Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly state your main point, then give one or two clear supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: No, there is not much difference. I still meet friends in similar places, such as cafes and parks, because our friendship and the way we socialize have remained the same since I lived in China. For example, we usually meet at a nearby café to talk and relax.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Use simpler, accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'comfortable seating', 'quiet atmosphere') and avoid wordy repetitions.

例: Some places are suitable because they have comfortable seating and a quiet atmosphere, so we can talk easily. In contrast, noisy or crowded places are not suitable because it is hard to hear each other.

提案: Give a direct answer then support it with two clear reasons, using correct tense and simpler phrasing. Avoid vague adjectives and redundant phrases.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because group gatherings lead to lively conversations and more fun activities. For example, we often debate future plans and share advice, which helps me see different perspectives.

提案: Answer directly and correct small errors (e.g., 'housewarming'). Give one specific example of an occasion and a brief reason why.

例: Yes, I usually invite friends for special occasions, such as my birthday or a housewarming party, because those events are easier to organize at home and allow us to celebrate privately.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence about importance, then give two specific reasons with simple, correct language. Fix grammar (singular/plural) and avoid unclear phrases like 'suitable towards nature'.

例: Friends are very important to me because I can share personal problems with them that I don't feel comfortable discussing with my parents. For instance, they help me find practical solutions and offer emotional support.

提案: Be precise about frequency and avoid repetition. Use correct expressions ('every weekend', 'once or twice a week/day') and give one clear example of activities you do together.

例: Yes, I usually go out with friends every weekend and sometimes once or twice during the week for errands or short meetups. For example, we often explore different parts of the city on Saturdays.

提案: Give a direct answer and then one or two specific details about topics you discuss. Keep sentences grammatical and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: We usually meet at a coffee shop because it is relaxed and quiet. There, we often discuss careers and future opportunities, for example sharing job leads and advice on professional development.

提案: State the activity clearly and give a precise frequency. Correct grammar and word choice ('once or twice a year', 'friends' not 'French') and add one specific detail about the trips.

例: We usually go on a trip once or twice a year with a small group of four or five friends. For example, last year we planned a weekend hiking trip where we shared responsibilities for transport and food.

提案: Answer directly and correct timeline inconsistencies (if you said 'more than a decade' then the year should match). Provide one specific detail about your long-term friendship and why it matters.

例: Yes, I have two friends I've known for over ten years: Shuba and Imansu. We met in fifth grade in 2014, and our long friendship matters because we share similar values and support each other through important life decisions.

× I'll say no, there is no a lot of difference when I meet my friends in the past and when I meet my friends in today's world because the relationship with them of the relationship with them is continuously the same as I used to be with them in China.

✓ I'll say no, there is not a lot of difference between where I met my friends in the past and where I meet them today, because my relationship with them has remained the same as it was when I was in China.

The sentence has article errors ('a lot of difference' should be 'not a lot of difference' and 'there is no a lot' is incorrect) and several other issues: incorrect tense and redundant phrasing. Use 'between' for comparison, past simple 'met' for past meetings, 'today' instead of 'in today's world', and present perfect 'has remained' to indicate continuity from past to present. Remove repeated phrase 'of the relationship with them' to avoid redundancy.

× It's almost the same. But regularly used to hang out with

✓ It's almost the same, and I regularly used to hang out with them.

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb structure. Add subject 'I' and complete verb phrase 'used to hang out' and specify the object 'with them' to make a complete sentence. Ensure punctuation connects the ideas.

× Well, some places are suitable for meeting because I mean they have a friendly and cozy sitting infrastructure whereas the other places have not the suitable places to sit and have conversation around that place in such a way now some places are suitable and whereas some are not.

✓ Well, some places are suitable for meeting because they have friendly, cozy seating, whereas other places do not have suitable seating for conversation, so some places are suitable and others are not.

Use 'seating' (noun) instead of 'sitting', and use 'do not have' instead of 'have not'. Remove redundant phrases ('around that place in such a way') and correct prepositions and conjunctions to contrast ideas clearly. Also adjust article usage ('the other places' to 'other places').

× To be very honest, I'll say I prefer to spend time with my group of friends because in a group we had an intense conversation about life and we had a fun in each and every aspect of life that what we are going through and it's such a cozy and environmental friendly inner group of friends.

✓ To be very honest, I prefer to spend time with my group of friends because in a group we have intense conversations about life and have fun in many aspects of what we are going through; it's a cozy and environmentally friendly close-knit group of friends.

Use present tense 'have' for habitual actions instead of past 'had'. 'A fun' is incorrect; use 'have fun'. 'Environmental friendly' should be 'environmentally friendly' (adverb + adjective). 'Inner group' is awkward; 'close-knit' better expresses the idea. Ensure plurality consistency: 'conversations' and 'friends'.

× Generally I invite my friends to home on special occasions like my birthday party or like a houseworm party in such a occasion I invite my friends home.

✓ Generally I invite my friends to my home on special occasions like my birthday or a housewarming party; on such occasions I invite my friends over.

Use 'my home' instead of 'to home' and 'housewarming' not 'houseworm'. Use plural 'occasions' and 'on such occasions'. 'Invite over' is the common collocation. Correct article and word choice errors.

× Well, friends are the backbone of my day to day life, I mean there are some of the words which I can't share with my parents The friends are the one with whom I whom I can discuss the problem and issue and we had a great resolution or how to work on those things, the outcomes are very suitable towards nature.

✓ Well, friends are the backbone of my day-to-day life; there are some things I cannot share with my parents. Friends are the ones with whom I can discuss problems and issues, and we find good solutions to work on those things; the outcomes are often positive.

Correct pronoun and number agreement: 'friends are the ones' not 'the one', and avoid duplicate 'whom I whom I'. Replace 'words' with 'things' and use 'cannot' and hyphenate 'day-to-day'. Use present tense 'can discuss' and 'find solutions' for habitual actions. Simplify and clarify the final clause 'outcomes are often positive'.

× Yeah, I often go out with my friends on every weekends, on every weekends as well as on almost once or twice in a day, especially for some work or for some fun as well to revolve around the cities here and there.

✓ Yeah, I often go out with my friends every weekend and sometimes once or twice a day, especially for work or for fun to explore the city here and there.

Use 'every weekend' (no 'on') and not 'on every weekends' (plural conflict). 'Almost once or twice in a day' is awkward; 'sometimes once or twice a day' is clearer. Use 'explore the city' instead of 'revolve around the cities'. Fix prepositions and plurality.

× We often meet with each other at a coffee shop and we sit over there and had a positive conversation towards the career and how the things going to work in our way the way we desire to work and what are the opportunities in the future that we can work and we can grab those all things.

✓ We often meet at a coffee shop and sit there and have positive conversations about careers, how things will work out for us, and what future opportunities we can pursue and seize.

Use present simple 'have' for habitual actions instead of past 'had'. Remove unnecessary 'with each other' after 'meet'. Replace 'towards the career' with 'about careers', and simplify phrasing: 'how things will work out for us' and 'opportunities we can pursue and seize'. Use correct verb forms and article usage.

× So we add a conversation in those all things

✓ So we have discussions about all those things.

'Add a conversation in those all things' is ungrammatical; use 'have discussions about all those things'. Correct article and word order.

× Well, we usually go on a trip once or twice in a year and it's a planned trip that we organize with a group of four to five friends went together and overall it's a very great experience to go on a trip with French.

✓ Well, we usually go on a trip once or twice a year; it's a planned trip that we organize with a group of four or five friends, and overall it's a great experience to travel with friends.

Use 'once or twice a year' (no 'in'). Remove past 'went together' which is redundant; use present simple 'we organize'. 'Very great' is redundant; use 'great'. 'French' is incorrect for 'friends'. Correct adjective/adverb usage and word choice.

× Well, I have a couple of friends whom I know for more than a decade especially the two friends of mine Shuba Man and Imansu.

✓ Well, I have a couple of friends whom I have known for more than a decade, especially two friends of mine, Shuba Man and Imansu.

Use present perfect 'have known' for duration ('for more than a decade'). Add commas to set off the names. 'The two friends of mine' is awkward; 'two friends of mine' is preferred. Fix tense and punctuation.

× I know them since fifth grade back when in twenty twenty fourteen and they are the friend they are a very good friend of mindset today.

✓ I have known them since fifth grade, back in 2014, and they are very good friends with a similar mindset today.

Use present perfect 'have known' with 'since'. 'Back when in twenty twenty fourteen' should be 'back in 2014'. Fix number agreement: 'they are very good friends' (plural). 'Of mindset' should be 'with a similar mindset'.