Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сразу обозначьте разницу между прошлым и настоящим, затем кратко объясните её. Выражение «I don't have the learning process anywhere» неясно; скажите, что теперь вы знакомитесь с людьми через общие интересы. Избегайте повторов и незаконченной конструкции «I'm used I have to».

例: Yes, there is a big difference. When I was younger, I mainly met friends at school or university because we studied together. These days, I usually meet people through shared interests or social events.

提案: Объясните конкретные признаки подходящего места, например тихую обстановку, удобные места для сидения или приятную атмосферу. Вместо расплывчатого «They can be bad» приведите контраст с шумными или многолюдными местами. Сократите повторы и заполнители пауз.

例: Some places, such as cafés, are good for meeting because they’re relaxed and you can talk comfortably. On the other hand, a very noisy or crowded place can make it difficult to hear each other. I think the atmosphere matters most.

提案: Ваш выбор и причина понятны, но формулировки «the interactive person» и «world opening» звучат неестественно. Используйте, например, «sociable» и «broadens my perspective». Разделите длинное предложение на два и добавьте конкретную деталь о том, что вам нравится в общении в группе.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I’m quite sociable. I enjoy hearing different opinions, and group conversations often give me fresh ideas. It also tends to be more energetic than meeting just one person.

提案: Ответьте прямо, приглашаете ли вы друзей домой, и объясните, что обычно делаете вместе. Фраза «to see them around» не подходит по смыслу, а «upbringing» здесь использовано неверно. Завершайте ответ законченной мыслью и избегайте повторов «home, apartment».

例: Yes, I’d be happy to invite friends to my apartment. We usually have a meal, chat, or watch a film together. I like having them over because we can relax and spend time in a comfortable setting.

提案: Вы хорошо раскрываете важность друзей и называете конкретную пользу — новые взгляды и поддержку. Уберите повтор «well», исправьте неестественное «take many views» на «see different perspectives» и избегайте повтора слова «friendship».

例: Friends are very important to me because they support me and help me see things from different perspectives. Talking with them often broadens my horizons, especially when we discuss different issues. Their company also gives me a lot of energy.

提案: Уточните, как часто вы встречаетесь: выражение «the same time every day week» непонятно. Используйте «once a week» или назовите конкретный день. Вместо «take the minds off» скажите «take our minds off work» и сформулируйте заключительную часть естественнее.

例: Yes, we try to go out once a week, usually on Tuesday or Wednesday. It’s a nice way to take our minds off work and other responsibilities. We usually relax, share news, and talk about what has happened during the week.

提案: Ответ содержит хорошее сравнение между холодной и тёплой погодой. Скажите «at cafés or restaurants» и замените неестественное «see what's happening in the world in the town» на более точное описание прогулки по городу. Сократите повторы и заполнители пауз.

例: We usually meet at a café or restaurant when the weather is cold. When it’s warm, we like walking around town and exploring different areas. It’s a good way to catch up and see what’s new in the city.

提案: Назовите основные занятия, например обмен новостями и обсуждение планов. Используйте параллельные формы: «catch up, share ideas, and talk». Фразу «in the nearest» необходимо завершить, например «in the near future», а повтор «the future, the future plans» убрать.

例: We usually catch up on each other’s lives and share our thoughts on different topics. We also talk about our plans and things we’d like to do in the near future. Sometimes we simply relax and enjoy each other’s company.

提案: Вы приводите уместные подробности о том, как давно знаете подругу и где познакомились. Завершите ответ конкретным примером её поддержки; оборванное «kind of» мешает законченности. Уберите лишние паузы и используйте естественное выражение «my closest friend».

例: Yes, I have a close friend I’ve known since childhood. We went to music school together and have stayed friends ever since. She’s very supportive, and I can always talk to her when I need advice.

× Yes, there is a huge gap between uh the time when I was a child.

✓ Yes, there is a huge difference between where I meet friends now and where I used to meet them when I was a child.

The original comparison is incomplete: between requires two comparable parts, but the sentence gives only the time when the speaker was a child. State both places being compared.

× That's why I'm used I have to do it alone, just for my interest.

✓ That's why I'm used to doing it alone, just for my own interests.

The expression be used to means be accustomed to, and to is a preposition in this expression. Use a noun or an -ing form after it, not a finite clause such as I have to do it.

× The idea of spending time with a group of friends appeals to me more because I see myself as the interactive person and communicative person, so I prefer to communicate with all sorts of people at the same time and it gives me more energy and more ideas of the world and it's quite uh world opening.

✓ The idea of spending time with a group of friends appeals to me more because I see myself as an interactive and communicative person, so I prefer to communicate with all sorts of people at the same time.

Interactive begins with a vowel sound, so it needs the article an. Because the speaker describes themself as one person with two qualities, use one article before the coordinated adjectives. The remaining wording has issues of clarity or vocabulary rather than a clear error from the specified grammar types.

× Yeah, I think that I'm the sociable person and I always invite my friends to my home, to my apartment to see them around and just to, you know, um show them how I live how I spend my time alone so it's also um upbringing and

✓ Yeah, I think that I'm a sociable person, and I always invite my friends to my home, to my apartment, to show them how I live and how I spend my time alone.

Use a before sociable person because the speaker is describing themself as one member of a general category, not referring to a specific person. Use and to connect the two parallel clauses beginning with how.

× So it gives me friendship gives me more energy.

✓ So friendship gives me more energy.

The original repeats the subject and verb in a way that makes the sentence structure unclear. Use one clear subject, friendship, followed by its verb and object.

× We try to have uh the same time every day week.

✓ We try to meet at the same time every week.

The sequence every day week is not a grammatical time expression. Choose one time interval; every week fits the intended meaning of meeting regularly once a week.

× So it's usually Tuesday or Wednesday, uh, in the middle of the week so we can, you know, relax from our duties and just uh uh take the minds off and discuss something new and share the new ideas or how we passed uh the week.

✓ So it's usually Tuesday or Wednesday, in the middle of the week, so we can relax from our duties, take our minds off them, discuss something new, and share new ideas or talk about how we spent the week.

The expression is take our minds off something. The possessive pronoun our identifies whose minds are meant, and them refers back to duties.

× So it's usually uh eye-opening and gives new perspectives to our life and um we catch up with the news in our city.

✓ So it's usually eye-opening and gives us new perspectives on life, and we catch up on the news in our city.

The usual preposition with perspectives is on, not to. This correction also uses catch up on, the standard preposition for getting updated about news.

× We usually catch up on each other's lives, uh, sharing the new ideas and thoughts about some subjects.

✓ We usually catch up on each other's lives and share new ideas and thoughts about some subjects.

Catch up and share describe two activities performed by we, so use parallel verb forms joined with and. The original shifts from a finite verb to a participle, making the relationship between the activities unclear.

× Uh, also discover something new in the lives of each other, and usually, uh talk about the future, the future plans and something that we could do in the nearest

✓ We also discover something new in each other's lives and usually talk about the future, our future plans, and things we could do in the near future.

Use near future as the standard expression for the time coming soon. Nearest is a superlative and does not fit this expression. The correction also completes the cut-off phrase in the transcript.

× So we went to the music school together and we have been friends uh since that time so I think she's the closest friend to me and she always supports me and gives new ideas in my life and um kind of uh

✓ So we went to music school together, and we have been friends since then. I think she's the closest friend to me, and she always supports me and gives me new ideas.

When referring generally to studying at music school, the definite article is not normally used. The article the is correctly used before the superlative closest.