Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the first sentence, then explain the change clearly. Use consistent verb tenses: “used to meet,” “met,” and “prefer.” Avoid repeating “used to” and say “enjoy eating” instead of “love eat foods.”

例: Yes, there is a difference. We used to meet at the mall, but nowadays we prefer cafés or restaurants because we enjoy eating together and having longer conversations. These places are also more comfortable and convenient for us.

提案: Give a clear reason and use a natural phrase such as “suitable for meeting.” Replace “fair meeting” with “meeting” or “having a meeting.” Use punctuation and linking words, such as “for example” and “whereas,” to make the contrast clearer.

例: It depends on the atmosphere of the place. For example, malls can be crowded and noisy, whereas cafés are usually quieter, so we can talk comfortably without being interrupted.

提案: State your preference clearly and avoid repeating “because.” Use “a large group of people” instead of “a lot of people,” and complete your final idea. You can mention that one-to-one conversations feel more private and allow you to trust the other person more easily.

例: I prefer spending time with one close friend. I’m more comfortable sharing personal problems in a one-to-one conversation because it feels private and easier to build trust. I can also listen more carefully to my friend.

提案: Use the natural expression “I’d rather not” or “I don’t usually invite friends over.” Explain the two reasons separately: your mother’s strictness and the condition of your home. Say “at malls, cafés, or restaurants” rather than “in the malls.”

例: I’d rather not invite friends to my home. My mother is quite strict about having visitors, and our house is sometimes a little messy. Therefore, I prefer meeting my friends at cafés, malls, or restaurants.

提案: Use “Friends are very important to me” as the topic sentence. Replace “realize some problems and your habitats to them” with “share your problems and feelings with them,” and use “feel at ease” or “have peace of mind.” Keep the explanation focused on emotional support and trust.

例: Friends are very important to me because they provide emotional support. I can share my problems and feelings with people I trust, which helps me feel at ease and gives me peace of mind. Good friends also encourage me when I face difficulties.

提案: The answer is incomplete, so finish your final sentence and avoid the unclear phrase “talk love things.” Use “talk about our lives” or “catch up.” Clearly contrast your current situation with the past using “nowadays” and “we used to.”

例: Not very often nowadays. We live in different places and have busy schedules, whereas we used to meet almost every day. When we had more free time, we went to restaurants to catch up and talk about our lives.

提案: The answer is well organized because it gives two contrasting situations. Improve the grammar by saying “when we want a relaxing environment” and connect the ideas with “whereas” or “but.” Avoid repeating “coffee” by saying “have a drink.”

例: It depends on our mood. When we want to have fun, we go to nearby bars or clubs, whereas we choose a coffee shop when we want a more relaxing environment. There, we usually have a drink and chat comfortably.

提案: Use “free time” without an article and replace “want to have socialized” with “want to socialize.” Avoid repeating “hang out,” and organize the activities into two clear choices: relaxing at a café or having fun at a bar or club.

例: We don’t hang out very often nowadays, but when we have free time, we usually meet at a café for a coffee and a chat. If we want to socialize and have more fun, we go to a bar or club and sometimes dance.

提案: Use the present perfect correctly: “I have known him since college” or “He has been my friend for about twelve years.” Replace “he always talked with me” with “he always talks to me,” and add one specific quality or example to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I do. His name is Johnny Coh, and I have known him since I was in college, so we’ve been friends for about twelve years. He is my best friend because he is trustworthy and always listens when I need to talk.

× We meet at the mall, but now we prefer more on cafes or restaurants.

✓ We met at the mall, but now we prefer cafés or restaurants.

The phrase used to refers to a past habit, so meet should be in the past tense: met. Prefer is followed directly by the preferred places, not by prefer more on.

× We used to love eat foods.

✓ We used to love eating food.

After love, a gerund with the -ing form is used when describing an activity. Therefore, eat should be eating. Food is generally uncountable in this context, so food is more natural than foods.

× We prefer fair meeting in a cafe.

✓ We prefer meeting in a café.

The preposition in is correct for a place, but fair is not appropriate in this sentence. After prefer, use the gerund meeting to describe the activity.

× I do not really like to hang out like a lot of people.

✓ I do not really like to hang out with a lot of people.

Use with when describing the people who accompany you. Like is incorrect in this context.

× Because I had trauma before I was.

✓ This is because I had a traumatic experience in the past.

The original sentence is incomplete because it ends with was without a complement. A complete sentence needs a subject, a verb, and a complete idea.

× My mom is so strict in regards to my friends.

✓ My mom is very strict regarding my friends.

Regarding is the appropriate preposition-like expression here. The phrase in regards to is generally considered incorrect or unnecessarily wordy in formal English.

× You can realize some problems and your habitats to them, especially if you trust my dear friends.

✓ You can share your problems and habits with them, especially if you trust your friends.

The pronoun my does not agree with the subject you. It should be your. Also, habits should be used instead of the incorrect word habitats, and share your problems and habits with someone is the appropriate construction.

× It will make you feel easy and have a peace of mind.

✓ It will make you feel at ease and give you peace of mind.

Peace of mind is an uncountable fixed expression and does not take the article a. Feel at ease is also the natural expression for feeling relaxed.

× We are now in different places and we have very busy schedules unlike before we used to hang out every day.

✓ We are now in different places and have very busy schedules, unlike before, when we used to hang out every day.

The time contrast needs the conjunction when to connect before with the past habit. Commas also help separate the contrasting phrase from the main sentence.

× We used to hang out every day and go to the restaurants to talk love things.

✓ We used to hang out every day and go to restaurants to talk about things we loved.

Talk must be followed by the preposition about when introducing a topic. The phrase love things is not grammatically correct; things we loved expresses the intended meaning.

× And if I did it very.

✓ However, I do not do that very often now.

The original fragment is incomplete and ends with the adverb very without a verb or an adjective. The correction gives the sentence a complete structure and matches the present-time context.

× When we want to have some relaxing environment.

✓ When we want to have a relaxing environment, we go to a coffee shop.

Environment is a singular countable noun, so it needs the article a. The original wording is also a sentence fragment; it must be connected to the main clause.

× We go to the coffee shop and have some coffee.

✓ We go to a coffee shop and have some coffee.

Use a coffee shop when referring to any coffee shop in general. The definite article the suggests that both the speaker and listener already know which specific coffee shop is meant.

× When we have a free time.

✓ When we have free time.

Free time is an uncountable noun phrase, so it does not take the article a.

× Sometimes when we want to have socialized or have some fun or feel like we want to dance, we go to the bars or clubs.

✓ Sometimes, when we want to socialize, have fun, or dance, we go to bars or clubs.

Want to must be followed by the base form of the verb, so socialize is needed instead of have socialized. The repeated phrase feel like we want to is unnecessary and makes the sentence structurally awkward.

× He is my friend since I was in college.

✓ He has been my friend since I was in college.

Use the present perfect has been for a situation that began in the past and continues to the present. The word since identifies the starting point of the relationship.

× He is my best friend for about twelve years now.

✓ He has been my best friend for about twelve years now.

Use the present perfect has been with for to describe a state that started in the past and continues now.

× He always talked with me.

✓ He always talks with me.

The sentence describes a regular behavior that is still true, so use the present simple talks. If the speaker means that this has continued throughout the friendship, has always talked would also be possible.