Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar (verb forms and subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Replace vague phrases with specific examples (e.g., favourite cafe or type of restaurant).

例: Yes. When I was younger, I usually met my friends at school. Now, I prefer meeting them at a café or restaurant because it’s more relaxed and we can talk without rushing.

提案: Organize the answer: give a topic sentence, then two clear reasons with a linking word. Avoid unclear terms (e.g., 'RMB') and grammar errors (subject-verb agreement). Provide a concrete example of a suitable or unsuitable place.

例: Places are suitable depending on the environment. For example, busy markets are too noisy for deep conversations, whereas quiet cafés with soft background music are ideal because you can hear each other and relax.

提案: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve naturalness by using smoother linking phrases and correcting minor wording ('tired for my brain and my energy' → 'draining'). Keep it concise and avoid redundancy.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because it allows for deeper conversations. In contrast, large groups can be exhausting and make it hard to connect with anyone individually.

提案: Give a brief explanation and one specific exception or alternative to enrich the answer. Use natural phrasing ('home is a private space' and 'I usually don't invite them over').

例: No, I usually don’t invite friends to my home because I value my privacy. However, I might invite close friends for a quiet dinner on special occasions.

提案: This answer is personal and strong. Improve grammar ('having my hardship' → 'going through hard times') and be slightly more concise. Add a linking phrase to introduce the example.

例: Friends are very important, especially during hard times. For instance, when I was struggling with my mental health, they supported me with encouragement and practical help.

提案: Correct singular/plural issues ('cafés'), use articles, and avoid informal buzzwords unless explained. Provide a clearer linking phrase and one specific example of an activity or a café.

例: Yes, we often visit popular cafés on weekends to try different foods. For example, last weekend we went to a new café that serves excellent Italian pastries, which is my favourite.

提案: Answer is direct but short. Add a brief reason or example to enrich the response and use a linking word. Be slightly more specific about the kind of restaurant or time.

例: We usually meet at a nearby restaurant because it’s comfortable and has a relaxed atmosphere where we can chat for an hour or two.

提案: Avoid repetition ('class', 'to spend to spend') and improve sentence flow with linking words. Provide specific examples of films or a recent cooking class to make the answer more vivid.

例: Besides trying different foods, we sometimes watch movies together or attend cooking classes. For example, last month we took an Italian cooking workshop and it was great fun.

提案: Good personal detail and clear structure. Improve naturalness by tightening phrasing and correcting minor awkwardness ('willing to share her opinions in front of others' → 'not afraid to share her opinions'). Add one brief example of her support.

例: Yes. I’ve known a friend named Phivian since I was five. She’s always been supportive and isn’t afraid to share her opinions; for example, she helped me choose a university course when I was undecided.

× When I was younger, I met my friends in schools.

✓ When I was younger, I met my friends at school.

Use 'school' (singular) or 'at school' as a general place where children meet; 'schools' sounds wrong here because it implies multiple institutions. Also 'at school' is the natural preposition for attending or meeting during school time.

× As I grow up, I tend to invite them to a cafe or a restaurant and then we share our daily our daily lives.

✓ As I grew up, I tended to invite them to a cafe or a restaurant, and then we shared our daily lives.

Tense should be consistent with 'When I was younger' (past). Use past simple 'grew up' and 'tended' to match. Also remove the duplicate phrase 'our daily'. Finally, 'share our daily lives' in past becomes 'shared our daily lives.'

× Some places are really noisy which is not suitable for people to have a deep conversation and places with nice music such as an RMB or pure music offers a more quiet place for people.

✓ Some places are really noisy, which is not suitable for people who want to have a deep conversation, and places with pleasant music, such as ambient or acoustic music, offer a quieter place for people.

Run-on and preposition/relative clause issues: add a comma before 'which' and use 'people who want to have' to connect purpose. 'Offers' should be 'offer' to agree with plural 'places'. 'RMB' seems incorrect; likely 'ambient' or 'acoustic' was intended. Use comparative 'quieter' rather than 'more quiet.'

× I prefer to spend time with one friend at a time because I get to know more about this person.

✓ I prefer to spend time with one friend at a time because I get to know more about that person.

Pronoun consistency: after 'one friend' use 'that person' rather than 'this person' to refer back. While not strictly a verb error, this improves coherence. (Kept tense and agreement correct.)

× On the other hand, talking to so many people simultaneously is pretty tired for my brain and my energy.

✓ On the other hand, talking to so many people at once is pretty tiring for my brain and my energy.

Use the phrase 'at once' rather than 'simultaneously' for natural speech. 'Tiring' (adjective) describes an activity; 'tired' describes a person. Use 'tiring' here. 'For my brain and my energy' is awkward but kept with minor adjustment; could be 'drains my energy.'

× No, I consider my home a private place so normally I don't invite them to my living place.

✓ No, I consider my home a private place, so normally I don't invite them to my home.

Use 'home' rather than 'living place'; 'to my home' is the natural prepositional phrase. Add a comma before 'so'.

× They are really important when I am having my hardship.

✓ They were really important when I was having a hard time.

Context discusses past support, so use past tense 'were' and 'was having.' 'Hardship' is a noun but 'having a hard time' is the natural collocation in English for personal difficulties.

× I still vividly remember that they gave me a lot of encouragement when I was dealing with my mental problems.

✓ I still vividly remember that they gave me a lot of encouragement when I was dealing with mental health problems.

Use 'mental health problems' as the common phrase; 'my' is acceptable but often omitted. Tense is correct (past). This correction improves wording and register.

× Yes, we often check out Instagramable cafe together on weekends.

✓ Yes, we often check out Instagrammable cafes together on weekends.

Use plural 'cafes' when speaking generally, and use the adjective 'Instagrammable' (spelling) to describe cafes. Also add 'together' placement is fine.

× We like to try a wide range of good food and cuisines, for example Italian food is my favourite

✓ We like to try a wide range of foods and cuisines; for example, Italian food is my favourite.

Use plural 'foods' and separate clauses with a semicolon or period. Add commas for clarity and correct punctuation at end. 'Favourite' is British spelling; kept.

× We often meet in a restaurant where we can chat for a while.

✓ We often meet at a restaurant where we can chat for a while.

Use 'at a restaurant' for meeting location rather than 'in' which can also be correct but 'at' is more natural for meeting places. This is a subtle preposition choice (There be category includes location prepositions).

× Apart from trying a wide range of food, we also watch movies together sometimes or we book cookery classes class together and it is always fun to spend to spend time with them.

✓ Apart from trying a wide range of foods, we also sometimes watch movies together or book cookery classes, and it is always fun to spend time with them.

Remove duplicate words 'class' and repeated 'to spend'. Place adverb 'sometimes' in a natural position. Use plural 'foods'. Ensure parallel structure: 'watch... or book...' and add commas for clarity.

× I have known a friend since I was five and her name is Phivian.

✓ I have known a friend since I was five; her name is Phivian.

Use present perfect 'have known' is correct with 'since'. Add punctuation to separate clauses. No tense change needed.

× She has always been really supportive and so sweet and willing to share her opinions in front of others.

✓ She has always been really supportive, very sweet, and willing to share her opinions in front of others.

Add commas to separate adjectives and improve flow. 'So sweet' changed to 'very sweet' for formality; structure lists coordinated adjectives and qualities.