Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise, correct grammar and word choice, and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and ensure sentences are complete.

例: Yes, I see ads on my phone and computer very often, especially on social media and YouTube. They frequently pop up and interrupt videos, which I find quite annoying because they break my concentration.

提案: Correct tense and grammar, use complete sentences, and give a clear specific example with linking words. Explain why the ad impressed you with concrete details.

例: Yes. When I was a child, I loved bright, colorful TV commercials that featured babies and animated characters. Because the ads showed children playing happily with the toys, I would always ask my parents to buy them, and I remember being drawn to the cheerful music and lively animation.

提案: Fix vocabulary errors (trends -> trains, porters -> posters), use correct articles and plurals, and link the two ideas (why you don't see ads and what you see in the city). Provide one clear example of where ads appear.

例: Not really, because I live in the countryside and there are very few train services here. However, when I travel to the city I often see many posters and digital ads on station platforms and on the sides of buses.

提案: Improve sentence structure and word choice, use linking contrast words (however/on the other hand), and give a brief specific reason for both liking and disliking ads. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: It depends. I like informative advertisements that clearly explain a product's features because they help me decide quickly. However, I dislike ads that interrupt films or pop up repeatedly, as they break the experience and feel very annoying.

提案: Use correct verbs and vocabulary (prefer, create, viewers), correct article use, and provide a clear, coherent example. Explain briefly why storytelling works (emotion, memorability).

例: I prefer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they create an emotional connection with viewers. For example, a motorbike commercial that shows a family on a road trip with a popular singer uses music and narrative to make the product feel memorable.

× Many ask out to play or pop up and interrupt what I'm watching, which I find quite annoying.

✓ Many ads pop up and interrupt what I'm watching, which I find quite annoying.

Error type: sentence structure/word choice. 'Many ask out to play' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'many ads pop up'. Use 'ads' (advertisements) and the phrasal verb 'pop up' with ads. Also keep 'interrupt what I'm watching' as the action. Suggestion: replace incorrect words with 'ads pop up'.

× When I was a child, I love dry, colorful TV commercials that feature babies are animated characters.

✓ When I was a child, I loved bright, colorful TV commercials that featured babies and animated characters.

Error types: tense (present used in past context) and sentence structure/adjective choice. Use past tense 'loved' and 'featured' because the time reference is 'when I was a child'. 'dry' seems wrong; 'bright' fits better. Also change 'are' to 'and' to list 'babies and animated characters'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time reference and use appropriate conjunction.

× Whenever I show those ads, I would ask my parents to buy the toys because.

✓ Whenever I saw those ads, I would ask my parents to buy the toys.

Error types: verb tense and sentence fragment. 'Whenever I show those ads' mixes present with past; use 'saw'. The clause ends with 'because.' which creates an incomplete sentence; remove the dangling 'because' or complete the clause. Suggestion: keep past tense and avoid leaving 'because' without a conclusion.

× The ads make them look so fun and.

✓ The ads made the toys look so fun.

Error: sentence fragment and tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'made' to match 'when I was a child' and finish the thought by specifying 'the toys'. Remove the dangling 'and'. Suggestion: complete the idea and maintain consistent tense.

× I don't see much advertising on trends or other public transport because I live in the countryside and there are very few train service here.

✓ I don't see much advertising on trains or other public transport because I live in the countryside and there are very few train services here.

Errors: wrong word 'trends' should be 'trains' and noun number agreement 'train service' -> 'train services' or 'train service' with 'is'. Maintain plural 'services' to agree with 'very few'. Suggestion: correct spelling and use plural for countable noun.

× When I do travel to the city I see lots of porters are digital ads in station and on buses.

✓ When I travel to the city, I see lots of posters and digital ads in stations and on buses.

Errors: word choice and sentence structure. 'Porters' should be 'posters'; 'are' is extraneous; 'in station' should be 'in stations'. Also 'When I do travel' is acceptable but 'When I travel' is more natural. Suggestion: correct spelling and plural forms, remove unnecessary words.

× I like informative act that really explain a product feature because they save me time when I'm deciding what to buy.

✓ I like informative ads that really explain a product's features because they save me time when I'm deciding what to buy.

Errors: wrong word 'act' -> 'ads'; subject-verb agreement: 'ads that really explain' is fine; use possessive 'product's features' or plural 'product features'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'ads' and adjust noun phrasing for clarity.

× On the other hand, I dislike it that interrupt films or pop up over time because they feel make me feel annoying.

✓ On the other hand, I dislike ads that interrupt films or pop up during them because they make me feel annoyed.

Errors: pronoun and phrase misuse. 'I dislike it that interrupt films' should be 'I dislike ads that interrupt films'. 'pop up over time' is awkward; use 'pop up during them'. 'they feel make me feel annoying' is incorrect; change to 'they make me feel annoyed'. Suggestion: clearly identify the subject 'ads' and use correct verb structures and adjective/adverb ('annoyed' describes feelings).

× Well, I refer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they react an emotional connection with the fewer.

✓ Well, I prefer advertisements that tell a meaningful story because they create an emotional connection with the viewer.

Errors: wrong verb 'refer' -> 'prefer'; 'react' -> 'create'; 'the fewer' is incorrect, should be 'the viewer' or 'the audience'. Suggestion: use correct verb and noun forms and target 'viewer' for singular audience member.

× For example, I like a motorbike at showing a family going on a road trip with the famous singer Raven.

✓ For example, I like a motorbike ad showing a family going on a road trip with the famous singer Raven.

Errors: 'motorbike at' should be 'motorbike ad'; sentence structure slightly awkward. Suggestion: use 'ad' for advertisement and place modifiers correctly.

× Story and the music make the product feel memorable.

✓ The story and the music make the product feel memorable.

Error: missing article 'The' before 'story' makes sentence feel incomplete. Subject-verb agreement 'make' is correct for plural subject. Suggestion: add 'the' to clarify and improve naturalness.