Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有清晰的对比，但“meet friends mainly from work or activities”表达不自然，建议改为“meet people through work or activities”。“Some of them are from my husband’s side”信息不完整，应说明是丈夫的朋友或亲戚。注意过去时与现在时的衔接，并加入一个具体例子，使答案更完整。

例: Yes, definitely. These days, I mainly meet people through work, hobbies, or my husband’s social circle. In the past, however, I made most of my friends at school because I spent nearly all day with my classmates. So, my social circle has become more diverse over time.

提案: 观点明确，但存在明显语法和重复问题，如“places like library”应为“places like libraries”，“you’re those places”应改为“those places”，“a quiet environment”需要冠词。建议先说明适合的地方，再对比不适合的地方，并使用“because/whereas”等连接词。

例: Some places are suitable because they are relaxed and social, such as cafés or parks. Libraries, on the other hand, are not ideal for meeting new people because everyone is expected to keep quiet. As a result, it can be difficult to start a conversation there.

提案: 回答立场明确，也提供了理由，但“an introvert person”应改为“an introvert”或“an introverted person”，“You can talk to one friend can build”结构错误，“a weak”似乎是口误。建议使用更自然的表达，如“one-on-one conversations”和“develop a closer bond”，并补充一个个人经历或具体场景。

例: As an introvert, I prefer spending time with one close friend. One-on-one conversations allow us to talk more openly and develop a deeper bond. In a group, I sometimes find it difficult to keep up with different opinions and interests.

提案: 答案结构完整，观点、原因和对比都很清楚。可以将一般将来时“will invite”改为更自然的习惯表达“would invite”或“I do invite”，并把“make us bond”改为“help us bond”。建议补充一个具体活动，例如一起做饭或聊天。

例: Yes, I would invite close friends to my home. Since my home is quite private, I would not usually host a large party. However, having a few close friends over for dinner gives us a chance to relax, chat, and strengthen our relationship.

提案: 回答有明确态度，但“support systems”在这里不够自然，建议说“a support system”；“show you up”意思错误，应为“cheer you up”或“stand by you”；“Only”应改为“Although”。建议用更自然的因果关系，并具体说明朋友如何帮助你。

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they provide emotional support when I face difficulties. They can cheer me up when I feel upset and give me useful advice. Although I do not have a large social circle, I truly value every close friendship I have.

提案: 答案有很好的过去与现在对比，内容也自然。建议将“after I’m married”改为“since I got married”，将“go more often with my husband”改为“go out more often with my husband”。可以补充现在与朋友见面的频率，使回答更具体。

例: I used to go out with my friends quite often, but since I got married, I have been spending more time with my husband. I sometimes miss going shopping and chatting with my girlfriends. However, I still meet them once or twice a month, and I really enjoy my current lifestyle too.

提案: 信息丰富且与问题相关，但句子过长，连接词和结构较混乱。“every time if”应改为“whenever”，“recommend to them”应改为“recommend it to them”，“with so”应删除。建议拆成两到三句，并清楚列出餐馆和购物中心这两个地点。

例: I often meet my friends at restaurants because I am a real foodie. Whenever I discover a good restaurant, I recommend it to them and we go there together. We also meet at shopping malls, where we can shop or simply catch up.

提案: 回答内容直接，活动也比较具体。“Urlay”应为“Usually”，“delicious cuisines”不自然，建议使用“delicious food”或“different dishes”；“go to watch a movie”可简化为“watch a movie”。可以加入一个表示频率或个人偏好的短语。

例: Usually, we have dinner together and catch up on each other’s lives while enjoying some delicious food. Sometimes, we meet at a shopping mall to browse the shops or watch a movie. I especially enjoy these casual activities because they give us time to talk.

提案: 回答具体，有时间跨度、共同经历和朋友近况，内容较有说服力。建议将“a friend from work that”改为“a friend from work whom”或更自然的“a friend I met at work”；“Before this summer”表达不清，可能应为“Until this summer”。建议按时间顺序组织信息，避免最后一句造成时间关系混乱。

例: Yes, I have a friend whom I have known for more than ten years. We met when we worked for the same trading company. At that time, she was single, but she is now a mother of two boys. Until this summer, we even worked at the same school, so we have shared many stages of life together.

× Some of them are from my husband's side In the past I made friends purely from school.

✓ Some of them are from my husband's side. In the past, I made friends mainly at school.

原句把两个完整句子直接连接在一起，造成句子结构错误。应使用句号分开，并在时间状语后加逗号。

× I made friends purely from school.

✓ I made friends mainly at school.

表示在学校这个地点交朋友时，应使用介词 at，而不是 from。from 表示“来自”，不符合这里的地点含义。

× I think places like library are not suitable for meeting and making friends with others.

✓ I think places like libraries are not suitable for meeting and making friends with others.

library 是可数名词。这里是在泛指类似的场所，因此应使用复数 libraries，或者说 places like the library。

× Because you're those places require quiet environment.

✓ Because those places require a quiet environment.

原句中多余地使用了 you're，导致主语和谓语结构混乱。正确结构是 those places require...，表示“那些地方需要……”。

× Those places require quiet environment.

✓ Those places require a quiet environment.

environment 是可数名词单数，前面需要不定冠词 a。quiet environment 表示“一个安静的环境”。

× As an introvert person, I prefer to spend time with only one friend.

✓ As an introverted person, I prefer to spend time with only one friend.

introvert 通常是名词，表示“内向的人”；修饰 person 时应使用形容词 introverted，表示“内向的”。

× Because I think You can talk to one friend can build a strong bond and a weak and start a deep conversation.

✓ Because I think talking to one friend can help you build a strong bond and start a deep conversation.

原句包含两个连续的谓语结构 can talk 和 can build，句子结构不完整；a weak 也不能在这里单独作名词使用。可以使用动名词短语 talking to one friend 作主语，并用 help you build 连接后面的动作。

× Yes, I will invite close friends to my home.

✓ Yes, I would invite close friends to my home.

问题使用 Would you...，是在询问假设或礼貌意愿，因此回答应使用 would，而不是 will。

× Only I don't have many friends so I cherish each friend I meet.

✓ Although I don't have many friends, I cherish each friend I meet.

Only 不能在这里表示“虽然”。需要使用让步连词 Although，并在让步从句后加逗号。

× I used to, but after I'm married I go more often with my husband now.

✓ I used to, but after I got married, I went out more often with my husband.

after 后面描述过去发生的“结婚”时，应使用一般过去时 got married。为了保持过去时间背景一致，主句也可使用 went。

× I kind of miss the old days with my girlfriends when we hang out and go shopping.

✓ I kind of miss the old days with my girlfriends when we hung out and went shopping.

old days 表示过去的日子，描述过去经常发生的活动时，应使用一般过去时 hung out 和 went。

× Every time if I find a good restaurant I just recommend to them so we can enjoy the food together.

✓ Every time I find a good restaurant, I recommend it to them so we can enjoy the food together.

every time 本身已经是时间连接词，后面不能再使用 if。应删除 if；同时 recommend 后面需要明确的宾语 it，表示“推荐这家餐厅”。

× Or we just meet at some shopping mall with so we can go shopping or just catch up.

✓ Or we just meet at a shopping mall so we can go shopping or catch up.

with so 不是正确的句子连接结构。表示目的时直接使用 so，后面接完整从句 so we can...。

× Before this summer we actually worked at the same school.

✓ Before this summer, we actually worked at the same school.

the same school 中使用 the 是正确的，因为 same 通常与定冠词 the 连用。这里需要修改的是时间状语 Before this summer 后的逗号，使句子结构更清楚。