Cars— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with a conditional structure such as “If I could afford one, I would buy it.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “supervision car” and “I always sleeping in the highway.” Use “self-driving car,” “Tesla,” and “fall asleep on the highway” if those are your intended meanings. Also avoid repeating the same conclusion and connect your reason with a clear linking word such as “because.”

例: If I could afford an expensive car in the future, I would probably buy a Tesla. I like its advanced safety features and self-driving technology. However, I would never sleep while driving because that would be extremely dangerous.

提案: Your answer gives a clear opinion and a personal preference, but improve the grammar in “show the owner personality” and “it is hardest to take care.” Say “reflect the owner’s personality” and “white cars are harder to maintain.” Avoid repeating “the color is important” and use a contrast linker such as “However” before mentioning the disadvantage.

例: Yes, I think car colour is quite important because it can reflect the owner’s personality and taste. Personally, I prefer white cars because they look clean and make me feel comfortable. However, they can be difficult to maintain because dirt is easy to notice.

提案: You answer the question directly, but the sentence contains repeated phrases such as “by the car” and “in the car.” Use “take me on long trips” and describe two activities naturally, such as eating snacks and singing songs. The final phrase “enjoy the tide” is unclear; use “enjoy the journey” or “enjoy the ride.”

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often took me on long road trips. We would eat snacks, sing songs, and talk together during the journey, so I really enjoyed traveling by car.

提案: Give your answer with the natural phrase “I prefer larger cars, especially SUVs.” Explain that they offer more space and comfort, but replace unclear wording such as “give my pants more space” with “give my parents more room” if that is your meaning. Use fewer repeated phrases and choose the comparative form “bigger,” not “more big.”

例: I prefer larger cars, especially SUVs, because they offer more space and comfort. They would also be practical for family trips because my parents could sit and relax comfortably. In addition, there would be enough room for luggage.

提案: Your main idea is clear, but several expressions are incorrect: say “control the car,” “pay close attention to the road,” “join the conversation,” and “if I had to choose.” The answer also contradicts itself because you first prefer driving but later say you like to “drop the car,” which should probably be “drive the car.” Explain one clear advantage of driving and, if necessary, one disadvantage.

例: I prefer being the driver because I like having control over the car and choosing the route. However, driving requires me to concentrate on the road, so I cannot always join the conversation. Even so, I would choose to drive because I enjoy being responsible for the journey.

提案: You provide examples, which makes the answer more developed, but correct the phrases “When in the traffic jam,” “single song,” and “guess the car is the boy or the girl.” Use “When we are stuck in a traffic jam,” “sing songs,” and “guess whether the driver is a man or a woman.” Keep the tense consistent by using “we usually” with the present simple.

例: When we are stuck in a traffic jam, we usually listen to music or play simple guessing games. For example, we sometimes guess whether the driver of the car next to us is a man or a woman. If the traffic is moving very slowly, we sing along to hip-hop songs to pass the time.

× If I have ability to afford that, I will buy it.

✓ If I have the ability to afford that, I will buy it.

The singular countable noun ability normally needs a determiner. The definite article the is appropriate because the speaker is referring to the ability to afford the car.

× I really need them because I always sleeping in the highway.

✓ I really need it because I am always sleeping on the highway.

The pronoun it refers to the singular noun car, so them is incorrect. Use it instead.

× I really need them because I always sleeping in the highway.

✓ I really need it because I am always sleeping on the highway.

The present continuous requires the verb be before the present participle. Use am sleeping, not always sleeping.

× I really need them because I always sleeping in the highway.

✓ I really need it because I am always sleeping on the highway.

The usual preposition for a road or highway is on, not in, when describing an activity taking place there.

× Yeah, I think the color is really important for me because the color can show the owner personality, about her style, about her taste.

✓ Yeah, I think color is really important to me because it can show the owner's personality, style, and taste.

The original sentence uses an unclear and incomplete series after show. Use a parallel list such as personality, style, and taste.

× But it is hardest to take care.

✓ But it is hard to take care of.

The phrasal expression is take care of, so the preposition of is required after care.

× My mum and dad always took me a long trip with the car.

✓ My mum and dad always took me on a long trip by car.

The correct expression is take someone on a trip. By car is the natural phrase for describing the method of transportation.

× We would do a lot of things, for example, eating and singing song in the car.

✓ We would do a lot of things, for example, eating and singing songs in the car.

When referring to songs in general, use the plural noun songs. Alternatively, you could say singing a song.

× So I really enjoy the ride during the trip in the car.

✓ So I really enjoyed the ride during the trip in the car.

The question asks about a childhood experience in the past. Therefore, the past-tense form enjoyed is needed instead of enjoy.

× The big car can give me more space and let me feel comfortable and relaxing.

✓ The big car can give me more space and let me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Relaxed describes how a person feels, while relaxing describes something that causes relaxation. Because the subject is the speaker's feeling, use relaxed.

× I also want to plan for the future.

✓ I also want to plan for the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct. The definite article the is required before the fixed expression the future.

× So I prefer to choose the more big car like SUV.

✓ So I prefer to choose a bigger car, like an SUV.

The comparative form of big is bigger, not more big. Also, SUV is a singular countable noun and needs the article an because its pronunciation begins with a vowel sound.

× So I prefer to choose the more big car like SUV.

✓ So I prefer to choose a bigger car, like an SUV.

A singular countable noun such as SUV needs an article. Use an SUV because the initial sound of the abbreviation is a vowel sound.

× But actually sometimes the driver had to put more attention on the road.

✓ But actually, sometimes the driver has to pay more attention to the road.

The statement describes a general situation, so use the present-tense form has to. The phrase pay attention is also the standard verb combination.

× So I can get into about the topic what they talk about.

✓ So I can join the conversation about the topics they are talking about.

The original clause has an incorrect structure after get into. Join the conversation is a clearer verb phrase, and the relative clause is correctly formed as the topics they are talking about.

× When in the traffic jam we usually play some simple game.

✓ When we are in a traffic jam, we usually play some simple games.

The subordinate clause needs a subject and a verb. Add we are after when to form a complete clause.

× We usually play some simple game.

✓ We usually play some simple games.

Some is being used to refer to more than one game, so the plural noun games is needed.

× When we are in a traffic jam, we usually play some simple games.

✓ When we are in a traffic jam, we usually play some simple games.

Traffic jam is a singular countable noun in this sentence, so it needs the article a.

× For example, we will guess the car is the boy or the girl to drive this car.

✓ For example, we will guess whether a boy or a girl is driving the car.

The original sentence incorrectly combines guess with two competing clauses. Use whether to introduce the alternative and place the subject before the verb in the embedded question.

× Or we were to sing some hip hop music.

✓ Or we will sing some hip-hop music.

The answer describes activities that people will do during a traffic jam. Use the future form will sing instead of the past form were.