Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words like "umm" and unnecessary repetition. Check verb tenses (use present simple or present continuous appropriately) and reduce long compound sentences into simpler clauses linked by words like "and" or "so."

예시: I'm currently a student studying journalism and communication. I've been on this four-year course and next year I plan to do a master's in media studies in Malaysia, which I hope will open new career opportunities.

제안: Answer directly and naturally with correct grammar. Use a clear short sentence stating you don't work, then give a brief reason or additional detail if relevant. Avoid awkward phrasing like "doing a work."

예시: I don't work at the moment because I'm a full-time student. I focus on my coursework and internships instead.

제안: Provide a clear opinion with specific supporting reasons and correct article use. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete features that make it good (friendly staff, facilities, noise level).

예시: Yes, I think it's a good place to work because the environment is calm and well-organized. For example, there are quiet workspaces and helpful staff, so people can concentrate and feel comfortable.

제안: Clarify vocabulary ("encrypted" is incorrect here) and finish sentences. Use specific details about equipment and colleagues, and link ideas with connectors. Keep to two to three concise sentences and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, I like working there because my office is quiet and private, which helps me concentrate. The equipment is reliable and my colleagues are friendly and supportive, so teamwork is easy.

제안: Give a clear, direct statement of your future plans and one or two concrete reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use simple, correct structures: "I plan to..., because..." Mention a specific role or area you aim for to make your answer more concrete.

예시: In the future, I plan to work in media and communications, ideally as a content strategist or journalist. I want this because I value storytelling and I believe these skills are useful and in demand.

× Umm currently I'm a student, I'll be doing a course in journalism and communication for four years now.

✓ Umm currently I'm a student; I've been doing a course in journalism and communication for four years now.

The original mixes future 'I'll be doing' with 'for four years now', which indicates an action that started in the past and continues to present. Use the present perfect continuous ('have/has been + -ing') to show an action that began in the past and continues to now. Also replace the comma with a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'I've been doing a course... for four years' to express ongoing duration.

× I'm planning to study media studies and hope to go to Malaysia for my masters degree next year, which will open new doors in my life.

✓ I'm planning to study media studies and hope to go to Malaysia for my master's degree next year, which will open new doors in my life.

The sentence is mostly correct in tense but has an article/possessive error ('masters' should be 'master's'). The future intention 'hope to go... next year' is fine. Suggestion: use the possessive form 'master's degree' and consider adding 'a' before 'master's degree' if needed.

× No, I'm still a student so I'm not doing a work.

✓ No, I'm still a student so I'm not doing any work.

'Work' as an uncountable noun should not use the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'any work' for negative sentences when referring to work in general. Suggestion: say 'I'm not doing any work' or 'I don't have a job'.

× Yes, I think it's a good, good place because it has good environment to work.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place because it has a good environment to work in.

Repeating 'good' is unnecessary. 'Environment' needs the article 'a', and the verb 'work' requires the preposition 'in' to indicate location. Suggestion: 'a good environment to work in' or 'a good working environment'.

× Many people can feel comfortable in in theirs.

✓ Many people can feel comfortable there.

'In in theirs' is incorrect. 'There' is the correct adverb for place. 'Theirs' is a possessive pronoun and doesn't fit here. Suggestion: use 'there' or 'in it' depending on context.

× So comfortable environment.

✓ It has a very comfortable environment.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb; convert it to a full sentence. Use present simple 'has' to describe a general truth. Suggestion: 'It has a very comfortable environment' or 'The environment is very comfortable.'

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Would you like the place where you work?

This sentence is fine grammatically. No change needed. (Kept for completeness.)

× Uh, yes, I really like working there because my office is quiet and very encrypted, which helps me concentrate.

✓ Uh, yes, I really like working there because my office is quiet and well-equipped, which helps me concentrate.

'Encrypted' is incorrect in this context; it refers to encoded data. The intended meaning is likely 'equipped' or 'well-equipped'. 'Very' before 'well-equipped' is unnecessary; 'well-equipped' is the correct adjective. Suggestion: use 'well-equipped' to describe an office with necessary facilities.

× The computer and another tool are needed, are reliable and my colleagues are friendly and supported, so I usually.

✓ The computer and other tools I need are reliable, and my colleagues are friendly and supportive, so I usually enjoy working there.

The original has multiple issues: 'another tool' should be 'other tools' to match plural 'computer and tools'; 'are needed' is awkward — rephrase to 'I need'; 'supported' should be the adjective 'supportive' to describe colleagues; sentence ends abruptly 'so I usually.' Complete the thought, e.g., 'so I usually enjoy working there.' Suggestion: restructure to a clearer sentence with correct plural forms and adjectives.

× About my future work, I think I want to plan to work in the in the related field in my future about generalism and communication, because I think this I just check is useful and valuable so and continue to work in this field.

✓ About my future work, I plan to work in a related field in journalism and communication because I think it is useful and valuable, and I want to continue working in this field.

This sentence is wordy and contains repetition and incorrect word choices ('generalism', 'this I just check'). Remove redundant phrases, choose the correct field name ('journalism'), use 'a related field' for article correctness, and use present simple 'plan' for intention. Also use 'it is' instead of 'this I just check'. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and use standard collocations like 'journalism and communication' and 'continue working in this field'.