Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct repetition and pluralization, and give one or two supporting details (where you keep them or how you care for them). Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I do. I have a few small flowering plants and a couple of aloe vera plants in my living room. I usually keep them near the window so they get enough sunlight, and I water them once a week.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence and correct verb forms. Explain briefly what you did and add a specific detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and avoid word order mistakes.

例: At school we learned how to grow beans, so as a child I only planted beans. We used small cups to germinate the seeds and watched them sprout every day, which helped me learn about plant growth.

提案: Answer directly and confidently. Use correct grammar and reduce fillers. State what you know or don’t know, then give specific simple details about basic care you can do (watering, sunlight, fertilizing). Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast points.

例: I don't know much about advanced plant care, but I can do basic things. For example, I water them regularly, make sure they get enough light, and use a mild fertilizer or pesticide if needed.

提案: Be more precise and avoid hesitations. Give a clear opinion and one or two supporting reasons or examples. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'send plants as gifts', 'popular in China', 'people give flowers to loved ones').

例: Yes, many Chinese people give plants or flowers as gifts, especially for celebrations. Flowers are a common choice for birthdays or festivals, while potted plants are popular for housewarmings because they symbolise good luck.

× Yes I I have a small flowers and some aloe Veras.

✓ Yes, I have a small flowerpot with some aloe vera plants.

The original mixes singular and plural incorrectly: 'a small flowers' is wrong because 'a' requires a singular noun. 'Aloe Veras' is incorrect pluralization and capitalization; the uncountable/plural form is 'aloe vera' or 'aloe vera plants'. Also added 'flowerpot' to make 'small' appropriate. Suggestion: match articles with noun number (use 'a' + singular or no article + plural) and use correct form 'aloe vera' or 'aloe vera plants'.

× When I was a child in my school teachers and shop to how to grow the beans.

✓ When I was a child, my school teachers showed us how to grow beans.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms and word order. 'Shop to' is garbled; 'showed' is the correct past tense of 'show'. 'Beans' as a general plural does not need 'the'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and correct verb 'showed'.

× So when I was child I only grow to bean.

✓ So when I was a child, I only grew beans.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child', incorrect verb tense 'grow' instead of past 'grew', and incorrect use of 'to' and singular 'bean' instead of plural 'beans'. Suggestion: include articles, use past tense for past events, and pluralize when referring generally to more than one or to the activity of growing beans.

× I don't know what I'm gonna really do for the uh, flowers or other plants, but I only, uh, prefer to. I only prefer to do like, uh, feeding with the water and protect a medicine I can use only.

✓ I don't really know what to do for flowers or other plants, but I prefer to water them and use only protective medicine when necessary.

Problems include informal 'gonna', awkward word order, and incorrect verb forms ('feeding with the water', 'protect a medicine'). Rewritten to proper structure: 'don't really know what to do', 'prefer to water them', and 'use protective medicine'. Suggestion: avoid colloquial contractions in formal speech, use correct verb-noun collocations (water plants, use medicine), and simplify to clear actions.

× Umm, yes, uh, this is very popular in the world, so people want and give to give the gift for them, their loves, lovers or their uh, families.

✓ Yes, this is very popular around the world, so people like to give plants as gifts to their loved ones or families.

Issues: 'in the world' is better as 'around the world'; 'want and give to give the gift for them' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'their loves, lovers' is incorrect phrase. Correct prepositions: 'around the world', 'give plants as gifts to'. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and proper prepositional phrases ('give X as gifts to Y').

× They uh, first choice is a a flowers.

✓ Their first choice is flowers.

Problems: 'They first choice' should be 'Their first choice' (possessive pronoun), 'is a a flowers' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'flowers'. Use either 'a flower' or 'flowers' without 'a'. Suggestion: match articles and noun number and correct pronoun spelling.