Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, give a precise time reference, and avoid trailing words. Use linking words if you add details.

예시: I currently work as a service crew member at a restaurant in Haneda Airport. I have worked there for almost two years, and I enjoy meeting people from different countries which helps me improve my English.

제안: The student's answer is missing — respond directly naming the place and give one or two specific details about it. Keep it short and clear.

예시: I work at a casual dining restaurant inside Haneda Airport, near the international departures. It is busy most days, especially during flight times, so I gain a lot of customer service experience.

제안: Avoid hesitation and filler words. Give a smooth topic sentence and then one clear supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., because/and/also). Be specific about what you learn.

예시: Yes, it's a good place to work because I learn how to serve dishes properly and also improve my English by speaking with international customers.

제안: Complete the sentence and fix grammar (e.g., "I like my workplace"). Use linking words and provide a specific example of friendly interaction to make the answer more concrete.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because the building is brand new and the staff at the neighbouring restaurant are very friendly. For example, we often help each other during busy shifts and share tips on serving customers.

제안: Clarify and organize your response: start with a clear statement of your plan, then explain why and give a specific detail or example. Correct prepositions and country names (e.g., "in England").

예시: In the future I plan to work for an NGO focusing on human rights. I want to work on issues like refugee support, and I'm especially interested in opportunities in England because of its strong human rights organisations.

× I currently work as a service crew at the restaurant in Haneda airport and.

✓ I currently work as a service crew member at a restaurant in Haneda Airport.

The phrase 'service crew' is a collective noun and needs 'member' to refer to one person (singular/plural issue). Also 'the restaurant' suggests a specific one; use 'a restaurant' if unspecified. 'Haneda Airport' is a proper noun and should be capitalized. Remove the trailing 'and' which is incomplete. Suggestion: say 'service crew member' and 'a restaurant in Haneda Airport'.

× And I've worked there for almost 2.

✓ I have worked there for almost two years.

The number '2' should be written as 'two' in formal text and needs a time unit ('years'). Present perfect 'have worked' is correct for an action continuing up to now; add 'years' to complete meaning. Suggestion: use 'I have worked there for almost two years.'

× Good job!

✓ (No correction needed: this is feedback from the examiner, not the student.)

This is examiner feedback rather than a student response, so no grammatical correction is required.

× Yes, I think so because. Uh, I can learn about the how to serve the dishes and also the English.

✓ Yes, I think so because I can learn how to serve dishes and improve my English.

The original has sentence fragmentation ('because.'), unnecessary article 'the' before 'how', and awkward phrasing 'the English'. Remove the extra period, delete 'the' before 'how', use 'dishes' without 'the' for general meaning, and replace 'also the English' with 'improve my English'. Suggestion: connect clauses and use 'how to serve dishes' and 'improve my English'.

× Yes, I I my place where I work because the building is brand new and the neighbors restaurant is very friendly.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because the building is brand new and the neighboring restaurant staff are very friendly.

The sentence has repetition 'I I' and missing verb after 'I'. 'Neighbors restaurant' needs possessive/adjective form 'neighboring restaurant' or 'neighbor's restaurant'. 'Very friendly' describes people; specify 'staff' to clarify. Use consistent singular/plural: 'staff are' or 'staff is' (plural commonly used). Suggestion: say 'I like the place where I work' and 'the neighboring restaurant staff are very friendly'.

× We can communicate friendly.

✓ We can communicate in a friendly way.

'Communicate' is a verb and should not be directly modified by the adjective 'friendly'; use an adverbial phrase such as 'in a friendly way' or 'friendly with each other' or 'communicate well'. Suggestion: use 'in a friendly way' or 'communicate well'.

× My future work plan is to work as an NGO staff member and I want to tackle with the human rights and for example, I'm interested in the England.

✓ My future plan is to work as an NGO staff member; I want to tackle human rights issues, and for example, I'm interested in England.

Several issues: 'tackle with' is incorrect—'tackle' does not require 'with'; use 'tackle human rights' or 'address human rights issues'. 'NGO staff member' is acceptable but 'my future plan' is more natural than 'my future work plan'. 'the England' incorrectly uses the definite article; country names usually take no article. Also streamline punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: say 'My future plan is to work as an NGO staff member. I want to address human rights issues, and for example, I'm interested in England.'

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

This is an examiner question; however, 'Would you like the place where you work?' can be interpreted as asking preference for a place in the future. The student's intended answer should respond to 'Do you like...' so use present simple 'Do you like the place where you work?'. Suggestion: respond to the question 'Do you like the place where you work?' using present simple.