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提案: Answer directly with the plural form “advertisements” and use natural phrases such as “use my phone” and “browse online.” Avoid repeating “online platform” and explain where you usually see ads, such as on social media or video websites.

例: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or computer, especially when I browse social media or watch videos online. Most websites and apps use ads to generate revenue, so they appear quite frequently.

提案: Use the natural expression “an advertisement that impressed me” rather than “made me impressed.” Identify the advertisement more specifically and explain what it showed and why you remembered it. Your answer is incomplete, so finish with a clear concluding idea.

例: Yes, I remember an environmental advertisement that I saw when I was a child. It showed a polluted river becoming clean after people stopped throwing rubbish into it. I found it memorable because it made me realize that protecting the environment is everyone’s responsibility, not just the government’s.

提案: Separate the opening from the explanation and correct the sentence structure. Say “most people travel by public transport” instead of “most of people visit or travel other places.” Add a specific example, such as advertisements inside trains, at stations, or on buses.

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains, buses, and at stations. Public transport is an effective place for advertising because many passengers spend several minutes commuting and have time to notice posters or digital screens.

提案: Your opinion and example are clear, but use “advertisements” in the plural and say “they waste my time” or “they are a waste of time.” Improve the linking by using “for example” and “as a result” in separate clauses, and avoid the unnatural phrase “YouTube platform.”

例: No, I do not really like advertisements because they often interrupt what I am doing. For example, when I watch videos on YouTube, unskippable ads can interrupt the content several times. As a result, I find them rather annoying.

提案: Use “advertisements about the environment” and “global warming and environmental damage are serious issues.” Explain how these advertisements influence people, and complete your final sentence. Keep the answer to two or three connected sentences with a clear reason and result.

例: I like advertisements that focus on environmental issues, such as climate change and recycling. I think they are useful because they raise public awareness and encourage people to change their habits. For example, an ad might remind viewers to use less plastic or save electricity.

提案: Give a complete answer and use natural expressions such as “an advertisement at a train station,” “make me look more attractive,” and “clear up my skin.” Explain whether the product actually worked, which would provide a specific result and a stronger ending.

例: Yes, I once bought a skincare product after seeing an advertisement at a train station. The advertisement claimed that it could reduce acne and make my skin clearer, so I decided to try it. Unfortunately, it did not work as well as I expected, but the attractive packaging and persuasive claims influenced my decision.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use phone and computer because I love to go to the online platform and most of our online platforms often show an advertisement.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use a phone and a computer because I love to go to online platforms, and most of them often show advertisements.

Advertisement is a countable noun, so it needs a plural form when you are talking about advertisements in general. The plural form is also needed after most of them.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use phone and computer.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use a phone and a computer.

Singular countable nouns such as phone and computer need an article when they are mentioned for the first time. Use a before each noun here.

× An advertisement that made me impressed is about safe environment.

✓ An advertisement that impressed me was about a safe environment.

A singular countable noun such as environment needs an article. Use a before safe environment because it is mentioned generally and does not begin with a vowel sound.

× An advertisement that made me impressed is about safe environment.

✓ An advertisement that impressed me was about a safe environment.

Made me impressed is not the natural adjective structure in this sentence. Use impressed me, where impressed is the verb describing the effect of the advertisement.

× Nowadays most of people ignore to preserve environment.

✓ Nowadays, most people ignore preserving the environment.

Most people is the correct quantifier structure when people is used generally. Do not use of before people in this expression.

× Nowadays most of people ignore to preserve environment.

✓ Nowadays, most people ignore preserving the environment.

Ignore is followed by a gerund rather than an infinitive. Therefore, use ignore preserving, not ignore to preserve.

× Nowadays most of people ignore to preserve environment.

✓ Nowadays, most people ignore preserving the environment.

The environment refers to the natural environment as a whole, so it normally takes the definite article the.

× So I think advertisement about

✓ So, I think advertisements about the environment can raise people's awareness.

The original sentence is incomplete because it ends with a preposition and has no main verb after advertisement about. Add a complete verb phrase, such as can raise people's awareness.

× Yes I do I often see a lot of advertisements on trains or public transportation because most of people visit or travel other places with public transportation is a good place to show advertisement to consumers.

✓ Yes, I do. I often see a lot of advertisements on trains or public transportation because most people visit or travel to other places by public transportation.

Most people is the correct quantifier phrase. The word of is not used before people when referring to people in general.

× Most people visit or travel other places with public transportation.

✓ Most people visit or travel to other places by public transportation.

Use travel to before a destination. Use by before a means of transport, such as by bus or by public transportation.

× Because most of people visit or travel other places with public transportation is a good place to show advertisement to consumers.

✓ This is because most people visit or travel to other places by public transportation, which is a good place to show advertisements to consumers.

The original sentence incorrectly joins two independent ideas. Use which to connect public transportation with the explanation about displaying advertisements.

× A good place to show advertisement to consumers.

✓ A good place to show advertisements to consumers.

The sentence refers to advertisements in general, so the countable noun advertisement should be plural.

× No, actually I don't like advertisement.

✓ No, actually, I don't like advertisements.

Use the plural form advertisements when speaking about advertisements in general.

× I think it's very waste my time.

✓ I think it wastes my time.

Waste must be used as a verb in this sentence. Because the subject it is third-person singular, the present-tense verb takes the -s ending: wastes.

× When I would like to watch some videos on YouTube platform.

✓ When I would like to watch some videos on the YouTube platform.

Platform is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use the because you mean a specific platform.

× I often see advertisement interrupt my video.

✓ I often see advertisements interrupting my video.

Use the present participle interrupting after see to describe an action happening at the same time as the viewing.

× Actually I love advertisement about environment.

✓ Actually, I love advertisements about the environment.

Advertisements should be plural because the statement refers to advertisements generally.

× Actually I love advertisement about environment.

✓ Actually, I love advertisements about the environment.

Use the environment when referring to the natural world as a general concept.

× I think global warming and environment is a serious issue.

✓ I think global warming and the environment are serious issues.

Global warming and the environment form a compound subject, so use the plural verb are. The plural noun issues is also appropriate for two related problems.

× A serious issue need to take care.

✓ Serious issues need to be taken care of.

The issues do not take care of themselves; someone must take care of them. Use the passive structure need to be taken care of.

× If there are plenty of advertisings about environment.

✓ If there are plenty of advertisements about the environment.

Advertisement is countable, so its plural form is advertisements. Advertisings is not normally used in this context.

× To peoples that help them to

✓ To people, which helps them to

The plural form of person is people, not peoples, when referring to human beings generally.

× If there are plenty of advertisings about environment to peoples that help them to

✓ If there are plenty of advertisements about the environment for people, they can help people understand the issue.

The original sentence is incomplete because it ends with help them to and does not include the verb after to. Complete the idea with a verb such as understand.

× Yes I have bought some beauty products when I saw advertisement on the train station.

✓ Yes, I have bought some beauty products when I saw an advertisement at the train station.

Use an before the singular countable noun advertisement. Use the before the specific location train station, and at is the natural preposition for the place where you saw the advertisement.

× I saw advertisement on the train station.

✓ I saw an advertisement at the train station.

Use at to identify a specific location such as a station. On is not the usual preposition for the location of a station.

× It will help me to more beautiful and the skin very clear without acne.

✓ It will help me become more beautiful and make my skin very clear and free of acne.

Use my before skin because the skin belongs to the speaker. The pronoun my clearly shows possession.

× It will help me to more beautiful and the skin very clear without acne.

✓ It will help me become more beautiful and make my skin very clear and free of acne.

The original sentence is missing verbs after to and before the skin. Use become after help me and make before my skin to form complete verb phrases.

× So that's why I try

✓ So, that's why I tried the products.

The original sentence is incomplete because try has no object and the idea is unfinished. Add an object and use the past tense to match the completed purchase.

× So that's why I try.

✓ So, that's why I tried the products.

The speaker is describing a completed action connected with a past purchase, so use the past-tense form tried rather than the present-tense form try.