Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise, correct minor grammar, and add one specific detail. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I keep several flowering and vegetable plants in my backyard. However, recently I haven't had much time to tend them because I’ve been busy with work, so I water them only on weekends now.

提案: Start with a full topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific example and a linking phrase to connect ideas. Correct small mistakes and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: When I was young, I mainly grew flowering plants, especially marigolds and roses. I learned a lot from my grandmother, who had a beautiful garden and taught me how to care for them.

提案: Provide a clearer, more confident topic sentence, remove filler words, and specify one or two concrete things you know. Use linking words like 'for example' to make it coherent.

例: I don’t know advanced horticulture, but I understand basic care, for example how often to water and when to apply fertilizer. I usually look up specific treatments online when a plant shows problems.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples or cultural reasons. Correct collocations ('especially' not 'specially') and avoid vague phrasing like 'less special life event'.

例: Yes, many Chinese people give plants as gifts, especially potted flowers for birthdays and graduations. For instance, orchids are popular because they symbolize refinement and good luck.

× Yes, I have few flower plants and vegetable plants in my backyard.

✓ Yes, I have a few flower plants and some vegetable plants in my backyard.

Use 'a few' for a small but nonzero number; 'few' without 'a' implies almost none. Also adding 'some' before 'vegetable plants' improves parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'a few' for positive statements about small quantities.

× I love growing plants but these days I do not have much time to spend time with those plants.

✓ I love growing plants but these days I do not have much time to spend with them.

Redundant 'time' after 'spend' is incorrect; 'spend time with them' is the correct phrase. Also replace 'those plants' with 'them' for natural reference. Suggestion: use 'spend time with' + object, avoid repetition.

× Mostly flower plants.

✓ Mostly I grew flower plants.

Fragment lacking subject and verb. In response to 'What plant did you grow when you were young?' past tense is required. Adding subject 'I' and past verb 'grew' fixes sentence structure. Suggestion: provide a full clause matching the question's past tense.

× I like to grow different colour types of flowers, especially with different colours.

✓ I like to grow flowers of different colors, especially various colors.

Phrase 'different colour types of flowers' is awkward; use 'flowers of different colors'. 'With different colours' is redundant. Suggestion: simplify to 'flowers of different colors' or 'different colored flowers.' Note: use American or British spelling consistently.

× When I was young I spent my time with my my grandmother who had a beautiful flower garden.

✓ When I was young, I spent time with my grandmother, who had a beautiful flower garden.

Duplicate 'my' is a typo; 'spent my time' is less natural than 'spent time' here. Add commas for clause separation. Suggestion: remove duplication and use 'spent time with' + person.

× I do not know much details, but I am aware about the basic details and I like to search uh through the Internet about different treatments which we should do to grow a plant properly.

✓ I do not know many details, but I am aware of the basic ones, and I like to search the Internet for different treatments we should use to grow a plant properly.

'Much details' should be 'many details' (countable). 'Aware about' should be 'aware of'. 'Search through the Internet' is awkward; use 'search the Internet' or 'search online'. Use 'for' before 'different treatments'. 'Which we should do' changed to 'we should use' or 'we should do' depending, but 'use' is clearer here. Suggestion: correct quantifier, preposition, and article use; simplify phrasing.

× Yes, Chinese people like to gift plants as a present for their family or friends, specially when it's someone's birthday or less special life event like the graduation.

✓ Yes, Chinese people like to give plants as presents to family or friends, especially for birthdays or less significant life events like graduation.

'Gift' used as a verb is acceptable but 'give' is more natural here; 'as a present' -> 'as presents' (plural/general). Use 'to' for recipients. 'Specially' is incorrect; use 'especially'. 'Someone's birthday' generalizes to 'birthdays'. 'The graduation' should be 'graduation' without article. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'give plants as presents to family or friends, especially for birthdays or events like graduation.'

× People like to gift flower plants.

✓ People like to give flower plants as gifts.

Word order and verb choice: 'gift' as verb is less natural; 'give' with 'as gifts' clarifies meaning. Alternatively 'People like to give flowering plants.' Suggestion: use 'flowering plants' or 'flower plants' and 'give...as gifts' for natural expression.