Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and use natural collocations such as “come across advertisements” instead of “stumble on advertising binaries.” Also, correct the sentence “I don't I'm not interested in it” and explain whether you usually ignore or dislike these advertisements. Use a linking word such as “although” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I often come across advertisements whenever I use my smartphone or computer. They appear on social media, websites, and video platforms. Although there are so many of them, I usually ignore the ones that are not relevant to me.

提案: Give a complete answer with a clear topic sentence, and avoid hesitation fillers and uncertain phrases such as “or something like that.” The response ends unfinished after “her,” so explain specifically why the advertisement was memorable, such as its visuals, music, or emotional impact. You should also say “an advertisement” and use “beautiful girl in the world” more naturally.

例: Yes, I remember an advertisement featuring Kristina Pimenova, who was described as one of the most beautiful girls in the world. I was fascinated by her appearance and the elegant visuals in the commercial. It made a strong impression on me because it was beautiful and easy to remember.

提案: The main idea is clear, but the grammar is sometimes inaccurate: say “advertising on public transport has been banned” and “advertisements for government projects.” Avoid repeating “banned” and reduce hesitation fillers. Add a specific comparison or example to make the answer more developed and coherent.

例: No, I do not see much advertising on public transport in my city. Advertising on buses and trains has been banned for several years, so most vehicles are plain. The only advertisements we occasionally see are notices about government projects or public services.

提案: This is a direct and well-supported answer with a relevant personal reason. Improve the vocabulary by using “advertising” as an uncountable noun and “forms of advertising” rather than “forms of advertisement.” You could also mention one specific type of advertisement that you enjoy studying.

例: Yes, I really like advertising because I currently work as a marketing specialist and it has become one of my passions. I enjoy discovering new advertising techniques, especially creative campaigns on social media. I find it interesting to see how companies attract people’s attention.

提案: State your preference more naturally by saying “native advertising and product placement.” Correct “plot product placement,” “Than,” and the repetitive phrase “usually it is always.” Give a complete example and explain why this type of advertising is effective, using linking words such as “because” or “when.”

例: I mainly like native advertising and product placement in films. For example, when a character naturally drinks a can of Coca-Cola, the product becomes part of the story instead of interrupting it. I enjoy this kind of advertising because it is subtle and effective when it is done well.

提案: Your contrast between intrusive advertising and product placement is effective, but the grammar and word choice need improvement. Say “something that has been advertised aggressively” rather than “something that I've been advertised,” and avoid the exaggerated phrase “I always buy something.” Give one realistic example of a product you bought after seeing it in a film.

例: Yes, I have occasionally bought something because of an advertisement, especially after seeing it used in a film. I tend to ignore aggressive online advertisements, but subtle product placement can influence me. For example, I once bought a particular brand of coffee after seeing a character enjoy it in a movie.

× There are lots of them on my page and I don't I'm not interested in it.

✓ There are lots of them on my page, and I'm not interested in them.

The phrase 'I don't I'm not' contains two conflicting structures. Use only the negative form 'I'm not interested.' The sentence also needs a complete and logically connected structure.

× There are lots of them on my page and I don't I'm not interested in it.

✓ There are lots of them on my page, and I'm not interested in them.

The pronoun 'them' must be used because it refers to the plural noun 'advertisements.' The singular pronoun 'it' is incorrect in this context.

× And I was really, uh, fascinated by her beauty and her.

✓ I was really fascinated by her beauty.

The sentence ends with the incomplete phrase 'and her.' A sentence should not end with an unfinished coordinated phrase. Remove the incomplete part to create a complete sentence.

× No, I don't uh, in the city where I live, the advertisement on the public transport was banned, uh, for had been banned for some time.

✓ No, I don't. In the city where I live, advertising on public transport has been banned for some time.

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'was banned' and 'had been banned.' Use the present perfect passive 'has been banned' to describe an action that happened in the past and continues to be relevant now.

× There are only uh, advertisement, uh, of the government projects.

✓ There are only advertisements for government projects.

The plural verb 'are' requires the plural noun 'advertisements,' not the singular noun 'advertisement.'

× There are only uh, advertisement, uh, of the government projects.

✓ There are only advertisements for government projects.

Use the preposition 'for' to show the purpose or subject of the advertisements. 'Advertisements of government projects' is not the natural prepositional structure here.

× I enjoy discovering new forms of advertisement every day.

✓ I enjoy discovering new forms of advertising every day.

'Advertising' is normally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the general activity or industry. Therefore, 'forms of advertising' is the appropriate expression.

× Than you see a can of cola of coke.

✓ Then you see a can of cola or Coke.

Use 'or' to present alternatives such as cola and Coke. The preposition 'of' cannot connect these two alternative examples.

× It is usually it is always a product placement and I enjoy it when it's done correctly.

✓ It is always product placement, and I enjoy it when it is done correctly.

The original sentence repeats the subject and verb in 'It is usually it is always.' Remove the repetition to form a grammatically complete sentence.

× I rarely buy something that I've been advertised intrusively.

✓ I rarely buy something that has been advertised to me intrusively.

The original passive construction incorrectly makes 'I' the thing being advertised. The object 'something' should be the subject of the passive clause: 'something has been advertised.' Add 'to me' to show who received the advertisement.

× But in case of product placement, I am a victim of marketing in this way.

✓ But in the case of product placement, I am a victim of marketing in this way.

The fixed expression is 'in the case of.' The definite article 'the' is required before 'case' in this expression.