Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，但“where I meet... and the past”结构不完整；“pop”应为“pub”。此外，答案只有观点和一个细节，内容略单薄。可以使用“Unlike in the past...”进行对比，并说明现在和过去见面的具体地点或活动。注意使用一般现在时描述习惯，不要用“we will”。

例: Yes, there is a slight difference. In the past, we usually met at school or in a shopping centre, but now we tend to meet at a quiet pub or restaurant. We normally have dinner there and catch up on what has happened recently.

提案: 主要问题是语法和表达不自然，例如“the environmental play”应为“the environment plays”，“speak my idea”应改为“express my opinions”，“if there the circumstance”句式错误。答案的逻辑关系不清，应先直接说明合适地点的标准，再用“whereas/however”对比吵闹的地方。建议控制在3—4句，并加入具体例子。

例: The atmosphere is probably the most important factor. A quiet and comfortable place, such as a pub or a café, allows me to speak freely and have a proper conversation. However, very noisy places are unsuitable because I find it difficult to concentrate and express my thoughts.

提案: 观点明确，但应使用“prefer to spend”和“have deep conversations”。“because I'm a person I like...”以及最后一句表达混乱，建议避免“you know”和重复解释。可以用“whereas”说明与多人相处的区别，并给出具体活动作为支持。

例: I prefer spending time with one friend at a time because I enjoy having deep conversations. When there are too many people, it is harder for me to express my opinions or give everyone enough attention. For example, I would rather have coffee with one close friend than attend a large party.

提案: 回答内容 relevant，也有具体活动，但语法需要改进：“like the time stay”应为“like spending time”，“choose to watching”应为“choose to watch”，“order food online”比“from the internet”自然。最后的“perfect week”不符合语境，建议改为“a perfect evening”。

例: Yes, definitely. I like inviting my friends over because my home is cosy and relaxing. We usually watch a film, order some food online and chat afterwards, so it is a perfect way to spend an evening together.

提案: 开头回答直接，但后面的长句缺乏清晰结构。“important for me”可改为“important to me”，“appreciate with them”不正确，应表达为“appreciate having them in my life”。建议用“because”说明朋友的重要性，并分别提到困难时的支持和开心时的陪伴。

例: Friends are extremely important to me because they support me in both good and difficult times. I can share my worries with them when I feel stressed, and we also celebrate happy occasions together. I really appreciate having people in my life who understand and encourage me.

提案: 回答有明确活动和条件，但习惯性行为应使用一般现在时：“go”而不是“went”，“are”而不是“is”。“joinful”应改为“joyful”，“terr relaxed”应为“very relaxed”。可以补充朋友通常在公园做什么，使细节更完整。

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends. When the weather is warm and sunny, we usually have a picnic in a nearby park. We bring homemade food, play games and chat for a few hours, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 地点回答清楚，但“pop”应为“pub”，“the temperature and the weather is”应为“the temperature and weather are”，“drink a little bit alcohol”应为“have a little alcohol”，“make both of our relaxed”应为“helps us both relax”。建议减少重复，使用“if...; otherwise...”组织答案，并避免暗示酒精是放松的唯一原因。

例: We often meet in a park when the weather is pleasant, especially for a picnic. If it is cold or rainy, we usually go to a quiet pub instead. There, we can have a drink, share recent stories and enjoy a relaxed conversation.

提案: 内容具体，但“both of us”不适合描述多个朋友；“spend most of time”应为“spend most of our time”，“quantity time”应为“quality time”。句子过长且重复“like to play”，可以先概括活动，再说明即使不能见面也会在线玩，并补充游戏带来的感受。

例: We often play computer games together, especially a game called The Journey of the King. Even when we cannot meet in person, we play it online and talk through voice chat. It is a fun way for us to stay connected and spend quality time together.

提案: 回答有具体背景和保持联系的方式，但应使用现在完成时：“I have had a friend since...”或“I have known a friend since...”。“witch chat”应为“WeChat”，“a recent stories”应为“recent stories”，“call on the phone”可改为“have phone calls”。建议用“Although...we still...”连接信息，使句子更自然。

例: Yes, I have known one of my closest friends since secondary school. We now live in different countries, so we cannot meet in person very often. However, we still keep in touch through WeChat, have phone calls and share stories about our daily lives.

× No, there is no difference between where I meet my friends now and the past.

✓ No, there is no difference between where I meet my friends now and where I used to meet them in the past.

between连接两个并列成分，前面是“where I meet...”，后面也应使用结构平行的“where I used to meet them”。不能直接用the past与where从句进行比较。

× We usually choose a pop and we will have dinner at that place.

✓ We usually choose a pop and have dinner at that place.

usually表示经常性或习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时。will have是将来时，与这里的习惯性语境不一致。

× Well, I believe the environmental play a very key role.

✓ Well, I believe the environment plays a very important role.

environment是单数主语，所以谓语应使用plays，而不是play。environmental是形容词，不能在这里单独充当主语。

× If this circumstance made me feel comfortable, like the pub, I can speak my idea freely, but sometimes if there the circumstance is too loud and I want to express myself because I feel very upset and distracted

✓ If the environment makes me feel comfortable, like in a pub, I can express my ideas freely. However, if the environment is too loud, I feel upset and distracted and cannot express myself clearly.

这里描述的是一般情况，if从句应使用一般现在时makes，而不是过去时made。“if there the circumstance is...”结构不完整，应改为“if the environment is...”。另外，两个完整意思需要拆分或用合适的连接方式连接。

× I prefer spend time with one friend at once because I'm a person I like to have deep conversation with friends.

✓ I prefer to spend time with one friend at a time because I like having deep conversations with my friends.

because后面的内容应直接表达原因，不能使用“I'm a person I like...”这种不完整结构。表示“一次和一个朋友”应使用at a time；conversation是可数名词，这里通常用复数conversations。

× We often choose to watching a movie and order some food from the internet, that would be a perfect week for me.

✓ We often choose to watch a movie and order some food from the internet. That would be a perfect week for me.

choose to后面必须接动词原形，不能接watching。两个完整句子不能只用逗号连接，应拆成两个句子。

× There are so many difficult times and happy moments that with my friends we spend a lot of time together like good memories and sad memories so I would appreciate with them.

✓ My friends and I have shared many difficult times and happy moments, creating both good and sad memories together, so I appreciate them very much.

原句的主语、谓语和that从句排列混乱，句子结构不完整。“with my friends we spend...”不能清楚表达主语关系。改为“My friends and I have shared...”后，主语和谓语更加明确。

× so I would appreciate with them.

✓ so I appreciate them very much.

appreciate是及物动词，后面直接接宾语，不能使用appreciate with somebody。这里应直接说appreciate them。

× We always went to a park to have a picnic when the temperature and the weather is good.

✓ We always go to a park to have a picnic when the temperature and the weather are good.

always表示习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时go，而不是过去时went。when从句中的主语the temperature and the weather是复数，所以应使用are。

× We always went to a park to have a picnic when the temperature and the weather is good.

✓ We always go to a park to have a picnic when the temperature and the weather are good.

the temperature and the weather由and连接，构成复数主语，因此be动词应使用are，不能使用is。

× That makes me feel very joinful and terr relaxed.

✓ That makes me feel very joyful and very relaxed.

joinful和terr不是正确的英语形容词。表达“开心的”和“放松的”应使用joyful和relaxed。

× And sometimes we will choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit alcohol and a kind of alcohol make both of our relaxed so we can talk and share the recent stories.

✓ And sometimes we choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit of alcohol, and a kind of alcohol makes both of us relaxed, so we can talk and share recent stories.

sometimes描述习惯性行为，应使用choose，而不是将来时will choose。a kind of alcohol是单数主语，所以谓语应使用makes。

× And sometimes we will choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit alcohol and a kind of alcohol make both of our relaxed so we can talk and share the recent stories.

✓ And sometimes we choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit of alcohol, and a kind of alcohol makes both of us relaxed, so we can talk and share recent stories.

a little bit后面接不可数名词时通常使用of，因此应说a little bit of alcohol。

× And sometimes we will choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit alcohol and a kind of alcohol make both of our relaxed so we can talk and share the recent stories.

✓ And sometimes we choose a pop because we like to drink a little bit of alcohol, and a kind of alcohol makes both of us relaxed, so we can talk and share recent stories.

both of后面应使用宾格代词us，不能使用物主代词our。正确结构是make both of us relaxed。

× Well, both of us like playing computer games because we like to play a famous game named The Journey of the King so we will spend most of time on the game even if we cannot meet each other.

✓ Well, both of us like playing computer games because we like to play a famous game named The Journey of the King, so we spend most of the time playing the game even if we cannot meet each other.

固定表达是most of the time，不能省略定冠词the。这里也应使用playing the game来表示花时间进行某项活动。

× Well, both of us like playing computer games because we like to play a famous game named The Journey of the King so we will spend most of time on the game even if we cannot meet each other.

✓ Well, both of us like playing computer games because we like to play a famous game named The Journey of the King, so we spend most of the time playing the game even if we cannot meet each other.

句子描述的是通常的活动，不是某个将来的计划，因此应使用一般现在时spend，而不是will spend。

× So it's very quantity time to play game with my friends.

✓ So it's quality time to play games with my friends.

play game中的game是可数名词，泛指这类活动时通常使用复数games。quantity time不是正确的固定表达；表达“高质量的相处时间”应使用quality time。

× Yes, I have a friend since I graduated from the secondary school.

✓ Yes, I have known a friend since I graduated from secondary school.

since表示从过去某个时间一直持续到现在，主句应使用现在完成时have known，而不是一般现在时have。表示学校类别时，secondary school前通常不需要the。

× We live in different countries and we cannot meet each other in person frequently, but we still keep in touch on the witch chat, we will sometimes call on the phone and share a recent stories and experience.

✓ We live in different countries and cannot meet each other in person frequently, but we still keep in touch on WeChat. We sometimes call each other on the phone and share recent stories and experiences.

keep in touch with someone或keep in touch on a messaging app需要合适的介词结构；这里应使用on WeChat。“will sometimes”不适合描述日常习惯，应改为sometimes call。原句中的逗号连接了多个完整句子，应拆分。

× We live in different countries and we cannot meet each other in person frequently, but we still keep in touch on the witch chat, we will sometimes call on the phone and share a recent stories and experience.

✓ We live in different countries and cannot meet each other in person frequently, but we still keep in touch on WeChat. We sometimes call each other on the phone and share recent stories and experiences.

a不能和复数stories连用，因此应去掉a并使用recent stories。experience在这里表示多种经历，通常使用复数experiences。