Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise by using a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrases like "so many" and reduce repetition. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "varied" or "brightly coloured") and include a brief reason for your feeling to add depth.

例: Yes, I do. We have a small garden with brightly coloured flowers, including roses and marigolds. I enjoy spending time there because the plants make the house feel lively and help me relax after a long day.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and give specific details (age as "when I was 14" rather than "in 14 years"). Use linking words such as "because" and "nowadays" correctly, and avoid redundant phrases like "too easy to plant them." Clarify the switch from vegetables to flowers with a brief reason.

例: When I was about 14, I grew vegetables like tomatoes and potatoes because they are easy to cultivate and produce quick results. Nowadays I focus on flowers instead, mainly because they brighten the garden and require less maintenance.

提案: Use grammatically correct, natural phrasing and be specific about your experience. Replace informal or incorrect phrases ("not that too much", "done a few fatal issues") with clearer expressions ("not much", "made some mistakes"). Give one or two concrete examples and link them with words like "for example" or "for instance."

例: I know a little about growing plants, but I'm still learning. For instance, when I first started I made mistakes such as forgetting to water them regularly and missing pest treatments, which damaged some plants. Since then I've set reminders and learned basic watering schedules.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion, avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use hedging language if unsure ("I'm not certain"), then provide a culturally informed or logical reason. Correct mistakes like "haven't see" to "haven't seen" and remove duplicate words.

例: I'm not certain, as I haven't seen much about this tradition. However, I believe people in China do sometimes give plants or potted flowers as gifts, especially for housewarmings or to wish someone good fortune.

× It has so many flowers with different colors.

✓ It has so many flowers of different colors.

Using 'with' is not wrong but 'of different colors' is more natural English to describe attribute of the flowers; this fixes phrasing rather than number. Suggestion: use 'of' to link quantity to attribute.

× I feel happy when I see these flowers.

✓ I feel happy when I see the flowers.

Plural 'these flowers' is okay, but in context 'the flowers' is more natural because speaker refers to garden flowers generally. No tense change needed; this is a clarity/style improvement.

× I used to plant some tomatoes and potatoes because they were too easy to plant them.

✓ I used to plant tomatoes and potatoes because they were very easy to grow.

Remove redundant 'them' after 'plant' and use 'grow' to describe cultivation; 'were very easy' correctly uses past tense for habitual past. Also 'some' can be omitted for general statement. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb and avoid doubling object pronouns.

× It was when I was in 14 years.

✓ It was when I was 14 years old.

English uses 'at' or no preposition with ages: 'when I was 14' or 'when I was 14 years old.' 'in 14 years' is incorrect. Suggestion: say 'when I was 14.'

× However, nowadays I just keep using flowers only.

✓ Nowadays I only grow flowers.

Redundant 'just' and 'only' used together; 'keep using' is unnatural for plants. Place 'only' before the verb phrase: 'only grow flowers.' Suggestion: use simple verb 'grow' and avoid double negatives/redundancy.

× Yes I do, but not that too much.

✓ Yes, I do, but not very much.

'Not that too much' is ungrammatical; use 'not very much' or 'not that much' to quantify limited knowledge. Suggestion: use standard quantifier phrases.

× However I remember when I started to do planting I accidentally done a few fatal issues like forgetting to give them some water and sometimes forget to give them pesticide.

✓ However, I remember when I started planting I accidentally made a few serious mistakes, like forgetting to water them and sometimes forgetting to give them pesticide.

'Done a few fatal issues' is incorrect: use 'made mistakes.' 'Done' is wrong past participle here. Use parallel gerunds 'forgetting to water' and 'forgetting to give.' 'Fatal' is too strong; 'serious' or 'bad' is better. Suggestion: use 'made mistakes' and parallel structure.

× I didn't know because I haven't been exposed to this culture and I haven't see any documentary about it.

✓ I don't know because I haven't been exposed to this culture and I haven't seen any documentary about it.

Mix of past and present perfect incorrect: 'didn't know' should be 'don't know' to express present lack of knowledge. Also 'see' must be past participle 'seen' after 'have.' Suggestion: use present simple for current knowledge and present perfect for experiences.

× So I think yes, as any other people, they they might grow in some plants and sometimes give it.

✓ So I think yes, like other people, they might grow some plants and sometimes give them as gifts.

Repeated 'they they' is typographical error. 'Grow in some plants' is wrong preposition; use 'grow some plants.' 'Give it' should agree in number with 'plants' so use 'give them' and clarify 'as gifts.' Suggestion: correct pronoun repetition, preposition, and pronoun agreement.