Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接表达了“经常看到广告”这一观点，也进行了正反对比，但存在较多语法、搭配和句子连接问题。应将“smartphone or computers”改为“my smartphone or computer”，避免使用“which I want to say it”这类不自然表达；“they just tell us some information”后可补充具体说明。建议使用“while/however”连接对比，并控制句子长度，避免中途停顿和重复。

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my smartphone or computer. Some of them are interesting, especially when they tell a creative story, while others simply provide basic information about a product. I usually ignore the latter because they feel like a waste of time.

提案: 答案回应了问题，并提到童年时看到的牛奶广告以及家庭故事，但细节不够具体，且有明显语法错误。“a kind of milk”可以改为“a milk brand”，“it tells me”应使用过去时“it told me”，“a example”应为“an example”。建议补充广告中的具体情节，以及它为什么给你留下深刻印象。

例: Yes. When I was a child, I saw an advertisement for a milk brand that showed a family having breakfast together. I remember it because the story was warm and emotional, and it made the product seem closely connected with family happiness. It was a good example of how storytelling can make an advertisement memorable.

提案: 答案观点清楚，也给出了乘坐地铁的个人经历和广告为公共交通带来收入的原因。不过，“a lot of advertising”应改为“a lot of advertisements”或“a lot of advertising”，“on that”应改为“there”，而“by post posting”表达错误。建议用“because”或“as a result”连接原因和结果，并具体说明广告通常出现在哪里。

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on the subway because I take it to work every day. They are usually placed above the seats, on the walls, or on digital screens. In my opinion, advertising is a useful way for public transport companies to earn extra revenue.

提案: 答案有清晰的条件式观点，并对喜欢和不喜欢的广告进行了比较，内容较完整。但“some advertisement”应为“some advertisements”，“that tell”应根据复数名词保留“tell”，同时“it’s just waste of time”缺少冠词，应为“it’s just a waste of time”。建议减少重复的“advertisement”和“information”，并用“whereas”或“however”使对比更自然。

例: It depends on the advertisement. I like ads that tell a memorable story or present a product in a creative way. However, I dislike ads that only list basic product information, because I can easily find those details online by myself.

提案: 答案提到了喜欢有趣、有信息量的广告，但部分表达不自然，且“a informative story”应为“an informative story”，“a good path to tell the society”不符合英语习惯。可以改为“a good way to communicate with the public”。最后一句“make money through advertising”应完整表达。建议增加一个具体例子，例如公益广告或品牌故事广告。

例: I like advertisements that are informative but also entertaining. For example, I enjoy ads that use humor or tell a short story because they are easier to remember. They can communicate with the public effectively while also helping companies promote their products and make money.

提案: 答案提供了真实经历，并说明了先看到广告、再自行搜索信息、最后购买的过程，逻辑基本清楚。但“smart air”应为“smart earphones”，“from through an advertisement”表达错误；“try try it through buying one”应改为“decided to buy a pair”。注意“earphones”是复数，后文应使用“they/their”，并避免重复和代词混乱。

例: Yes, I once bought a pair of wireless earphones because of an advertisement. The ad attracted my attention, but I did not buy them immediately; instead, I searched for reviews and compared the price online. After that, I decided to try them, and they turned out to be as good as the advertisement suggested.

× Some I think are still interesting which I want to say it.

✓ Some of them are still interesting, and I would like to talk about them.

“Some”后面需要用“of them”明确指代前面的 advertisements。句末的“it”与复数“some”不一致，应改为复数代词“them”。

× Others are very boring because they just. Tell us some information about their products.

✓ Others are very boring because they just tell us some information about their products.

“because”引导的原因从句中，动词短语“just tell us”不能被拆开。应将“tell”小写并与前面的原因从句连成一个完整句子。

× I think it tells me a good story about the family.

✓ I think it told me a good story about the family.

这里描述的是小时候看到的广告，动作发生在过去，所以动词“tell”应使用过去式“told”。

× Can be a example for other advertisements.

✓ It can be an example for other advertisements.

可数名词单数“example”前需要使用冠词。“example”以元音音素开头，所以应使用“an”，而不是“a”。同时补充主语“It”，使句子完整。

× I can see a lot of advertising on that.

✓ I can see a lot of advertisements on them.

“on that”不能正确指代复数的 trains or other forms of transport。这里应使用“on them”。另外，具体的一条条广告应使用可数名词复数“advertisements”。

× There are of course a lot of advertising on trains or other transport.

✓ There is, of course, a lot of advertising on trains and other forms of transport.

“advertising”通常作不可数名词使用，所以there be句型中应使用“There is”，不能使用“There are”。

× By post posting some advertisements.

✓ By posting some advertisements.

介词“by”后面应接动名词形式。这里“post posting”重复，应删除“post”，保留“posting”。

× I prefer some advertisement that tell us a good story or interesting story.

✓ I prefer some advertisements that tell us a good story or an interesting story.

“some”修饰可数名词时，名词应使用复数形式“advertisements”。关系从句的主语是复数“advertisements”，所以使用“tell”是正确的。

× I prefer some advertisement that tell us a good story or interesting story.

✓ I prefer some advertisements that tell us a good story or an interesting story.

单数可数名词“story”前通常需要冠词。第二个故事前应加“an”，因为“interesting”以元音音素开头。

× They just tell us their basic information of the products.

✓ They just tell us the basic information about their products.

表示“关于某物的信息”时，应使用“information about something”，而不是“information of something”。“about”是这里更合适的介词。

× I think it's just waste of time.

✓ I think it's just a waste of time.

“waste”在这里是可数名词，表示“一件浪费时间的事情”，前面需要使用不定冠词“a”。

× I prefer advertising that tells us informative story or interesting stories.

✓ I prefer advertising that tells us an informative story or interesting stories.

单数可数名词“story”前需要冠词。“informative”以元音音素开头，因此使用“an informative story”。

× Also they can make money through. In advertisement.

✓ They can also make money through advertisements.

“through”后面需要接名词，不能单独停顿。“In advertisement”结构错误，表达一般性的广告时可使用复数“advertisements”，并将整个短语合并成完整句子。

× I did buy a smart earphone from through an advertisement.

✓ I did buy a smart earphone through an advertisement.

“from through”两个介词不能连续使用。表示“通过广告购买”时，直接使用“through an advertisement”即可。

× I saw an earphone advertisement, so I searched its information by myself.

✓ I saw an earphone advertisement, so I searched for information about it by myself.

“search”表示“寻找信息”时通常使用“search for”。另外，“information about it”比“its information”更自然，也能清楚指代这个耳机。

× I decided to try try it through buying 1.

✓ I decided to try it by buying one.

表示“通过做某事”时使用“by + 动名词”，所以应为“by buying”。“try try”是重复，应删除一个“try”；可数名词单数不能用数字“1”代替作正式表达，应使用“One”。

× The earphone is quite good and it fits his advertisement well.

✓ The earphone is quite good and it fits its advertisement well.

“earphone”是物，不应使用表示人的物主代词“his”。表示物的物主代词应使用“its”。