Friends— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, use correct pronouns, and avoid redundancy. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and add one specific detail (e.g. type of café). Use linking words like because or so.

例: Yes. Now we usually meet at coffee shops and casual restaurants, whereas in the past we often met at people’s houses. I prefer cafes because they have a relaxed atmosphere and good coffee, which makes it easy to chat.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and provide specific reasons with linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid repeating the same idea.

例: I think a place is suitable when it is comfortable and quiet because that makes conversation easy. For example, a café with soft sofas and gentle background music creates a relaxed atmosphere for talking.

提案: Start with a direct statement, correct articles and word forms (an introvert), and combine sentences to avoid repetition. Give a brief specific reason and one example.

例: I prefer spending time with one friend because I’m an introvert and I find one-to-one conversations more meaningful. For instance, when I meet one friend we can discuss personal topics in depth.

提案: Be concise and complete sentences. Use past tense correctly for the example and add a specific detail about the activity. Avoid trailing off—finish your thought.

例: Yes, I often invite friends to my home. For example, last month I invited three friends and cooked dinner for them, and we had a relaxed evening talking and watching a movie.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting example. Correct grammar (lent money, for a doctor) and avoid unnecessary detail. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

例: Friends are very important to me because they support me in difficult times. For example, last month a friend lent me money to pay for a doctor’s visit, and I was very grateful.

提案: Provide a direct, grammatical response. Avoid unclear fragments and complete the thought. Use linking words to explain reasons and give one specific activity you do alone.

例: Not often. I usually go out alone because I enjoy the peace and independence; for example, I like going to the library or a cafe by myself to read.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct verbs (chat). Be specific about the types of cafes or restaurants and why they suit you. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: We often meet at small local cafes and casual restaurants because they are quiet enough to chat. We also like sharing dishes so we can try different foods together.

提案: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words (for example, also, sometimes). Use correct verb forms and be specific with frequency and one example of a memorable activity.

例: Mostly we have dinner together and talk. Sometimes we exercise together — for example, we go swimming or play tennis on weekends, which helps us stay healthy and bond.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and fix tense and phrasing (we haven't lost touch). Add a specific example or memory to support your statement and avoid unclear words like 'collector.'

例: Yes, I have several friends I’ve known for over thirty years. We’ve stayed in contact since childhood — for example, we still meet every summer for a small reunion and reminisce about school days.

× There is a difference between where I meet friends now and before because we like to meet her at a coffee shop or restaurants we like to find a good place to chart and eating.

✓ There is a difference between where I meet friends now and where I met them before because we like to meet at a coffee shop or restaurants; we like to find a good place to chat and eat.

Original uses incorrect pronoun 'her' and inconsistent tense/word forms. 'Her' should be 'them' to refer to friends (plural). 'Before' needs a parallel clause 'where I met them before'. 'Chart' is a misspelling of 'chat', and 'eating' should be the base verb 'eat' to match 'chat'. Also add punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.

× In my opinion comfortable places are more quiet under the atmosphere is very comfortable such as soft sofa and quiet and have mild music.

✓ In my opinion, comfortable places are quieter; the atmosphere is very pleasant, with soft sofas and gentle background music.

Problems include awkward adjective/adverb use and repetition. 'More quiet' should be 'quieter' (comparative adjective). 'Under the atmosphere' is incorrect; use 'the atmosphere'. 'Soft sofa' should be plural 'soft sofas' to match noun, and 'mild music' is better as 'gentle background music'. Use punctuation to improve readability.

× I prefer to spend time with one friend because I'm a introvert person and the I think if I spend time with a group of friends we can't have deep conversation.

✓ I prefer to spend time with one friend because I'm an introverted person, and I think if I spend time with a group of friends we can't have deep conversations.

Errors: article before vowel sound should be 'an' not 'a' ('an introverted person'). 'Introvert' as a noun is acceptable but 'introverted' as adjective fits better. Remove stray 'the'. 'Deep conversation' should be plural 'deep conversations' when referring to multiple opportunities to talk.

× We can't have the chance to talk deeply.

✓ We don't have the chance to talk deeply.

'Can't have the chance' is awkward; 'don't have the chance' more naturally expresses lack of opportunity. Tense and modal meaning align with general preference statements.

× Yes, I would like to invite friends to my home. For example, last month I invited some friends to my home. I cook and eat we ate dinner together. It's a happy and relaxed time where I very

✓ Yes, I would like to invite friends to my home. For example, last month I invited some friends to my home. I cooked and we ate dinner together. It was a happy and relaxed time and I felt very happy.

Mix of present and past tenses: describe past event in past tense ('invited', 'cooked', 'ate', 'was', 'felt'). 'I cook and eat we ate' is inconsistent; use 'I cooked and we ate'. Sentence was incomplete; added 'felt very happy' to complete thought.

× I don't have too many friends, but friends are very important to me because sometimes they can help me out of trouble. For example, last month, one of my friends lend the money to me to SO doctor so I felt very thankful.

✓ I don't have many friends, but they are very important to me because sometimes they can help me out of trouble. For example, last month one of my friends lent me money to pay the doctor, so I felt very thankful.

'Too many' implies excess; 'many' is better here. 'Lend' should be past 'lent' for a past event. 'Lent the money to me to SO doctor' is unclear; corrected to 'lent me money to pay the doctor'. Also remove unnecessary commas and clarify pronoun usage.

× It's sold done. I usually go out alone. I prefer stay by myself because I don't think solo to is lonely. I feel very comfortable when I am alone. I had a lot of

✓ It's seldom. I usually go out alone. I prefer to stay by myself because I don't think being alone is lonely. I feel very comfortable when I am alone.

Original has many issues: 'sold done' unclear; likely 'seldom' (rarely). 'Prefer stay' needs 'to stay'. 'Solo to is lonely' is ungrammatical; use 'being alone is lonely'. Removed incomplete fragment 'I had a lot of' which is unfinished.

× We often meet at the cafe and restaurants because we can chart in a quiet place and we can share foods together, good foods together. I feel this is friends.

✓ We often meet at cafes and restaurants because we can chat in a quiet place and share food together. I feel this is what friends do.

Use plural 'cafes and restaurants' for general statement. 'Chart' is incorrect spelling of 'chat'. 'Share foods' -> 'share food' or 'share dishes'; avoid repetitive 'good foods together'. Final sentence needed clarity: 'This is what friends do.'

× Most of the time we eat dinner together. Sometimes we do exercise together, such as go swimming or go fishing or play tennis. We always like to talk a lot along this situation.

✓ Most of the time we have dinner together. Sometimes we exercise together, such as going swimming, fishing, or playing tennis. We also like to talk a lot in these situations.

Use 'have dinner' is more natural. After 'such as' use gerunds for parallelism ('going', 'fishing', 'playing'). 'Along this situation' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; use 'in these situations'.

× I have several friends I've known for a long time, more than thirty years. We've kept in touch since we were children, so I felt very lucky we still we didn't lost the touch, lost the collector.

✓ I have several friends I've known for a long time, more than thirty years. We've kept in touch since we were children, so I feel very lucky we haven't lost touch.

Tense consistency: general present feelings use present 'I feel'. 'We still we didn't lost the touch, lost the collector' is ungrammatical; correct to 'we haven't lost touch'. Remove unclear phrase 'lost the collector'.