Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, concise response and avoid redundant words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail if needed. Use natural phrasing and correct grammar (e.g., "I'm a full-time student.").

예시: I'm a full-time student. I study computer science at college, and my classes take up most of my time.

제안: Answer the question directly and tailor it to the examiner's wording. Use present tense and correct verb forms. If you don't work, state where you study and give one specific detail about your college or subject.

예시: I don't work at the moment; I study at City College. I'm in the first year of a visual arts program.

제안: Respond directly to the question by imagining or explaining whether the place you'd work would be good, rather than repeating you don't work. Use linking words and give one specific reason why it would or wouldn't be good.

예시: I haven't worked there yet, but I think it would be a good place to work because it offers flexible hours and a supportive team, which would help me balance work and study.

제안: Don't repeat 'I don't have work' multiple times. Instead, answer hypothetically about whether you'd like the workplace and give a specific reason. Use correct sentence structure and concise wording.

예시: Although I don't have a job now, I would like to work in a creative studio because it would allow me to learn from experienced artists and gain practical skills.

제안: Be clearer and more specific about your career goals. Begin with a topic sentence stating your main plan, then add a concrete detail or example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'photographer' or 'work with artists on portrait photography').

예시: I plan to work as a photographer, focusing on portrait photography. For example, I'd like to collaborate with artists to create intimate portraits of mothers and families.

× I am fully a student.

✓ I am a full-time student.

The phrase 'fully a student' is not idiomatic. Use the adjective phrase 'full-time student' to describe current status. This corrects word choice and adjective order; 'full-time' modifies 'student' to indicate enrollment status.

× Oh, I don't work, I just studied.

✓ Oh, I don't work; I am just studying.

Mixed tenses cause confusion: 'don't work' is present, while 'studied' is past. The intended meaning is ongoing study, so use present continuous 'am studying' or present simple 'study'. 'I am just studying' matches present context.

× I currently don't have any work at the moment, but I'm looking forward to it someday so I can work and study at the same time.

✓ I don't have work at the moment, but I hope to find a job someday so I can work and study at the same time.

'Currently' and 'at the moment' are redundant; choose one. 'Looking forward to it' is vague—use 'hope to find a job' for clarity. Tense stays present for current situation and future intention.

× I am currently coming first year student college.

✓ I am currently a first-year college student.

Word order and article use are incorrect. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'first-year college student', and hyphenate 'first-year' when used as a compound adjective. 'Coming' is the wrong verb; omit it.

× All my future work plans would be like working with some artists and taking a pic of the mother.

✓ My future work plans include working with some artists and taking pictures of mothers.

'Would be like' is awkward for planned intentions; use 'include' or 'are'. 'Taking a pic of the mother' is unclear and informal. Use the plural 'pictures' and 'mothers' or specify which mother; use 'picture' rather than 'pic' for formality. Maintain parallel gerund forms: 'working' and 'taking'.