Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes a clear comparison, but it is one very long sentence with repeated ideas. Use shorter sentences and more natural expressions, such as “find time in our busy schedules” instead of “take our time from a busy schedule.” Add a clear contrast between the past and the present.

例: Yes, there is quite a big difference. When we were in college, we met several times a week because we had more free time. Nowadays, we all have full-time jobs, so we usually meet once or twice a month, and we have to plan it in advance.

提案: The main idea is understandable, but the opening is awkward and the answer repeats “some people” and “certain activities.” State the main reason directly, then give specific factors such as noise, seating, cost, or the activities available. Use “depending on the group” rather than “the vibe of the person I would suggest.”

例: Some places are more suitable because they match the group’s interests and provide a comfortable atmosphere. For example, a quiet café is ideal for chatting, while a bowling alley is better for people who prefer an active outing. Very noisy or crowded places can make it difficult to have a conversation.

提案: You answer the question, but “fifty-fifty” conflicts with your final preference for one friend. Give a definite preference first and explain it with a specific reason. Avoid repeating “no problem” and use more natural wording such as “spend time one-on-one.”

例: I generally prefer spending time with one close friend. It is easier to have a meaningful conversation and do exactly what we both enjoy. However, I also like meeting my larger group occasionally, especially for celebrations or outdoor activities.

提案: Your preference and reason are clear, but the answer contains a contradiction: you say you prefer meeting outside, then say “I prefer meeting home.” The sentence is also too long, and “undertake activities” sounds unnecessarily formal. Use “do activities” or name one or two examples.

例: I would generally prefer to meet my friends outside my home. My family needs a quiet environment, and they might be disturbed if I invited people over. Besides, we can do more activities outside, such as having coffee, watching a film, or going bowling.

提案: You express your opinion clearly and provide a reason, but you repeat “friends” and make a comma splice in “every day, they shape.” Avoid making a general claim about everybody; focus on your own experience. Add one specific way your friends support or influence you.

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support and influence the way I think. I can talk to them when I am stressed, and they often give me practical advice. They also encourage me to try new things and become a better person.

提案: Your answer is relevant, but it needs better punctuation and more natural phrasing. Say “I don’t often go out” and “make time to meet my friends” instead of “taking out time.” Clarify what productive activities you do at home to make the answer more specific.

例: No, I do not go out with my friends very often. I usually prefer staying at home and doing productive things, such as reading, exercising, or studying. I make time to see my friends once or twice a month, usually at the weekend.

提案: You provide several relevant examples, which makes the answer effective. Improve the linking and grammar by saying “Sometimes…” and “On other occasions…” instead of repeating “it depends.” “Go bowling” is more natural than “go for bowling,” and “window-shop” is the usual verb.

例: We usually meet in cafés or restaurants because they are convenient places to talk. On other occasions, we go bowling or visit a shopping mall and window-shop. It normally depends on everyone’s preferences and how much time we have.

提案: The answer is too brief and the second half is grammatically unclear. Use a direct structure and mention specific activities. Replace “if we do for engaging in” with “when we want to do something more active.”

例: We usually meet at a café and chat about our jobs, studies, and personal lives. When we want to do something more active, we might go bowling, watch a film, or walk around a shopping mall. It depends on our mood and the amount of time we have.

提案: You give a clear answer and explain why you admire this friend, but the response needs punctuation and more natural grammar. Say “I have a friend I met in college” and “he is well-educated” rather than “he’s also an educated by profession.” Add a specific example of how he supported you if possible.

例: Yes, I have a close friend whom I met in college, and I have known him for more than six years. I really admire him because he is well-educated, reliable, and supportive. He stood by me during several difficult periods, especially when I was having problems with my studies and career.

× Absolutely there is a difference right now because when we were in college we used to meet regularly but now since we are all working professionals we have to take our time from a busy schedule and meet up once or twice a month or maybe once in two months at cafes or other places and it all takes planning also.

✓ Absolutely, there is a difference now. When we were in college, we used to meet regularly, but now that we are all working professionals, we have to make time in our busy schedules to meet once or twice a month, or perhaps once every two months, at cafés or other places. It all requires planning as well.

The preposition from is incorrect in the expression take our time from a busy schedule. The natural expression is make time in our busy schedules. Also, once every two months is the correct expression for this frequency; once in two months is not standard here.

× It depends on the vibe of the person I would suggest or the group because some people or some group are into certain activities which they like and certain activities they do not like to engage themselves in.

✓ It depends on the preferences of the person or group, because some people or groups are interested in certain activities, while there are other activities they do not like to engage in.

The phrase some group incorrectly combines a plural quantifier with a singular noun. Use some groups when referring to more than one group. The correction also uses parallel plural nouns, people or groups.

× Again it's something I would say it's fifty fifty because there is one friend of mine whom I can spend a day or two with and without any problem but my group is also good so there is no problem in spending time with the group also but yes probably I would spend it alone with one friend.

✓ Again, I would say it is fifty-fifty. I have one friend with whom I can spend a day or two without any problems, but I also enjoy spending time with my group. Overall, I would probably prefer to spend time with one friend.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined together without clear structure. The phrase I would say it's is unnecessarily repeated, and the ideas are difficult to follow. Dividing the answer into shorter, well-organized sentences makes the meaning clearer.

× My family would get disturbed if I bring my friends home so I said just I prefer meeting home.

✓ My family would be disturbed if I brought my friends home, so I prefer meeting them outside the home.

In a second conditional sentence, would is used in the main clause and the past tense is used in the if-clause: would be disturbed if I brought. The original uses the present form bring, which does not match this conditional structure.

× Friends are an important part in everybody's life because they are a group of people whom you are with every day.

✓ Friends are an important part of everybody's life because they are a group of people whom you are with every day.

The standard expression is an important part of something, so the preposition of is required instead of in.

× No I do not I like spending my time at home, engaging in productive activities.

✓ No, I do not. I like spending my time at home and engaging in productive activities.

The original contains two independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation. Use a full stop after do not, or join the ideas with and. This creates a complete and clearly structured answer.

× We just chill out at the cafes mostly and if we do for engaging in some outside activities and that's also something we do.

✓ We mostly chill out at cafés, and sometimes we engage in outdoor activities as well.

The verb engage is followed directly by in plus a noun or -ing form, as in engage in outdoor activities. The structure do for engaging is not grammatically correct. The correction uses engage in correctly and expresses the two activities clearly.

× He's also an educated by profession and has been there with me during all my tough phases.

✓ He is also an educator by profession and has been there for me during all my difficult times.

Educated is an adjective describing someone who has received education, whereas educator is the noun for a person whose profession is teaching or education. Therefore, an educator by profession is the correct phrase.