Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表現を明確にし、誤用や語順の誤りを直してください。アレルギーや望みを述べる際は単語の選択を正しくし、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。例えば“France”や“birth mother”“raw allergy plants”“radius”は不適切です。短く直接的な主文（I don't keep plants because...）を使い、その後に理由と希望をつなげる接続表現（but / however）を使ってください。

例: I don't keep plants at home because my family and I are allergic. However, I would like to have low-allergy plants, such as tulips, if allergies weren't an issue.

提案: 時制と語順、語彙の誤りを直してください。過去の出来事なので過去形を使い、余分な語は省き、具体的な理由を明確に述べましょう。また同じ語の重複や聞き取りにくい表現（drips, graduate students）を修正してください。

例: When I was in elementary school, we grew tulips in class because our teacher wanted to decorate the graduation ceremony.

提案: 語彙ミス（prawns → plants）と矛盾する文を直してください。水やりの頻度や方法について具体的に説明し、接続詞で理由を明確にしましょう。また語句は簡潔にして文数を抑えてください。

例: I know a bit about growing plants. I water them regularly but not too often, because overwatering can damage the roots. I also check the soil moisture and make sure they get enough sunlight.

提案: 文化的な説明は明確な主語と簡潔な文で述べてください。誤った語順や不自然な表現（send you rather the gift, applied the blooms to cerebral）を避け、一般化する際は具体例を一つか二つ挙げると説得力が増します。

例: Yes, Chinese people often give plants or flowers as gifts to family and friends for occasions like birthdays or housewarmings, because they are seen as symbols of good wishes and relaxation.

× I don't keep France at home because the birth mother and I have allergies.

✓ I don't keep plants at home because my birth mother and I have allergies.

The speaker used 'France' instead of 'plants', likely a vocabulary error; also 'the birth mother' is unnatural - 'my birth mother' is correct possessive pronoun use. Correcting to 'plants' and 'my birth mother' fixes pronoun and noun choice errors. Suggestions: use correct nouns and possessive pronouns (my, his, her) to show ownership.

× However, I would like to have some raw allergy plants such as Tulip if our radius were not a problem.

✓ However, I would like to have some low-allergy plants such as tulips if allergies were not a problem.

'Raw allergy' is incorrect adjective order and choice; 'low-allergy' or 'hypoallergenic' describes plants that cause fewer allergies. 'Tulip' should be plural 'tulips' when speaking generally. 'Our radius' is incorrect word; likely meant 'allergies' or 'the issue'. Suggestions: choose appropriate adjectives (low-allergy, hypoallergenic), use plural for general statements about types (tulips), and use correct nouns for the problem.

× When I was elementary school, I grow tulips at at the class because my classroom teacher decided to grow the drips to celebrate to the graduate students at the ceremony.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I grew tulips in class because my classroom teacher decided to grow them for graduating students at the ceremony.

Tense: 'When I was elementary school' requires preposition 'in' and past tense 'grew' because the action happened in the past. 'At at the class' should be 'in class'. 'Drips' and 'to celebrate to the graduate students' are incorrect words/phrases; 'them' refers to tulips and 'for graduating students' or 'to celebrate the graduates' is correct. Suggestions: use 'in elementary school', use past tense for past events, avoid repeated words, and use correct pronouns ('them') and prepositions ('in class', 'for').

× I like growing prawns so I water them regularly but avoid watering because too much water can damage the roots.

✓ I like growing plants so I water them regularly but avoid overwatering because too much water can damage the roots.

'Prawns' is the wrong noun (seafood) instead of 'plants'. 'Avoid watering' is unclear; 'avoid overwatering' is the correct adverbial phrase. Suggestions: use the correct noun (plants) and the correct collocation 'overwatering' to express excess water.

× I always check the store moisture before I water and I make sure they get enough sunlight.

✓ I always check the soil moisture before I water and I make sure they get enough sunlight.

'Store moisture' is incorrect word choice; the correct term is 'soil moisture'. 'Soil moisture' indicates the water content of the soil. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'soil moisture' and 'check moisture before watering'."

× People in China have their habit to send you rather the gift to each other with family or friends, whoever is making them happy and relaxation.

✓ People in China have a habit of giving plants or flowers as gifts to family or friends to make them happy and relaxed.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: 'have their habit to send you rather the gift' is ungrammatical. Use 'have a habit of + -ing' and 'giving' as the verb. 'To each other with family or friends' is awkward; 'to family or friends' is clear. 'Whoever is making them happy and relaxation' is incorrect; use purpose clause 'to make them happy and relaxed.' Suggestions: use 'have a habit of giving', proper prepositions ('to'), and clear purpose phrasing ('to make them happy and relaxed').

× Also flowers applied the blooms to cerebral.

✓ Also, flowers are often given to convey good feelings or celebration.

This sentence is unclear and uses incorrect words: 'applied the blooms to cerebral' is nonsensical. A natural expression: 'flowers are often given to convey happiness or celebrate.' Suggestion: rephrase unclear metaphors and choose words that match intended meaning (convey, celebrate, express feelings).