Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并减少重复，句子结构应更自然，使用连词使表述连贯。例如先给出主句表明态度，然后简要举例说明原因并用一两句补充细节。注意代词与时态一致。

例: Not really. I often hesitate when choosing gifts because I’m not sure what would suit my friends or when to give it, which makes the situation awkward. For example, I sometimes miss the right moment and end up feeling embarrassed.

提案: 回答较清楚，但注意时态一致与句子长度控制，避免信息过多导致冗长。用连接词（for example, and sometimes）让内容更连贯，并在细节上更精确（例如具体礼物类型或习俗）。

例: I usually give gifts on my friends’ birthdays because it’s a special day to celebrate them. We often have dinner together and sometimes exchange small presents. Also, when we return from a trip, we bring souvenirs from our hometown as gifts.

提案: 回答要更自然并避免语法错误与重复词汇。直接回答后用具体原因或例子支持，避免模糊表述。此外避免绝对化词“only”，可以说明这是你的倾向并解释原因。

例: I usually consider the recipient’s preferences and my budget. Personally, I tend to look at price because some of my friends value expensive items, although I know usefulness can be more important for others.

提案: 回答要简洁并避免重复填充词（umm, uh）。说明经历时按时间顺序叙述并给出具体细节或感受，例如为什么没做完以及从中学到的教训，结尾可简短反思。

例: Yes, once I tried to make a handmade gift but couldn’t finish it because it was harder than I expected. I gave the incomplete item to a friend and it wasn’t well received, which taught me to start earlier or choose simpler projects.

提案: 观点明确且有理由，但语言需要更礼貌和精准，避免过于口语或带情绪的词（rubbish）。可用比较句和例子支持观点，并用连接词使逻辑更流畅。

例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts necessarily show more feeling. I prefer practical presents that I can use, because something that looks impressive but isn’t useful won’t mean much to me. For example, I’d rather receive a quality kitchen tool than an overpriced decorative item.

× No, whenever I face the problem which is giving the gifts to my friends, I always hesitate because I don't know which one is very suitable for her as her birthday gift and I cannot choose the proper time to give her. Always be very embarrassing.

✓ No. Whenever I face the problem of giving gifts to my friends, I always hesitate because I don't know which one is suitable for her birthday and I cannot choose the proper time to give it to her. It is always very embarrassing.

句子结构不清晰，存在冗长和不正确的从句连接。需要将“the problem which is giving the gifts to my friends”改为更自然的“the problem of giving gifts to my friends”；“which one is very suitable for her as her birthday gift”应简化为“which one is suitable for her birthday”；“Always be very embarrassing”缺少主语和谓语，改为完整句“It is always very embarrassing”。建议把长句拆分为短句，使主谓更明确。

× I usually gave a gift to my friends on their birthday because it's the most important day to celebrate them.

✓ I usually give a gift to my friends on their birthdays because it's the most important day to celebrate them.

句中描述是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时而不是一般过去时。把“gave”改为“give”。另外“birthday”应使用复数“birthdays”以对应多位朋友的生日。建议将描述习惯的动词用一般现在时。

× We often have dinner together on that day and sometimes we send the presents to each other.

✓ We often have dinner together on that day and sometimes we give presents to each other.

动词“send the presents”语义不自然，送礼通常用“give”。原句时态为习惯性行为，使用一般现在时“have”“give”是正确的。建议用更自然的动词搭配。

× When we end our vacation and come back to live together, we will take some gifts as the symbol of our hometown.

✓ When our vacation ends and we return to live together, we take some gifts as symbols of our hometown.

原句时态混用（将来时“will take”与时间状语“when”搭配显得不自然）且“take some gifts as the symbol”中“the symbol”应为复数“symbols”或去掉冠词。改为一般现在时表示常规做法，并修改为复数或去定冠词。建议保持时态一致并注意可数名词的单复数。

× That only depends on the price of the gifts.

✓ That only depends on the price of the gifts.

该句语法本身可接受，但上下文更自然的表达是“That only depends on the price of the gift”或“depends only on the price”，不过不在必须修改之列。这里保留原句。

× Instead of considering about the, umm, quality, I more care about about the gift's price because my friends prefer the expensive gifts rather than useful things.

✓ Instead of considering the quality, I care more about the gift's price because my friends prefer expensive gifts to useful things.

短语“considering about”结构错误，动词consider后不加介词“about”；“I more care about about”词序与重复介词错误，应为“I care more about”；“prefer the expensive gifts rather than useful things”搭配错误，中文通常用“prefer A to B”，并且不需要定冠词“the”。建议去掉多余介词，调整词序并使用正确的比较搭配“prefer A to B”。

× Yes, but I only gave her half made because that's very difficult for me to consider the uh made reference.

✓ Yes, but I only gave her something half-made because it was very difficult for me to follow a reference.

原句时态和表达混乱。描述过去的经历应使用过去时，但“that's very difficult”应改为过去“It was very difficult”。“half made”用作形容词应连字符“half-made”；“consider the uh made reference”不自然，改为“follow a reference”更清晰。建议把过去经历统一用过去时并使用合适动词。

× I have the difficulties umm to finish the whole gift.

✓ I had difficulty finishing the whole gift.

语序和表达不自然。“have the difficulties to finish”应改为更地道的“had difficulty finishing”；保持过去时与前句一致。建议用固定搭配“have difficulty (in) doing”并在叙述过去事件时用过去时。

× So I just finished half of the gift and gave her umm and then she threw it away.

✓ So I only finished half of the gift and gave it to her, and then she threw it away.

代词使用错误和不完整表达。“gave her”后应有宾语或改为“gave it to her”以表示把礼物给了她。保持过去时一致。建议使用完整的及物结构“give something to someone”。

× No, I don't think so, because just for me I prefer the gift which is useful for me and I think the gifts which is only expensive and have having good appearance but not useful is just like rubbish.

✓ No, I don't think so, because for me I prefer gifts that are useful. I think gifts that are only expensive and have a good appearance but are not useful are just like rubbish.

原句存在从句结构混乱、主谓不一致和冗长表达。“just for me”位置不自然，改为“for me”；“the gift which is useful for me”改为复数泛指“gifts that are useful”；“which is only expensive and have having good appearance but not useful”存在主谓不一致和错误形式（have having），应改为“that are only expensive and have a good appearance but are not useful”。建议拆分为两句，保持主谓一致并修正非谓语形式。

× So it's not proper.

✓ So it's not appropriate.

“not proper”虽能理解，但更自然的搭配是“not appropriate”或“not suitable”。此处为词汇搭配建议以使表达更地道，句子结构本身无重大错误。