Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Use a clearer topic sentence and specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., "make the air fresher"). Limit to 3–4 well-connected sentences using linking words.

例: Yes, I keep several houseplants in my apartment because caring for them helps me relax. For example, my spider plant and pothos improve the air quality and brighten the living room. Also, I sometimes give small potted plants as gifts to friends because they are long-lasting and meaningful.

提案: Begin with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid long, unfocused sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "I didn't have the opportunity"; "for these kinds of things").

例: I didn't grow any plants when I was young because we lived in a small apartment without outdoor space. Besides, I felt that gardening needs a garden, so I didn't try to grow anything indoors at that time.

提案: Provide a short direct answer and then add a specific detail or example about what you don't know or what you'd like to learn. Avoid repeating the same idea and remove filler words.

例: Not much, unfortunately. Because I never had space to practice, I don't know how to repot plants or manage watering schedules, but I would like to learn basic care techniques like pruning and soil choice.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples of occasions and types of plants. Improve grammar and fluency (e.g., "plants are a symbol of freshness and life"). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, many Chinese people give plants as gifts because they symbolize freshness and new life. For instance, people bring potted orchids or lucky bamboo to housewarmings, celebrations, or business openings as a gesture of good wishes.

× Yes, I enjoy keeping plants in my apartment because it makes me feel uh, relieved when I take care of them and also they uh, make the air more fresher and they are very good gifts.

✓ Yes, I enjoy keeping plants in my apartment because they make me feel relieved when I take care of them, they make the air fresher, and they are very good gifts.

The phrase 'make me feel relieved' is correct but redundant 'uh' should be omitted for clarity. 'More fresher' is incorrect because 'fresher' is already a comparative; do not use 'more' with comparative adjectives. Also avoid pronoun confusion by using 'they' to refer to plants consistently and join clauses with commas and conjunctions for natural flow. Suggestion: remove filler words and use 'fresher' rather than 'more fresher'.

× I have been living in an apartment since I was a child, so I didn't have opportunity to grow a plant because I think it is better to have a place like a garden for this kind of things.

✓ I have been living in an apartment since I was a child, so I didn't have the opportunity to grow plants because I think it is better to have a place like a garden for these kinds of things.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have been living') with past simple correctly but needs article and number corrections: 'didn't have opportunity' requires the definite article 'the'. 'A plant' is fine but 'plants' fits general meaning. 'This kind of things' is ungrammatical: use 'these kinds of things' or 'this kind of thing'. Suggestion: add 'the', use plural 'plants' or 'a plant' consistently, and change 'this kind of things' to 'these kinds of things' or 'this kind of thing'.

× No, I don't. As I mentioned in the previous question, I didn't have a place for growing anything. So uh, as I don't have it, I don't know anything about growing or gardening either.

✓ No, I don't. As I mentioned in the previous question, I didn't have a place to grow anything. So, since I don't have one, I don't know anything about growing or gardening either.

Use 'a place to grow anything' rather than 'a place for growing anything' for natural English. 'As I don't have it' is vague; use 'since I don't have one' to refer back to 'a place'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: prefer 'a place to grow' and use a clear pronoun 'one' when referring to 'place'.

× Yes they do because plants are symbol of uh, freshness and life. So there are very appropriate gifts when you are going to someone house or maybe it's special occasion or opening a company.

✓ Yes, they do, because plants are a symbol of freshness and life. They are very appropriate gifts when you are going to someone's house, for a special occasion, or for a company opening.

Missing article: use 'a symbol'. Add comma after 'Yes, they do'. 'Going to someone house' needs possessive: 'someone's house'. 'It's special occasion' should be 'a special occasion'. 'Opening a company' is awkward for gifting context; 'company opening' or 'for a company opening' is clearer. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: add articles where needed and use possessive forms and natural prepositional phrases like 'for a special occasion' or 'for a company opening'.