Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答需要更自然和简洁，注意时态和语法（如“graduated”应为“graduating”或“after graduation”），并用一到两句明确说明职位和主要职责。避免重复信息，句子不要过长。

예시: I have been working for six years since I graduated. Currently I work as a management accountant at a multinational company, and my main responsibility is preparing and ensuring the accuracy of the financial statements.

제안: 回答应更直接并使用连贯的连接词，纠正措辞（如“multiple nation”应为“multinational”），并把公司类型和你所属部门分成一到两句以提高清晰度。

예시: I work as a management accountant at a multinational company that operates in healthcare, electronics and life sciences. I belong to the finance department, so I mainly handle financial reporting for these business sectors.

제안: 回答要更具体，使用正确的名词复数和动词形式（例如“policies”，“promotions”），并举一两个具体例子说明公司如何支持员工成长。使用连接词让句子流畅。

예시: Yes, definitely. The company has several policies that encourage employees to learn new skills and provide opportunities for promotion. For example, we have regular training workshops and a mentorship program that help staff develop professionally.

제안: 减少口头语“uh”，用更简洁的句子表达情感和理由。注意动词形式（例如“always have”应为“always has”或“offers”），并给出一两个具体事例支持你的观点。

예시: Definitely. I enjoy the working atmosphere because my colleagues are friendly and often share useful knowledge. In addition, the company offers employee benefits and development programs that make it a pleasant place to work.

제안: 回答要更自然并避免重复（如“clear clear”）。用一两句说明你的目标职位和具体原因，使用更准确的短语（如“related to financial controlling”或“work in financial control”），并可提到具体技能想要提升。

예시: I have a clear career plan. I want to move into a financial control role because I'm interested in budgeting and forecasting, and I believe working in that area will help me improve my analytical and planning skills.

× I have worked for six years after graduated from university and currently I work as a management accountant in multi position company and in my daily work I need to make sure the financial statement.

✓ I have worked for six years since graduating from university, and I currently work as a management accountant in a multinational company. In my daily work I need to make sure the financial statements are accurate.

错误类型：过去时/动词形式。句子中使用了“after graduated”不正确，应该用动名词或完成式结构，常用表达是“since graduating”或“after graduating”。此外“multi position company”表达不自然，改为“multinational company”（跨国公司）更符合语境；“financial statement”应为复数“financial statements”，并补全谓语“are accurate”。建议：使用“since + 动名词”或“after + 动名词/完成式”，注意名词单复数和补全句子谓语。

× I work as a management accountant in multiple nation healthcare company and there are several business sector in my company including healthcare, electronic and life science and because I worked in finance department.

✓ I work as a management accountant in a multinational healthcare company. There are several business sectors in my company, including healthcare, electronics and life sciences, and I work in the finance department.

错误类型：There be 和名词复数/词形问题。原句中“multiple nation healthcare company”应为“multinational healthcare company”。“several business sector”应为复数“several business sectors”；“electronic and life science”应为复数形式或复合名词“electronics and life sciences”。最后“because I worked in finance department”时态和介词不当，应为简单陈述“I work in the finance department”。建议：注意名词复数、固定搭配（multinational）以及用正确时态和介词短语“in the finance department”。

× Definitely in my company there are several policy that encourage employee to learn new skills and also to give us more opportunity to promote.

✓ Definitely, in my company there are several policies that encourage employees to learn new skills and also give us more opportunities for promotion.

错误类型：形容词/副词和名词数量不匹配。原句中“several policy”应为复数“several policies”；“encourage employee”应为复数“employees”；“more opportunity to promote”用法不当，应为“more opportunities for promotion”或“more opportunities to be promoted”。建议：注意名词复数一致、搭配“opportunities for promotion”或“to be promoted”。

× Such as there are several activities to inspire your insights in the public.

✓ For example, there are several activities to inspire employees' insights and public engagement.

错误类型：句子结构和用词不当。“Such as”不能独立作为句子开头接完整句，且“inspire your insights in the public”表达不自然。改为“For example”引导举例，并明确对象“employees' insights”或“public engagement”。建议：使用完整的连接词引导例子，确保宾语明确且表意清晰。

× Uh, definitely, I enjoy the, uh, atmosphere in my current company, uh, because, uh, my colleagues are friendly and always, uh, enjoy sharing new knowledge for us. And besides that, uh, our company always have some, uh, good policy for employees.

✓ Definitely, I enjoy the atmosphere in my current company because my colleagues are friendly and always enjoy sharing new knowledge with us. Besides that, our company always has good policies for employees.

错误类型：代词和主谓一致。原句“sharing new knowledge for us”应为“sharing new knowledge with us”；“our company always have”主谓不一致，应为“has”；“good policy”复数更合适“good policies”。建议：使用正确的介词搭配“share ... with ...”，并注意主语与动词的一致以及名词单复数。

× I have a clear clear path in my current stage. I would like to have a job which is related about finance controlling because I'm interested in budget and forecasting that can help me improve a lot.

✓ I have a clear career path at my current stage. I would like a job related to financial controlling because I'm interested in budgeting and forecasting, which can help me improve a lot.

错误类型：现在时/词汇搭配。“clear clear”重复，应为“clear”；“clear path”在职业语境中更自然为“career path”；“related about finance controlling”错误搭配，应为“related to financial controlling”；“budget”作动名词或领域时用“budgeting”，并将定语从句“that can help me improve a lot”改为非限制性定语从句“which can help me improve a lot”。建议：避免重复词，使用正确介词短语“related to”，选择正确的名词形式如“budgeting”和“forecasting”。