Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence stating the main difference, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (past tense and articles) and avoid redundancy.

例: Main sentence: "Yes — things have changed: I used to meet friends at home, but now we usually meet outdoors in the evenings." Supporting detail: "In the past, I felt comfortable inviting friends to my house and we often played board games like Ludo. However, due to our busy schedules now, we mostly take short walks together in the evening."

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence (state which places are suitable). Use linking words to contrast (for example, while/on the other hand). Be specific about why quiet places are better (privacy, ability to hear). Fix grammar and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "cinemas" not "cinema holes"). Keep it under five sentences.

例: "Quiet places such as cafés and quiet restaurants are most suitable for meeting because they offer privacy and allow people to talk without being interrupted. For example, a calm café lets you concentrate on the conversation and makes it easier to hear each other. On the other hand, busy markets or cinemas are noisy or crowded, so they are not good for long conversations."

提案: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then provide two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid repetitive phrases and unclear pronouns. Use precise vocabulary for relationships and emotions.

例: "I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I enjoy lively conversations and shared activities. For instance, in the evenings we often talk, laugh and make plans for the future. I like groups because they give me emotional support and different perspectives."

提案: Begin with a clear yes/no and reason. Use chronological or listing linking words (for example, "usually"/"also"). Be specific about activities and correct grammar (possessives, verb forms). Avoid unclear references (what is GDF?).

例: "Yes, I often invite friends to my home, especially at weekends when we have more free time. Usually we cook together and try new recipes, which we both enjoy, and later we play board games or video games in my living room."

提案: Start with a direct statement about importance, then give two specific reasons with examples. Avoid contradicting or unclear phrases and correct grammar. Use more precise vocabulary for emotional support and trust.

例: "Friends are very important to me because they provide companionship and emotional support. For example, we spend much of our free time together playing video games and helping each other with studies, which brings me comfort and encouragement."

提案: Answer clearly and briefly: say how often and give one or two specific reasons. Remove filler words and correct confusing phrases. Use time expressions (e.g., "regularly," "a few times a week") and give concrete examples of activities.

例: "Yes, I go out with my friends regularly, about two or three times a week. We usually visit cafés, play games in the park, or study together at a library."

提案: Start with a topic sentence saying where you usually meet. Use linking words to add details and be specific about locations and activities. Correct tense and redundancy. Keep it under five sentences.

例: "We usually meet at my house because I live in a three-floor home with plenty of space and a private area for friends. We often play board games and video games there, though sometimes we also meet in parks for fresh air."

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence describing main activities, then give specific examples with linking words. Correct verb forms and be concise. Mention outcomes or benefits to show deeper content.

例: "We usually hang out, but a lot of our time is spent studying together. For example, last year we prepared for board exams by teaching each other, checking for mistakes and quizzing one another, which helped us improve our grades."

提案: Answer directly with how long you've known the friend, then give one or two specific details about your relationship and activities. Correct tense and avoid repetition. Use precise phrases like "since fifth grade" and mention a concrete example of shared history.

例: "Yes — I have a friend I have known since fifth grade. We still meet regularly to plan for our studies and future goals, and I consider them a respectful and trustworthy friend."

× In past, I usually meet my friend in my home because I feel more comfortable.

✓ In the past, I usually met my friends at my home because I felt more comfortable.

The sentence refers to past habits, so past tense should be used: 'met' and 'felt'. Also use plural 'friends' if more than one and 'in the past' requires the definite article; 'at my home' is more natural than 'in my home'.

× We also play some sports like Ludo in my home.

✓ We also played some games like Ludo at my home.

When describing past routines, use past tense 'played'. 'Ludo' is a board game so 'games' is more appropriate than 'sports'. Use 'at my home' for location.

× But at present because of our heavy schedule, we have not enough time to meet and spend a lot of time so we usually meet at the time of evening while walking.

✓ But at present, because of our heavy schedules, we do not have enough time to meet and spend a long time together, so we usually meet in the evening to go for a walk.

Use present tense for current habits: 'do not have'. 'Schedules' should be plural. 'Spend a lot of time' is awkward; 'spend a long time together' is clearer. 'In the evening' is correct phrase and 'go for a walk' is natural.

× I think for meetings quiet atmospheric is the best choice like aesthetic cafes, restaurants because they are quiet and the atmosphere is also very good and comfortable so person can communicate to each other with pull of concentration while on the other hand cinema holes and busy market

✓ I think for meetings a quiet atmosphere is the best choice, such as aesthetic cafes or restaurants, because they are calm and comfortable, so people can concentrate and communicate with each other; on the other hand, cinemas and busy markets are not suitable.

Word order and articles were incorrect: 'a quiet atmosphere' not 'quiet atmospheric'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples. 'People' is needed instead of 'person' for general statements. 'Concentrate' is the correct verb. 'Cinema holes' is incorrect; 'cinemas' is appropriate. Sentence was incomplete and required restructuring.

× To be honest, I love making friends.

✓ To be honest, I love making friends.

This sentence is correct in present tense; no change needed.

× Most of the time or in the time of evening I usually meet my group of friends, we talk, we laugh and we always plan for our future I love it because I think friends are the only people who love and care themselves and ourselves themselves and each other.

✓ Most of the time, especially in the evenings, I usually meet my group of friends; we talk, we laugh, and we always plan for our future. I love it because I think friends are the only people who love and care for each other.

Use plural 'evenings' and add commas/semicolons to separate clauses. 'Care themselves and ourselves themselves' is incorrect and redundant; use 'care for each other'. Keep present tense 'meet', 'talk', 'laugh'.

× Yes definitely I think on weekends when we have enough time we usually spend our most of the time while cooking.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think on weekends, when we have enough time, we usually spend most of our time cooking.

Reorder words: 'most of our time' is correct; remove 'while' which is unnecessary. Punctuation added for clarity.

× My friend is also love cooking so we just make some meals for us and we really enjoy this thing.

✓ My friend also loves cooking, so we just make some meals for ourselves and really enjoy it.

Correct verb agreement: 'friend... loves'. Use reflexive pronoun 'ourselves' not 'us'. 'Enjoy it' is more natural than 'enjoy this thing'.

× We also love playing games in my home like GDF is my best friend.

✓ We also love playing games at my home; for example, GDF is my best friend.

Use 'at my home' for location. Original sentence conflated ideas; separate example with clearer phrasing. Ensure proper punctuation.

× I think for me friends are very important because most of the time I usually spend my free time with them and I love and I think friends are the only who one cares and respect to us.

✓ I think friends are very important to me because I usually spend my free time with them, and I believe friends are the ones who care for and respect us.

Remove redundancy 'for me'. Use 'friends are the ones who' not 'the only who one'. Correct verb phrases: 'care for and respect us'.

× We love we usually spend our time while playing video games and I think because of the fun activity

✓ We usually spend time playing video games because it is a fun activity.

Reorder sentence to remove repetition and incomplete clause. Make clear cause: 'because it is a fun activity'.

× Well to be honest I regularly go out with my friend because I love it because in the every time I have much free time so I just love it and I enjoy to spend my dad time to my precious time to my friend with my friend and yes I think regularly.

✓ Well, to be honest, I regularly go out with my friends because I enjoy it and often have free time, so I like spending my free time with them.

Simplify and correct plurality: 'friends'. Remove unclear phrases 'dad time' and 'precious time'. Use present tense 'go out' and 'enjoy'.

× We usually meet each other at my home because I lived in because I live in a three floor house and we have enough space and I have also my personal area for my friend where we enjoy we also play board games and multiplayer games and sometime in parks but mostly in my home.

✓ We usually meet at my home because I live in a three-floor house and we have enough space. I also have a personal area for my friends where we enjoy playing board games and multiplayer games; sometimes we meet in parks, but mostly at my home.

Use present tense 'live'. Fix article and hyphenation 'three-floor house'. Clarify plurals 'friends' and 'sometimes'. Break into two sentences for clarity.

× Beside go out and hang out we usually spend most of the time for helping each other or while in studying like for example last year in my board exam, we usually spend the most of the time for preparing our board examinations.

✓ Besides going out and hanging out, we usually spend most of our time helping each other with studying. For example, last year, we spent most of our time preparing for our board examinations.

Use gerund forms 'going' and 'hanging'. Use past tense 'spent' when referring to last year. Simplify 'helping each other with studying'.

× We teach each other and finding mistakes and I think yes

✓ We teach each other, find mistakes, and I think that helps a lot.

Keep parallel structure with verbs: 'teach' and 'find' (present tense). Complete the thought; add result 'that helps a lot'.

× Yes actually I have a friend to whom I meet when I was in my fifth class and at present we all we are also a good friend and spend most of the time for just preparing for our future plans and examinations and I think I find a very good and respectful friend.

✓ Yes, actually I have a friend whom I met when I was in fifth grade, and at present we are good friends who spend most of our time preparing for our future plans and examinations. I think I have found a very good and respectful friend.

Use 'whom I met' for past contact and past tense 'met'. Use 'fifth grade' for clarity. Correct plural 'friends' and adjust verb tenses: 'are' (present) and 'have found' (present perfect) to indicate result. Remove redundancies.