Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific detail and a brief reason. Correct plural/singular and use linking word 'because' correctly.

例: Yes. Now we usually meet on weekends because, as PhD students, we are busy with research during weekdays. For example, we often get together on Saturday evenings to relax and catch up.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repetition.

例: Some places are more suitable because they offer privacy and comfort. For example, I prefer meeting at my home when I want to have private conversations or play games without interruptions.

提案: Be direct and finish your idea. State your preference then explain with a clear reason. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'cape a relationship'.

例: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it allows me to catch up with several people at once. This saves time and helps maintain multiple friendships concurrently.

提案: Use correct verbs and clearer phrasing. Provide one or two specific activities you do with friends at home and link them with 'for example'.

例: Yes, I often invite friends to my flat. For example, we play board games, cook meals together, and try different dishes while chatting.

提案: Give a direct statement about importance, then one specific example. Avoid repetition and correct grammar (friends are, I need others' help).

例: Friends are very important to me because they offer emotional and academic support. For example, when I prepare a paper for a top journal, colleagues help me with feedback and proofreading.

提案: Structure your answer: give frequency, typical activities, and one example. Remove repetition and use correct tense.

例: Yes, I often go out with friends, usually for dinner at a nice restaurant. After dinner, we sometimes return to my home to play games together.

提案: Start with a clear frequency phrase and then give specific typical places. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

例: We usually meet about once a month because our research keeps us busy. When we do meet, it's often at someone's house or at a nearby café for a longer catch-up.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples with correct names/spelling and brief explanation. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: We usually play games together at my home. For example, we often play Mahjong, a traditional Chinese tile game, and sometimes poker.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with specific details. Use past tense consistently and finish your thought.

例: I don't have many long-term friends because I moved around a lot during my education. For example, I attended primary and secondary school in my hometown, then went to high school in another city and university elsewhere, so friendships changed frequently.

× There is a clear difference. And For now, I usually meet my friends in weekend because we are a PhD student and we need to do research in weekdays.

✓ There is a clear difference. At the moment, I usually meet my friends on weekends because we are PhD students and we need to do research on weekdays.

'in weekend' and 'in weekdays' are incorrect prepositional usage; use 'on weekends' and 'on weekdays' (preposition rule). 'For now' is awkward; 'At the moment' fits better (tense/use). 'a PhD student' is singular while referring to a group; use plural 'PhD students' to agree with 'we' (singular/plural agreement).

× So we just have time in weekend.

✓ So we only have time on weekends.

Subject-verb is fine but 'in weekend' is wrong preposition and singular; use 'on weekends' and 'only' better conveys meaning. This fixes preposition and number usage.

× Because some place This is more private for example, where I want to talk with my friends about my girlfriend or my prevalent question, and we will discuss it in my home or we will play some games in my home.

✓ Because some places are more private; for example, when I want to talk with my friends about my girlfriend or personal matters, we discuss them at my home or play games there.

Incorrect noun number 'some place' should be 'some places' and sentence fragments fixed (sentence structure). 'in my home' is acceptable but 'at my home' or 'there' is more natural (preposition). 'my prevalent question' is unclear; 'personal matters' or 'private issues' is more appropriate (word choice). Also verb agreement: 'This is' unnecessary; corrected to plural 'are'.

× Actually I prefer to spend time with a group of friends because we can it can save my time actually because I don't like to cape a relationship many times, but I know the good relationship needs to need to

✓ Actually, I prefer to spend time with a group of friends because it can save me time. I don't like to repeat efforts in relationships, but I know a good relationship needs care.

Run-on and repetition ('we can it can', 'actually' repeated) and incorrect verb 'cape' (likely 'endure' or 'maintain'); rephrased to present tense correct forms. 'Save my time' -> 'save me time' (collocation). Ended incomplete thought by supplying plausible completion 'needs care'.

× Yes, I build a bit of friends to my home because I live in the UK and we all like play games in home, or cook some food and taste them together.

✓ Yes, I invite a few friends to my home because I live in the UK and we all like to play games at home or cook food and taste it together.

'build a bit of friends to my home' is incorrect collocation; 'invite a few friends to my home' is correct. 'play games in home' should be 'play games at home' (preposition). 'some food and taste them' mismatches plural; 'cook food and taste it' or 'taste the food' (pronoun agreement). Added 'to' in infinitive 'like to play'. Articles corrected.

× I think that friends is important for it's very important for me in And when I need when I need some help.

✓ I think that friends are very important to me, especially when I need help.

'friends is' incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'friends are'. 'important for it's very important for me in' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplified to 'are very important to me'. Removed repetition 'when I need when I need'.

× For example, when I want to finish a paper and publish publish it on top journals, I need others' help.

✓ For example, when I want to finish a paper and publish it in top journals, I need others' help.

Use 'in top journals' rather than 'on top journals' (preposition). Removed duplicate 'publish'.

× Yes, I often go out with my friends and we always make a dinner we'll choose a good restaurant and when we finish when we finish eat eat dinner and we will play games in my home.

✓ Yes, I often go out with my friends; we usually choose a good restaurant for dinner, and after we finish eating dinner we play games at my home.

Adverb placement and repetition ('always make a dinner' -> 'usually choose a restaurant for dinner'). Removed repeated phrases and corrected 'eat eat' to 'eating'. 'in my home' -> 'at my home' (preposition). Sentence split for clarity.

× For now I meet with my friends maybe a monthly because we are so busy on my own research and also if we have some important event we will meet together.

✓ At the moment I meet my friends maybe once a month because we are so busy with our own research, and if we have an important event we meet together.

'a monthly' incorrect; use 'once a month' or 'monthly'. 'on my own research' -> 'with our own research' (preposition and pronoun agreement). 'will meet' changed to present 'meet' because statement about scheduled/regular actions fits present simple.

× We usually do some games in my home. For example, we will play the Majang game. The Majang is a traditional Chinese games and also we will play poke.

✓ We usually play games at my home. For example, we play mahjong. Mahjong is a traditional Chinese game, and we also play poker.

'do some games' -> 'play games' (verb collocation). 'in my home' -> 'at my home'. 'Majang' misspelling -> 'mahjong'; 'games' plural inconsistency -> 'game'. 'poke' likely 'poker'. Changed future 'will play' to present simple for habitual actions.

× Actually I didn't have any friends for a long time because I always changed my change place to study.

✓ Actually, I didn't have any long-term friends because I kept changing my place of study.

'for a long time' acceptable but 'didn't have any friends for a long time' ambiguous; 'long-term friends' clearer. 'always changed my change place to study' is ungrammatical; use 'kept changing my place of study' or 'kept moving for my studies' (verb tense and word choice).

× For example, my primary school and secondary school in my hometown and my high school in another city and my university

✓ For example, my primary and secondary schools were in my hometown, my high school was in another city, and my university was elsewhere.

Missing verbs ('were') causing sentence fragment (sentence structure). Plural 'schools' and proper verb forms required. Added 'elsewhere' to complete thought. Corrected preposition omissions.