Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: جوابك واضح لكن يحتوي على أخطاء نحوية وعبارات غير طبيعية. حاول استخدام زمن مناسب وعبارة واضحة لقول أنك تبحث عن عمل الآن. قل جملة موضوعية ثم تفاصيل قصيرة. تجنب كلمة "accidentally" لأن البحث عن عمل ليس صدفة؛ استخدم "actively" أو "currently". مثال على نقاط للتحسين: تصحيح الأزمنة، استخدام كلمة مناسبة، وتقليل الكلمات الزائدة.

예시: I have finished my studies and I am currently looking for a job. I am actively applying for positions related to my degree and preparing for interviews.

제안: إجابتك مباشرة ومفهومة لكن يمكن تحسين الروابط والأسلوب ليبدو أكثر طبيعيًا. ابدأ بجملة قصيرة ثم اذكر سبب وجودك في المنزل أو ماذا تفعل هناك. استخدم ربطًا بسيطًا مثل "so" أو "because" لتوضيح السبب.

예시: I don't work at the moment, so I'm at home most of the time. I use this time to update my CV and take online courses to improve my skills.

제안: الرد غير منطقي ومليء بأخطاء نحوية وكلمات غير مناسبة (مثل "Signs"). يجب الإجابة مباشرة: إن لم تكن تعمل، قل ذلك ثم توقع أو تذكر المعايير التي تجعل مكان العمل جيدًا. استخدم رابط مثل "but" لذكر توقعك أو تفضيلك.

예시: I don't work currently, so I can't judge a specific workplace. However, I hope to find a company with a friendly atmosphere and good opportunities for growth.

제안: الفكرة واضحة لكن تحتوي على أخطاء تركيبية وصرفية (مثلاً "fancy to work the places" و"a new skills"). استخدم تعابير أكثر طبيعية مثل "I'd like to work in" و"environmentally friendly" و"learn new skills". اذكر سببين محددين يدعمان إجابتك.

예시: I am not working yet, but I'd like to work in an environmentally friendly company where I can learn new skills and collaborate with a supportive team.

제안: الرد يحتوي على تكرار وأخطاء في الصياغة. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية واضحة حول خطتك ثم أضف تفاصيل محددة مثل المجال (marketing) ونوع الدور الذي ترغب به أو الخطوات التي تتخذها. استخدم روابط مثل "so" أو "by" لتوضيح الخطة.

예시: I plan to find a job related to my field of study, specifically in marketing. To achieve this, I'm taking online marketing courses and networking with professionals in the industry.

× I have finished my study but I don't work at the moment.

✓ I have finished my studies but I am not working at the moment.

The phrase 'have finished' is present perfect and is fine, but 'study' should be plural 'studies' for natural collocation. 'Don't work at the moment' is grammatically acceptable but 'am not working at the moment' better matches temporary current situation. Suggestion: use plural 'studies' and present continuous for temporary actions.

× I accidentally looking for a job.

✓ I am currently looking for a job.

The original sentence misses an auxiliary verb. After the subject 'I' you need a form of 'be' + verb-ing for present continuous. 'Accidentally' is incorrect in meaning; use 'currently' or 'currently' to express ongoing job search. Suggestion: use 'am looking' and choose the correct adverb (currently).

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The original contains an extraneous '>' character which is a punctuation error. Remove the '>' to form a proper question mark. Suggestion: ensure only correct punctuation is used.

× I don't work right now, I am at home most of the time.

✓ I don't work right now; I'm at home most of the time.

Comma splice joins two independent clauses with just a comma. Replace comma with a semicolon or a conjunction. Also contraction 'I'm' is natural. Suggestion: use ';' or 'and' to connect independent clauses.

× Signs I don't work yet I can't say, but I hope to find a good place soon.

✓ Since I don't work yet, I can't say, but I hope to find a good place soon.

The word 'Signs' is incorrect here; likely intended 'Since' or 'Because'. Also word order and clause linkage are off. Use a subordinating conjunction 'Since' at the start and a comma before the main clause. Suggestion: begin with 'Since' and keep clause order logical.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

This sentence is correct as written. No grammatical correction needed. Explanation: question form with modal 'would' is appropriate when asking about preference; no change required.

× I am not working yet, but I fancy to work the places where environmental friendly and I can learn a new skills.

✓ I am not working yet, but I would like to work in places that are environmentally friendly where I can learn new skills.

Errors: 'fancy to work' is incorrect; 'fancy' is followed by gerund or better use 'would like to'. Use 'work in places' not 'work the places'. 'Environmental friendly' should be 'environmentally friendly' (adverb + adjective). 'A new skills' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'new skills' or 'a new skill'. Suggestion: use 'would like to work in places that are environmentally friendly and where I can learn new skills.'

× I plan to find my job related to to my field for the study I I am interested working in marketing.

✓ I plan to find a job related to my field of study; I am interested in working in marketing.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'to to' and duplicate 'I I'. 'My job' sounds too specific; 'a job' is more natural. 'Related to my field of study' is the correct phrase. 'Interested working in marketing' needs preposition 'interested in' and 'working'. Also use semicolon or period to separate clauses. Suggestion: write 'a job related to my field of study' and 'I am interested in working in marketing.'