Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 응답은 자연스럽지만 중복 표현과 구문 오류가 있어 점수를 낮출 수 있습니다. (1) 'Yeah'를 반복하지 말고 대신 다른 연결어나 바로 본문을 시작하세요. (2) 문장을 조금 더 구체적으로 확장하세요(예: 어떤 식물인지, 몇 개 있는지, 어디에 두는지). (3) 최대 5문장 이내로 간결하게 구성하고 토픽 문장 후 세부사항은 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어가세요.

例: Yes, I keep several houseplants, including small trees and flowering plants. For example, I have a ficus tree by the window and a few potted geraniums on the balcony. Having them around helps me relax after work because watering and pruning feels calming.

提案: 내용은 좋지만 문법과 유창성에서 개선이 필요합니다. (1) 'rubber trees that has been'의 주어-동사 일치 오류를 고치세요('that has been' → 'that has been' 경우 단수로 맞춰야 함). (2) 말의 흐름에서 'uh' 같은 채움음은 줄이세요. (3) 세부사항을 연결어로 더 명확히 연결하고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요.

例: I grew up with a rubber tree that has been in my family since I was a toddler; it’s now about ten years old. I was very attached to it and looked after it carefully, regularly watering it and trimming the leaves to keep it healthy.

提案: 답변의 정보가 흥미롭지만 정확성과 문법에 문제가 있습니다. (1) 'use water, not filtered water'는 의미가 모호하므로 'tap water vs filtered water'처럼 구체적으로 표현하세요. (2) 'minerals like calcium, magnesium that helps'에서 관계대명사와 동사 수일치를 고치세요('that help'). (3) 가능한 경우 경험이나 예시를 덧붙여 신뢰도를 높이세요.

例: I don't know much about plant care, but I’ve heard that tap water can be better than heavily filtered water because tap water often contains minerals like calcium and magnesium that help plants grow. For instance, my neighbour noticed that her plants did better when she stopped using distilled water.

提案: 응답이 솔직하지만 표현과 문장구조가 부자연스럽습니다. (1) 'I don't know well' 대신 'I'm not sure'로 자연스럽게 말하세요. (2) 'be they helps' 등의 문법 오류를 수정하세요(예: 'because plants can help people relax or give a sense of accomplishment'). (3) 가능한 경우 간단한 비교나 이유를 한두 문장으로 정리하세요.

例: I'm not sure, as I'm not Chinese, but I think they sometimes give plants as gifts. Plants make thoughtful presents because they can help people relax and give them a sense of accomplishment when they grow well.

× Uh, I grew up with, uh, rubber trees that has been in my family since I was a toddler.

✓ Uh, I grew up with, uh, a rubber tree that has been in my family since I was a toddler.

The original sentence has two issues: article/number and verb agreement. 'Rubber trees' (plural) conflicts with 'has been' (singular verb). The intended meaning is one tree that has been in the family, so use the singular noun 'a rubber tree' and the singular verb 'has been'. If you meant multiple trees, change verb to 'have been'. Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and match the auxiliary verb accordingly.

× It's about 10 years old.

✓ It's about 10 years old.

This sentence is grammatical. It correctly uses the present tense 'is' to describe the current age of the tree. No change needed.

× When I was a child, I was really attached to it and looked after it very carefully, like watering it regularly and yeah, trimming its leaves.

✓ When I was a child, I was really attached to it and looked after it very carefully, watering it regularly and trimming its leaves.

The original sentence is understandable but slightly informal with redundant phrasing ('like watering... and yeah, trimming'). Combining actions with the same subject using participle phrases ('watering... and trimming') is more natural. Tense is consistent (past) so keep 'looked after' and the participles for the repeating actions.

× I don't know much about growing plants, but I heard that when you water plants it's better to use water, not filtered water because in filtered water there are no minerals like calcium, magnesium that helps plants to grow.

✓ I don't know much about growing plants, but I heard that when you water plants it's better to use tap water, not filtered water, because filtered water doesn't contain minerals like calcium and magnesium that help plants grow.

Multiple issues: article/word choice and verb agreement. 'Use water, not filtered water' is vague; 'tap water' is clearer. 'In filtered water there are no minerals' is awkward; rephrase 'filtered water doesn't contain minerals'. Also 'minerals ... that helps plants to grow' mixes plural subject 'minerals' with singular verb 'helps' — change to 'help'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'grow'.

× I don't know well because I'm not a Chinese, but I think they might.

✓ I don't know for sure because I'm not Chinese, but I think they might.

'Not a Chinese' is incorrect; 'Chinese' as a nationality adjective should be used without 'a' here ('I'm not Chinese'). 'I don't know well' is unnatural; use 'I don't know for sure'. The rest is fine.

× But because plants are a great gift, be they helps people to feel relaxed or makes them feel sense of accomplishment.

✓ But because plants are a great gift, they can help people feel relaxed or give them a sense of accomplishment.

Original has several errors: 'be they helps' is ungrammatical and mixes forms. Use a clear clause: 'they can help people feel relaxed' (correct verb 'help' with base verb 'feel') and 'give them a sense of accomplishment' (natural verb 'give' + 'a sense of'). Also 'makes them feel sense of accomplishment' is ungrammatical; use 'give them a sense of accomplishment'.