Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容は質問に直接答えており、理由と経験も含まれているため、基本構成は良好です。ただし、「prefer not keep」は文法的に誤りなので、「prefer not to keep」または「would rather not keep」とします。また、「it died quickly」は植物を指しているため、「the plant died quickly」と言うとより明確です。最後の文は「for now」を使えており自然ですが、接続を少し滑らかにするとさらに効果的です。

例: No, I don’t keep any plants at home because I’m not very good at looking after them. I tried growing one before, but the plant died quite quickly. Since then, I’ve preferred not to keep plants, at least for now.

提案: 子どもの頃の経験と具体的な行動を説明できていますが、語彙と文法に不自然な部分が多くあります。「the trees of cherry blossom」ではなく、「a cherry blossom tree」または「a cherry tree」と言います。また、「Cherry blossom is very beautiful, beautiful plant」は重複しているため、「Cherry blossoms are beautiful flowers」などに整理してください。「watching the flowers up in the sky」は不自然なので、「watching the flowers bloom」または「watching the blossoms open」と表現すると適切です。

例: When I was in elementary school, I grew a cherry blossom tree. It was a beautiful plant and fairly easy for children to look after. I remember watering it every morning and watching the blossoms bloom in spring.

提案: 基本的な知識を答えようとしていますが、文の構造が不明確で、後半の「valuable for wind and high and high and a low temperature」は意味が伝わりにくくなっています。「growing a plant need」は主語と動詞の一致が必要なので、「growing a plant needs」または「plants need」とします。水と日光について述べた後、温度については「protection from strong wind and extreme temperatures」のように具体的に説明してください。不要な「so and」や同じ語の繰り返しを避け、2〜3文に分けると明瞭です。

例: I don’t know a great deal about growing plants, but I know that they need the right amount of water and sunlight. They also need suitable soil and protection from strong winds and extreme temperatures. Different plants require different levels of care.

提案: 中国について自信がないことを示しつつ、知っている日本の習慣と比較して答えている点は良いです。ただし、「Japan Chinese customs」は不自然なので、「Chinese customs」または「customs in China」とします。また、質問は植物について尋ねているため、花だけでなく「potted plants」や「orchids」などの鉢植えにも触れると、より直接的で具体的になります。「so Imagine」は大文字・語法ともに不適切なので、「so I imagine that...」としてください。

例: I’m not completely sure about customs in China, but I think people sometimes give plants as gifts. In Japan, flowers and potted plants are popular presents for birthdays and other special occasions. Since these gifts are common in many countries, I imagine the tradition is similar in China.

× When I was in elementary school, I grew the trees of cherry blossom.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I grew a cherry blossom tree.

The singular noun tree is appropriate because the student later refers to the plant with the singular pronoun it. The phrase trees of cherry blossom is unnatural and incorrectly uses the plural form in this context.

× Cherry blossom is very beautiful, beautiful plant and it was easy to grow so it was suitable for children to grow.

✓ A cherry blossom tree is a very beautiful plant, and it was easy to grow, so it was suitable for children.

The singular countable nouns tree and plant need articles. Use a before a cherry blossom tree and a very beautiful plant. The repeated phrase to grow is unnecessary after suitable for children.

× I don't know much about it but growing a plant need proper amount of water and sunlight so and they are valuable for wind and high and high and a low temperature.

✓ I don't know much about it, but growing a plant needs a proper amount of water and sunlight, and plants are valuable for reducing the effects of high and low temperatures.

The subject growing a plant is singular, so the verb must be needs, not need. The pronoun they cannot refer clearly to the singular subject growing a plant, so plants is used for a clear plural subject.

× I don't know much about it but growing a plant need proper amount of water and sunlight so and they are valuable for wind and high and high and a low temperature.

✓ I don't know much about it, but growing a plant needs a proper amount of water and sunlight, and plants are valuable for reducing the effects of high and low temperatures.

Proper amount is a singular countable noun phrase and therefore needs the article a: a proper amount. The phrase high and high and a low temperature is also corrected to the grammatically parallel phrase high and low temperatures.

× I don't know much about it but growing a plant need proper amount of water and sunlight so and they are valuable for wind and high and high and a low temperature.

✓ I don't know much about it, but growing a plant needs a proper amount of water and sunlight, and plants are valuable for reducing the effects of high and low temperatures.

So and cannot be used together as coordinating conjunctions in this sentence. Use and to connect the two related ideas. Also, use commas to separate the clauses more clearly.

× I don't know much about it but growing a plant need proper amount of water and sunlight so and they are valuable for wind and high and high and a low temperature.

✓ I don't know much about it, but growing a plant needs a proper amount of water and sunlight, and plants are valuable for reducing the effects of high and low temperatures.

The pronoun they should have a clear plural antecedent. Because the sentence is discussing plants in general, the noun plants is clearer and agrees with the plural meaning.

× I'm not sure about Japan Chinese customs, but in Japan many people give flowers as gifts for birthdays or Valentine's Day.

✓ I'm not sure about Chinese customs in Japan, but many people in Japan give flowers as gifts for birthdays or Valentine's Day.

Use in Japan to show where the customs or people are located. The phrase Japan Chinese customs has an incorrect word order and does not clearly express the intended relationship.