야를 덧붙여 미래 계획이 전혀 없지 않음을 보여주세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 답변을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

예시: I don't have definite plans tied to this part-time job because it's temporary. However, in the long term I hope to pursue a career in accounting or corporate finance after I graduate.

× I'm I do not work presently uh, instead uh, I, I have work on part time job in academic.

✓ I do not work at present. Instead, I have a part-time job in academia.

The sentence misuses pronouns and repeats 'I'. Use 'I' once and correct surrounding words: 'presently' -> 'at present' (more natural), 'have work on part time job' -> 'have a part-time job', and 'academic' -> 'academia'. Also add the preposition 'in' before 'academia'. Combine into two clear clauses to avoid repetition.

× I study accounting management.

✓ I study accounting management.

This sentence is acceptable but could be improved for naturalness depending on intended meaning: use 'accounting' or 'accounting management' consistently. No grammatical plural error detected. If you mean the field, 'I study accounting' is more natural.

× Yes, because it is a short time uh work.

✓ Yes, because it is short-term work.

Use the adjective form 'short-term' to modify 'work' rather than 'short time'. 'Short-term work' is the correct present-tense description of the job's duration.

× I have many select time and I I like children.

✓ I have a lot of free time and I like children.

'many select time' is incorrect. Use 'a lot of' or 'much' with uncountable 'time' and specify 'free time' if intended. Also remove repeated 'I'. The corrected preposition/quantifier usage makes the meaning clear.

× Yes, I satisfied my workplace because its atmosphere is friendly and cheerful.

✓ Yes, I am satisfied with my workplace because its atmosphere is friendly and cheerful.

Use the verb 'satisfied' with 'am' to form 'I am satisfied' and the preposition 'with' after 'satisfied'. 'Workplace' needs the determiner 'my' which is present; maintain it. Correct verb form and preposition improve grammar.

× Well actually I don't have a future work plans because just it is part time job not full time job.

✓ Well, actually I don't have future work plans because it is just a part-time job, not a full-time job.

Remove the article 'a' before 'future work plans' (plural), reorder words for natural English: 'it is just a part-time job' and add hyphens in 'part-time' and 'full-time'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct article usage.