Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct articles and plural forms, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, and) to connect duties and effects. Be specific about tasks and outcomes.

예시: I work as a trade officer at the Ministry of Commerce. I help Thai exporters enter foreign markets by arranging trade missions and negotiating contracts, and I also communicate regularly with foreign importers to solve problems. Because of this work, I have improved my negotiation and problem‑solving skills.

제안: Produce a clear topic sentence and correct grammar for location and commuting. Remove hesitations and fix word choice (suburb, commute, private car). Provide one supporting detail about travel time using linking words.

예시: I work in Batontaine, a suburban area near Bangkok. It is close to my home, so I can commute by private car in about 15 minutes.

제안: Be direct and use correct nouns and adjectives: 'supportive colleagues' and 'challenging duties'. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Give one or two specific reasons (supportive colleagues, interesting tasks) and an example of support or challenge.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because my colleagues are very supportive and my tasks are challenging. For example, my team helps me when I handle difficult export negotiations, which helps me learn quickly.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Correct phrases ('I love the location' or 'I love the job'), and use linking words to add reasons. Be specific about what aspects you like (location, environment, colleagues) and how they affect motivation.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace very much. It is close to my home and the supportive environment from colleagues motivates me to commute every day, so I feel positive about going to work.

제안: Start with a clear intention and give a specific timeframe. Remove fillers and finish incomplete phrases. Provide reasons and concrete benefits of working abroad and mention steps you will take to achieve it.

예시: In the next ten years, I plan to work abroad, possibly in France or Germany, because the Ministry of Commerce has offices there. Working overseas would improve my communication and problem‑solving skills, and I plan to apply for an overseas post and learn the local language to prepare.

× I work as a trade officer in Ministry of Commerce.

✓ I work as a trade officer in the Ministry of Commerce.

Missing definite article 'the' before the proper noun 'Ministry of Commerce'. Government departments usually require 'the'. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific institutions (the Ministry of Commerce).

× I find this job is so enjoyable because it allows me to solve problems and improve my skills constantly.

✓ I find this job very enjoyable because it allows me to solve problems and constantly improve my skills.

Awkward sentence structure and adverb placement. 'Find this job is so enjoyable' is redundant; better: 'find this job very enjoyable'. Place adverb 'constantly' before the verb phrase 'improve my skills' for natural flow. Suggestion: reorder and choose 'very' instead of 'so'.

× My duties are.

✓ My duties are as follows:

Fragment with no complement after 'My duties are.' Needs completion. Use 'My duties are as follows:' to introduce a list or description. Suggestion: always complete 'are' with a noun phrase or list.

× Uh, helping Thai exporters to export their products into foreign market and I have a chance to communicate with foreign importer as well.

✓ I help Thai exporters export their products to foreign markets, and I also have the chance to communicate with foreign importers.

Incorrect verb form and parallel structure. Start with subject + verb: 'I help'. Use bare infinitive 'export' after 'help'. 'into foreign market' incorrect preposition and singular/plural; use 'to foreign markets'. 'foreign importer' needs plural 'importers'. Suggestion: maintain parallel clauses and correct prepositions/plurals.

× Well, my workplace is located in Batontaine, the suburb area in Thailand.

✓ Well, my workplace is located in Batontaine, in a suburban area of Thailand.

Word choice and article use: 'the suburb area' is incorrect; use 'a suburban area' or 'the suburbs'. Also 'in Thailand' is fine but 'of Thailand' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'a suburban area' or 'the suburbs'.

× It's not quite far from my home.

✓ It's not very far from my home.

Word choice: 'quite far' can mean somewhat far; context implies proximity, so 'not very far' is more natural. This is a style/word choice issue within present tense. Suggestion: use 'not very far' to express closeness.

× So, uh, I easy, I easy to commute work by my private course in within. Uh, 15 minutes.

✓ So I can easily commute to work in my private car within about 15 minutes.

Multiple errors: incorrect modal/ability expression, wrong adverb/adjective order, wrong noun 'course' instead of 'car', wrong prepositions. Use 'can easily commute' (modal + adverb), 'to work', 'in my private car', and 'within about 15 minutes' for time. Suggestion: simplify and correct word choices and order.

× I would say yes, it is a good place to work due to the supportive of college and the challenging of both ties.

✓ I would say yes, it is a good place to work because of the supportive colleagues and the challenging duties.

Multiple article and word choice errors: 'supportive of college' is incorrect — likely 'supportive colleagues'. 'Challenging of both ties' unclear; likely 'challenging duties'. Use 'because of' to explain reason. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and include articles if needed.

× So I find myself, uh, very challenging with the jobs and my colleagues also encourage me to. Come the hard jobs.

✓ So I find my work very challenging, and my colleagues also encourage me to take on difficult tasks.

Awkward phrasing and split sentence. 'Find myself very challenging with the jobs' is incorrect; use 'find my work very challenging'. 'Encourage me to come the hard jobs' is ungrammatical; correct: 'encourage me to take on difficult tasks'. Suggestion: use clear verbs and objects.

× As I mentioned before that my work place is located near my home and I love the South.

✓ As I mentioned before, my workplace is located near my home and I love the south.

'Work place' should be 'workplace' (one word). 'The South' vs 'the south' depends on meaning; if referring to the southern region of the country, lowercase 'south' can be used, but 'the south' is acceptable. Removed unnecessary 'that' after 'mention'. Suggestion: use 'workplace' and remove extra words.

× The supportive of environment is encourage me to wake up and commute to work every day.

✓ The supportive environment encourages me to wake up and commute to work every day.

Incorrect noun phrasing 'supportive of environment'; use 'supportive environment'. Verb agreement: 'is encourage' should be 'encourages'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× Well, I plan to work abroad in the future, maybe next 10 years, because the Ministry of Commerce has, uh, many parts of the world, for example in France or Germany, and I want to have the. This to work there in order to improve my skills such as communication and problem solving skills.

✓ Well, I plan to work abroad in the future, maybe in the next 10 years, because the Ministry of Commerce has offices in many parts of the world, for example in France or Germany, and I would like to have the opportunity to work there in order to improve skills such as communication and problem-solving.

Multiple tense and article errors: 'maybe next 10 years' needs 'in the next 10 years'. 'has many parts of the world' should be 'has offices in many parts of the world'. 'I want to have the. This to work there' is fractured; correct to 'I would like to have the opportunity to work there'. Use gerund or hyphenate 'problem-solving'. Suggestion: restructure sentence, fix articles, and use appropriate future intent phrasing like 'plan to' and 'would like'.