Watch— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也有智能手表功能的具体细节。注意冠词和主谓一致：说“a smartwatch”，并将“track”改为“tracks”；“healthy information”不自然，可用“health data”。最后应说“helps me monitor”，而不是“help me monitoring”。

例: Definitely. I wear a smartwatch because it does more than tell the time. It also tracks health data, such as my sleep patterns and heart rate, which helps me monitor my fitness.

提案: 内容有个人经历，细节也比较具体。注意用过去式“got”，而不是“gotta”；“on the there”应改为准确表达表盘位置的短语，例如“on the face”。“Princess design”通常不需要大写，最后可用“still keep it”表达至今保留。建议把句子整理得更自然，避免不清楚的表达。

例: Yes, I got a watch from my parents for my birthday when I was a child. It had a princess design on the face and a small moving decoration, so it felt very special to me. I wore it every day back then, and I still keep it as a memento.

提案: 回答提供了两种原因，结构清楚，但有几处词语选择不准确：“statue symbol”应为“status symbol”，“social standings”可简化为“social status”；手表品牌应称为“brands”，不是“bands”。“return their value”也不自然，可改为“retain their value”。

例: Some people wear expensive watches as a status symbol to show their wealth or social status. Others buy them as investments because well-known brands like Rolex can retain their value and sometimes increase in price over time.

提案: 回答直接，也用运动场景补充了理由。注意平行结构：应说“track the calories I burn and monitor my heart rate”，不要在“and”后接“monitoring”。“check the calories”不够自然，可用“track the calories I burn”；另外，“helps me stay on schedule”比“helps me keep me on schedule”更地道。

例: Yes, I think wearing a watch is important because it helps me tell the time and stay on schedule. For example, when I exercise, my smartwatch tracks the calories I burn and monitors my heart rate, which is really useful.

× Definitely I wear smart watch.

✓ Definitely, I wear a smartwatch.

“Watch”是可数名词单数，前面需要加冠词。可以说“a smartwatch”。

× It not only tells me the time but also track healthy information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate which help me monitoring my fitness.

✓ It not only tells me the time but also tracks healthy information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate, which help me monitoring my fitness.

主语“It”是第三人称单数，一般现在时中与之并列的动词也要用第三人称单数形式，因此“track”应改为“tracks”。

× It not only tells me the time but also track healthy information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate which help me monitoring my fitness.

✓ It not only tells me the time but also track health information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate which help me monitoring my fitness.

这里需要表达“健康方面的信息”，应使用名词“health”修饰“information”，组成“health information”。“Healthy”表示“健康的”，通常用来修饰人或事物。

× It not only tells me the time but also track healthy information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate which help me monitoring my fitness.

✓ It not only tells me the time but also track healthy information such as my sleep patterns and heart rate which help me monitor my fitness.

“Help”后接宾语时，通常使用动词原形或“to + 动词原形”，不能接“monitoring”。因此应改为“help me monitor”。

× I gotta watch as a birthday gift from my parents when I was a child.

✓ I got a watch as a birthday gift from my parents when I was a child.

句子描述童年时收到礼物的过去事件，应使用过去式“got”。“Gotta”是口语中“got to”的非正式写法，在这里不能表达“收到了一块手表”。

× I really liked it because it had a Princess design on the there and a small moving decoration which made it feel very special to me.

✓ I really liked it because it had a princess design on it and a small moving decoration which made it feel very special to me.

“There”在这里不能作为“the”后面的名词使用。若要表达图案在手表上，可以说“on it”；“the”不能放在这里的“there”前面。

× For example, when I'm exercising, my watch can check the calories I burn and monitoring my heart rate, which is really useful.

✓ For example, when I'm exercising, my watch can check the calories I burn and monitor my heart rate, which is really useful.

情态动词“can”后面应接动词原形。并列结构中，“check”和“monitor”都受“can”支配，因此应使用“monitor”，而不是“monitoring”。