Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use correct grammar for negation and articles (e.g., "give gifts" not "give somebody a gifts").

例: Not really. I usually don't give gifts on special occasions because I prefer to show appreciation in other ways, like spending time with the person. For example, on a friend's birthday I might take them out for coffee instead of buying a present.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and then provide specific details. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "also") correctly and avoid repetition. Correct small grammar issues: say "on their birthdays" and be specific about "special days" you mean (e.g., anniversaries, holidays).

例: I usually give gifts on their birthdays because it is their special day. I also give presents on important occasions like anniversaries or holidays, for example, I buy a small gift for my sister on our parents' anniversary.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence then list considerations using linking phrases (e.g., "first", "second"). Be specific about what you mean by "quality" and "cost" and provide a short example. Reduce fillers like "uh" and repeated words.

例: I consider several factors when choosing a gift. First, the quality — I prefer something well made that will last. Second, the price — I usually choose affordable items because I don't like spending too much. For example, I often buy good-quality stationery or a book within a reasonable budget.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief reason and an example. Fix grammar: say "I'm not good at making things" and avoid trailing off. If you prefer buying, explain what you buy and why.

例: No, I haven't. I'm not good at making things because crafting is difficult for me, so I usually buy small presents like a mug or flowers instead. For example, I bought a nice notebook for a friend last year.

提案: State your opinion clearly with a topic sentence, then support it with reasons and a short example. Avoid slang and repeated words. Use correct comparative structure: "Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?" — respond with "No, I don't think so" and explain why.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. I believe personal effort and thought matter more; a meaningful, inexpensive gift or a handwritten note can show care more than an expensive item. For instance, my friend loved a homemade photo album I made more than any costly present.

× I'm not actually because I don't really give somebody a gifts in a special day, especially on birthday.

✓ I'm not, actually, because I don't really give somebody gifts on special days, especially on birthdays.

The sentence has article and number errors: 'a gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun. Use no article with plural 'gifts'. Also 'in a special day' is incorrect preposition and article use; use 'on special days' or 'on a special day'. I changed 'on birthday' to 'on birthdays' for general statements and adjusted punctuation for clarity.

× I think that give giving a present to somebody is important, but for me it's like for me the the best way to.

✓ I think that giving a present to somebody is important, but for me it's not the best way.

The sentence has repetition ('give giving', 'for me' twice) and an incomplete clause ending. I removed the extra words, corrected 'give giving' to 'giving', and completed the comparison with 'not the best way' to make the meaning clear. This fixes structure and clarity.

× I think mostly is in their birthday because it's their special day.

✓ I think mostly it's on their birthdays because it's their special day.

Verb inversion and article/preposition issues: 'mostly is in their birthday' is incorrect word order and uses 'in' instead of 'on'. For general habitual actions use plural 'birthdays' and say 'it's on their birthdays' or 'on their birthday' if referring to a specific person.

× They they are born on that day.

✓ They are born on that day.

The sentence repeats the pronoun 'They' twice. Remove the duplication to correct the pronoun usage. Also this sentence is acceptable if referring to people in general; otherwise 'someone is born on that day' could be used.

× So it's like a remarkable day to give them a present and I think also the special day off.

✓ So it's a special day to give them a present, and I also think it's a day off.

The original is fragmented and contains awkward phrasing ('the special day off'). I clarified meaning by making two coordinated clauses and supplying 'it's' before 'a day off'. If the speaker meant 'another special day', use that wording instead.

× There are many factors that I consider to buy gifts to someone, but uh, the first thing is how good is this? Like the quality?

✓ There are many factors I consider when buying gifts for someone, but the first is how good it is, like the quality.

'How good is this?' is a question form placed incorrectly in a statement; change to 'how good it is'. 'Consider to buy' is incorrect verb pattern; use 'consider when buying'. Also 'gifts to someone' should be 'gifts for someone'.

× And the second one I think is the cost because I, I don't spend much on gift, I think.

✓ And the second is the cost because I don't spend much on gifts, I think.

Reduce repetition ('I, I') and correct number: use plural 'gifts' not singular 'gift' when speaking generally. Also streamline the sentence for natural phrasing.

× Uh, no, I, I don't really good at like how making because it's, it's really hard for me.

✓ Uh, no, I'm not really good at making things because it's really hard for me.

Use 'I'm not good at' plus gerund 'making' to express ability. 'How making' is incorrect. Removed repetition and added 'things' for clarity. This fixes verb + -ing usage and subject-complement structure.

× I would rather to buy them, uh, a small gift or something else, But mostly I don't because.

✓ I would rather buy them a small gift or something else, but mostly I don't.

After 'would rather' use the base verb without 'to' ('rather buy', not 'rather to buy'). Also remove trailing incomplete clause. Fixed capitalization of 'But'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question is grammatical, but more natural phrasing is 'Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?' The original word order is slightly awkward; moving 'better' after the verb phrase is more idiomatic.

× Uh, I think not really because expense expensive gifts is I just like think that you, you buy and this one's so hard, bro.

✓ Uh, I don't think so, because expensive gifts don't necessarily express feelings; I just think buying them is difficult.

Multiple issues: 'expense expensive' is incorrect repetition; 'is I just like think' is ungrammatical. I rephrased to a clear negative opinion using 'don't think so' and corrected subject-verb agreement with 'gifts don't necessarily express'. Removed informal filler 'bro' for formal response. This addresses adjective misuse and sentence structure.