Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear direct answer about difference, use correct tense and concise structure. Start with a topic sentence stating whether there is a difference, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you met then vs now) using linking words (for example, now, whereas, however). Avoid long hesitations and repeating words.

例: Yes, there is a difference. When I was in sixth grade I usually met my friends at school because we spent most of the day together. However, now I usually meet friends at cafés or shopping malls, where we can relax and talk for longer.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., Some places are more suitable because...). Provide two concrete reasons (safety, convenience, atmosphere) and an example. Use correct grammar (it depends -> it depends on) and avoid filler words.

例: Some places are more suitable for meeting because they are safe and comfortable. For example, public places like cafés are convenient and have a relaxed atmosphere, so we can talk without interruptions. In contrast, noisy or crowded places are not good because it is hard to hear each other.

提案: Give a direct preference and explain with clear reasons and linking words. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Say whether you prefer one-on-one or groups depending on mood, then give a short specific example of each situation.

例: It depends on my mood. If I feel sad I prefer to meet one close friend because we can talk privately and I get support. But when I want to have fun I prefer a group because we can play games and go out together.

提案: Answer simply and provide a clear reason and a brief example. Use correct grammar (I invite / I have invited) and avoid redundancy. Mention who you invite and what you do when friends come.

例: Yes, I often invite friends to my home, especially for parties. For example, when my family organizes a celebration I invite close friends and we have dinner, play music, and enjoy the evening together.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating the importance, then give two specific roles friends play (emotional support, advice) with a short example. Use correct grammar (friends are) and concise language. Avoid hesitations and repeated phrases.

例: Friends are very important to me because they provide emotional support and practical advice. For example, when I felt sad a close friend listened to me and suggested steps I could take to improve my situation.

提案: Answer directly (yes/no) and then give frequency and a reason or typical activity. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid repeating phrases. Mention how often and what you usually do when you go out.

例: Yes, I often go out with my friends, usually on weekends. We usually go to cafés or the cinema, and my parents allow it because they know my friends and trust them.

提案: Answer with current habitual meeting place, not only past story. Start with a clear topic sentence (We usually meet at...). If you include a past anecdote, keep it short and relevant. Use correct tense and concise wording.

例: We usually meet at cafés near our university or at the shopping mall. I remember first meeting one friend in eighth grade at school; at first we were shy, but we became close over time.

提案: Begin with a topic sentence listing common activities, then give two specific examples with linking words. Use appropriate vocabulary (chat, shop, go to cafés) and avoid using 'gossip' negatively if unsure—say chat or talk about different topics.

例: I usually chat and hang out with my friends. For example, we often go shopping for clothes and then go to a café to drink tea and eat snacks while we talk.

提案: Provide a clear yes/no answer and then a specific detail (how long and an example of shared experience). If you don't have one, say so and explain briefly why. Avoid vague answers like 'Time' or 'I have no idea'.

例: Yes, I have a friend I have known for more than eight years; we met at school and still keep in touch. Alternatively: No, I don't have a very long-term friend, but I have several friends I have known for a few years from college.

× When I was uh, 6th class, I meet my friends, uh, first of all, I have some awkward to uh, talk to her, but slowly slow, slow down, slow down.

✓ When I was in sixth grade, I met my friends. At first, I felt awkward talking to her, but slowly I became more comfortable.

The speaker refers to past events, so verbs should be in the past tense (met, felt, became). Also add the preposition in for 'in sixth grade' and use 'felt awkward' instead of 'have some awkward'. Combine and simplify clauses for clarity.

× She has, uh, I will also talk to her and she was, uh, really nice girl and she was.

✓ She was really a nice girl, and I would talk to her also.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect auxiliary forms. Use past tense 'was' for description of the girl. Use 'would' or 'also talked' to keep past reference. Remove redundant fragments.

× I think it's, uh, it's depend.

✓ I think it depends.

The subject 'it' requires the verb with third person singular 'depends' in the present simple. Remove filler words for clarity.

× Uh, I usually meet my friend on uh, some public place because it's so safe and we are enjoy going to cafe because we gotta enjoy, uh, time spent for each other.

✓ I usually meet my friends in public places because they are safe, and we enjoy going to cafes to spend time together.

Use 'in' with 'public places' and plural 'friends/places/cafes' for general statements. Use 'enjoy' without 'are' and rephrase 'time spent for each other' to 'spend time together' for natural English.

× It's also depend on my mood.

✓ It also depends on my mood.

Third person singular subject 'it' needs 'depends' in present simple. Maintain consistent tense.

× When I was a sad uh I will I have to call my friend and come to to meet and some public place.

✓ When I was sad I had to call my friend to meet at a public place.

Referring to past feelings requires past tense 'was' and 'had to'. Use 'call my friend to meet' and 'at a public place' for correct preposition and structure.

× I think it's a depends on my mood.

✓ I think it depends on my mood.

Remove the article 'a' and use the correct third person singular verb 'depends' in present tense.

× But when I was a fun time I will call my old friend and enjoy two time spent.

✓ But when I was having a good time I would call my old friends and enjoy the time together.

Use past continuous 'was having' or 'had' and conditional/past habitual 'would'. 'Friends' plural and 'enjoy the time together' are natural phrases. 'Two time' is incorrect; replace with 'the time'.

× Yes, of course I invited to my friend my home, my family organized some party, so I will call my friend close friend and groups of friend because they make they got really enjoy the party.

✓ Yes, of course I invited my friends to my home. When my family organized a party I would call my close friends and groups of friends because they really enjoy the party.

Use past tense 'invited' with correct word order 'invited my friends to my home'. Use 'when' to set time and past habitual 'would call'. Correct noun forms 'close friends' and 'groups of friends', and simplify 'they really enjoy the party'.

× In my opinion, uh, friends is a very important because they make me feel uh, very relaxed and just to give motivation and support when I was a sad, my close friend give me some motivation and suggest me to how to work uh, for future so.

✓ In my opinion, friends are very important because they make me feel relaxed and give me motivation and support when I am sad. My close friend gives me suggestions about how to work for the future.

Use plural subject 'friends are'. Use present tense for general opinion 'make me feel' and 'give me'. Use present simple 'is sad' -> 'am sad' for personal statements. Correct verb agreement 'friend gives' and preposition 'suggestions about'.

× Yes, of course, uh, my friends when I was going out with my friends, uh, my family also allowed it to me because my friends also convinced with my parents and they allow me to go with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course. When I went out with my friends, my family allowed me because my friends had convinced my parents and they let me go with my friends.

Use simple past 'went' and 'allowed'. 'Convinced' should be past perfect 'had convinced' to show prior action. Use 'let me go' instead of 'allow me to go' for natural phrasing.

× When I was class eight grade, I meet her in school.

✓ When I was in eighth grade, I met her at school.

Use 'in eighth grade' and past tense 'met'. Use 'at school' as the usual preposition.

× First of all, I usually don't know how to talk, how to start to talk with her.

✓ At first, I didn't know how to start a conversation with her.

Use past tense 'didn't know' for past event and idiomatic phrase 'start a conversation with her' instead of repetitive 'how to talk'.

× Then slowly I will talk to her and she's very nicely, nice and friendly.

✓ Then slowly I talked to her, and she was very nice and friendly.

Use past tense 'talked' and past description 'was'. 'Nicely' is an adverb; use adjective 'nice' to describe the person.

× Lovely girl.

✓ She was a lovely girl.

Fragment needs a subject and verb to be a complete sentence. Add 'She was' to form a full sentence.

× I usually do with my friends sometimes we are gossip some another topic and some shopping, going to shopping from clothes and go to the cafe and drink some teas and snacks for a wild time and.

✓ Usually, with my friends we gossip about different topics, go shopping for clothes, and go to cafes to drink tea and eat snacks for a good time.

Fix sentence fragments and parallel structure: 'gossip about topics', 'go shopping', 'go to cafes'. Use 'tea' uncountable and 'eat snacks'. Remove 'wild time' which is unnatural; use 'a good time'.

× Time. I think I have no idea.

✓ I don't remember; I think I have no idea.

'Time.' is a fragment without verb; combine into a complete response. Use present tense 'don't remember' or 'have no idea' for clarity.