Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 과거와 현재를 비교하는 답변의 방향은 좋지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 ‘make a friend like a gathering’은 의미가 불분명합니다. ‘I used to meet my friends at school, whereas now...’와 같이 비교 구조를 사용하고, 현재 만나는 장소나 방법을 구체적으로 설명하세요. ‘social media network’는 이 질문의 ‘meet’와 직접 연결하기보다 ‘social media or at casual gatherings’처럼 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

例: Yes, there is a clear difference. When I was younger, I usually met my friends at school or in the neighborhood. Nowadays, I tend to meet them at cafés or casual gatherings, and sometimes we keep in touch through social media.

提案: 편안함과 접근성을 제시한 점은 좋지만, ‘plentable seeds’와 ‘It is also very important to meet someone’은 문맥에 맞지 않거나 의미가 불명확합니다. 카페와 공원의 장점을 각각 설명하고, 시끄럽거나 접근하기 어려운 장소가 부적절한 이유도 간단히 덧붙이세요. ‘cafés or parks are quiet places to meet’처럼 장소와 이유를 자연스럽게 연결해야 합니다.

例: Some places are suitable because they are comfortable, quiet, and easy to get to. For example, cafés and parks are good choices because people can talk without too much noise. In contrast, crowded places like busy shopping centers can make it difficult to have a proper conversation.

提案: 선호를 분명하게 밝히고 여러 명과 있을 때 피곤하다는 이유도 제시하여 구조가 좋습니다. 다만 ‘in meetings’와 ‘refill by myself’는 부자연스러우므로 ‘in group gatherings’와 ‘recharge on my own’을 사용하세요. 한 명의 친구와 있을 때 어떤 대화를 나눌 수 있는지 구체적인 결과를 한 문장 추가하면 더 효과적입니다.

例: I definitely prefer spending time with one close friend. I often feel drained when I am with a large group, so I need some time to recharge afterward. With one person, I can have a deeper conversation and feel more relaxed.

提案: 집에 초대하겠다는 답변은 직접적이지만, ‘If I feel someone comfortable’와 ‘spend them more time’은 문법적으로 어색합니다. ‘If I feel comfortable with someone’과 ‘spend more time with them’을 사용하세요. 친한 친구를 초대하는 이유와 집에서 무엇을 하는지 구체적으로 설명하면 내용이 풍부해집니다.

例: Absolutely. I invite close friends to my home because I feel comfortable around them. We can spend more time together, cook a meal, and have a relaxed conversation without worrying about the time.

提案: 친구가 정서적 지지를 준다는 핵심 내용은 적절하지만, 답변이 문장 중간에 끊겨 완결성이 부족합니다. ‘under stress’와 ‘someone to talk to’처럼 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 친구들이 어떻게 도움을 주는지 결과까지 완성하세요. ‘summon’은 이 문맥에서 사용할 수 없으므로 ‘call’ 또는 ‘turn to’가 적절합니다.

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they support me emotionally. When I feel depressed or stressed, I can call them and talk about my problems. Their advice and encouragement usually help me feel much better.

提案: 아이를 가진 후 친구를 자주 만나기 어렵다는 내용은 질문에 관련 있지만, ‘I really have a chance’는 의미상 ‘I don’t have many chances’가 되어야 하며 ‘kids’가 ‘kiss’로 잘못 사용되었습니다. 외출 빈도를 먼저 직접 답하고, 아이들과 함께 만나는 상황을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 같은 표현의 반복을 줄이고 ‘my friends bring their children too’처럼 자연스럽게 말하세요.

例: Not very often since I had children. When we do get the chance to meet, I usually bring my kids, and my friends bring theirs as well. We normally choose a child-friendly place, such as a park, so everyone can enjoy the outing.

提案: 주로 집에서 만난다는 답변이 직접적이고, 아이들 때문에 집이 편리하다는 이유도 잘 제시되었습니다. 다만 ‘meet each other’가 반복되므로 ‘get together’로 바꾸고, ‘at my house or my friends’ houses’처럼 소유격을 정확히 사용하세요. 집에서 아이들이 놀고 부모들이 이야기한다는 구체적인 세부 내용을 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

例: We usually get together at someone’s home, either mine or one of my friends’ houses. Since we all have children, this is more convenient and safer than meeting outside. The children can play while we catch up and have something to eat.

提案: 아이들과 친구를 만날 때 식사하거나 공원에 간다는 내용은 관련성이 있지만, ‘bring my case’와 반복적인 ‘yeah’ 때문에 의미와 흐름이 불분명합니다. ‘Since I have children, we usually...’로 상황을 명확히 시작하고, 활동을 두 가지 정도 논리적으로 연결하세요. ‘a few options’ 대신 실제 활동과 그 이유를 구체적으로 말하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Since we usually meet with our children, we choose simple activities. We might have dinner together at home, or take the kids to a nearby park. While the children play, we chat and catch up with each other.

提案: 오랫동안 알고 지낸 친구가 있다는 답변과 25년이라는 구체적인 기간은 좋습니다. 그러나 나이를 말하는 부분은 질문에 꼭 필요하지 않고, ‘I have known her twenty-five years ago’는 ‘I have known her for twenty-five years’로 고쳐야 합니다. 여러 친구를 말할 때는 ‘them’을 사용하고, 그 친구와 지금도 어떻게 연락하는지 덧붙이면 더 효과적입니다.

例: Yes, I do. I have known some of my university friends for about twenty-five years. We still keep in touch regularly, even though we are all busy with our families and work. Whenever we meet, it feels as if we had never been apart.

× When I was young I met friends at school now I can make a friend like a gathering or social media network so definitely there is a difference between past and present.

✓ When I was young, I met my friends at school. Now, I can meet them at gatherings or through social media, so there is definitely a difference between the past and the present.

The original response contains several independent clauses joined together without appropriate punctuation or conjunctions. Splitting the ideas into two sentences makes the structure clear. The phrases 'at gatherings' and 'through social media' also fit the intended meaning more naturally.

× When I was young I met friends at school now I can make a friend like a gathering or social media network so definitely there is a difference between past and present.

✓ When I was young, I met my friends at school. Now, I can meet them at gatherings or through social media, so there is definitely a difference between the past and the present.

When referring to two general time periods, use 'the past' and 'the present.' The definite article is needed because these expressions refer to specific periods of time.

× For example, cafe or parks are very quiet to meet someone and also there are plentable seeds.

✓ For example, a café or a park is a quiet place to meet someone, and there are plenty of seats.

The sentence begins with the singular alternative 'a café or a park,' so the singular verb 'is' is required. If plural nouns were used, the sentence would need 'cafés or parks are.' 'Seats' is plural because the phrase 'plenty of' is followed by a plural countable noun.

× For example, cafe or parks are very quiet to meet someone and also there are plentable seeds.

✓ For example, a café or a park is a quiet place to meet someone, and there are plenty of seats.

Singular countable nouns such as 'café,' 'park,' and 'place' normally require an article. Use 'a café,' 'a park,' and 'a quiet place' when referring to one example of each.

× For example, cafe or parks are very quiet to meet someone and also there are plentable seeds.

✓ For example, a café or a park is a quiet place to meet someone, and there are plenty of seats.

The correct quantifier is 'plenty of,' not 'plentable.' Use 'plenty of' before plural countable nouns such as 'seats.'

× Definitely I prefer to spend time with one friend if there are a number of friends in meetings I often feel drained.

✓ I definitely prefer to spend time with one friend. If there are a number of friends at a meeting, I often feel drained.

The preposition 'at' is used for an event or occasion, such as 'at a meeting.' The original response also joins two complete ideas without suitable punctuation, so separating them improves grammatical clarity.

× Definitely I prefer to spend time with one friend if there are a number of friends in meetings I often feel drained.

✓ I definitely prefer to spend time with one friend. If there are a number of friends at a meeting, I often feel drained.

The original sentence contains two complete ideas that run together. Use a full stop before the conditional clause to make the sentence structure correct.

× If I feel someone comfortable, I invite them to my house.

✓ If I feel comfortable with someone, I invite them to my house.

The adjective 'comfortable' describes the speaker's feeling, so the correct structure is 'feel comfortable with someone.' The original word order incorrectly places 'someone' between 'feel' and 'comfortable.'

× If I feel someone comfortable, I invite them to my house.

✓ If I feel comfortable with someone, I invite them to my house.

The preposition 'with' is required after 'feel comfortable' when identifying the person with whom you feel comfortable.

× I want to spend them more time so definitely I invite someone who is very intimate to me.

✓ I want to spend more time with them, so I definitely invite someone who is very close to me.

After 'spend time,' use the preposition 'with' before a person: 'spend time with them.' The pronoun 'them' cannot be used directly after 'spend' in this structure.

× I want to spend them more time so definitely I invite someone who is very intimate to me.

✓ I want to spend more time with them, so I definitely invite someone who is very close to me.

The correct preposition is 'with' in the expression 'spend time with someone.' Also, the natural preposition in 'close to me' is 'to,' not 'intimate to me.'

× Definitely my friends are very important to me because when I feel depressed or under all stress I need to summon to talk about my problem or situation.

✓ My friends are very important to me because when I feel depressed or under a lot of stress, I need someone to talk to about my problems or situation.

The natural expression is 'under stress' or 'under a lot of stress.' The preposition 'to' is also needed at the end of 'talk to someone.'

× Definitely my friends are very important to me because when I feel depressed or under all stress I need to summon to talk about my problem or situation.

✓ My friends are very important to me because when I feel depressed or under a lot of stress, I need someone to talk to about my problems or situation.

Use 'a lot of stress' rather than 'all stress.' 'A lot of' is the appropriate quantifier for an uncountable noun such as 'stress.'

× So they can be my

✓ So they can be there for me.

The original sentence is incomplete because 'my' must be followed by a noun or another complete phrase. 'They can be there for me' is a complete sentence with a subject, verb, and complement.

× I should bring my case so with the case there is a few options just having a dinner or going outside such as a park.

✓ When I meet my friends, there are a few options, such as having dinner or going outside to a park.

The noun 'options' is plural, so the correct form is 'there are,' not 'there is.' The phrase 'there are a few options' is the correct existential construction.

× I should bring my case so with the case there is a few options just having a dinner or going outside such as a park.

✓ When I meet my friends, there are a few options, such as having dinner or going outside to a park.

The noun 'dinner' is generally used without an article when referring to the meal in general. However, 'a park' needs the indefinite article because it refers to one unspecified park.

× I should bring my case so with the case there is a few options just having a dinner or going outside such as a park.

✓ When I meet my friends, there are a few options, such as having dinner or going outside to a park.

Use 'to a park' to express movement toward a destination. The original phrase 'outside such as a park' does not use the preposition correctly.

× I'm in the middle of the forties, meaning that I have known my friends for a long time.

✓ I'm in my mid-forties, meaning that I have known my friends for a long time.

The natural expression for someone's age range is 'in my mid-forties.' The original phrase incorrectly uses 'the' before 'forties' and is less natural than the possessive form.

× For example, my university friends, I have known her twenty five years ago.

✓ For example, I have known my university friends for twenty-five years.

Use the present perfect with 'for' to describe an action or relationship that began in the past and continues now: 'have known ... for twenty-five years.' Do not use 'ago' with this present-perfect structure.

× For example, my university friends, I have known her twenty five years ago.

✓ For example, I have known my university friends for twenty-five years.

'University friends' is plural, so the pronoun 'her' is incorrect. The sentence can avoid the pronoun by using the plural noun phrase 'my university friends.'

× For example, my university friends, I have known her twenty five years ago.

✓ For example, I have known my university friends for twenty-five years.

Use 'for' with a duration, such as 'for twenty-five years.' Use 'ago' with a completed past-time expression, such as 'I met them twenty-five years ago,' but not with 'have known.'

× So yeah, normally my friends we have a relationship for a long time.

✓ Normally, my friends and I have had a close relationship for a long time.

The original sentence has two subjects, 'my friends' and 'we,' which cannot be used together in this way. Use 'my friends and I' as the compound subject. The phrase 'have had a relationship for a long time' correctly expresses a relationship that started in the past and continues now.