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提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer. However, I usually close them immediately because I find them distracting, especially when I'm working or browsing social media.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with better grammar and linking words. Use past tense consistently and avoid awkward phrasing like "I'm impressed" when meaning "I was impressed."

例: I don't recall any specific advertisement that impressed me as a child. I rarely watched TV back then, so I wasn't exposed to many commercials.

提案: Make your response cohesive by using linking words and correcting grammar. Give a specific example of the kind of ads you notice and explain briefly why you ignore them.

例: Yes, there are many ads on trains and buses. For example, I often notice posters for local restaurants, but I usually ignore them because they rarely match my interests.

提案: Be concise and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion, then give one concrete reason with an example and a linking word to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I do like some advertisements because they introduce new products. For instance, a short ad once informed me about a helpful kitchen gadget that I later bought.

提案: Answer directly and add a specific example or reason with smoother phrasing. Use varied vocabulary and avoid generalizations. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

例: I prefer ads for beauty products because I'm interested in skincare and makeup. For example, I follow short tutorials and ads that show how a product improves skin texture or saves time in my routine.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I'm using my phone or computer, I don't really give time in opening it.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I'm using my phone or computer. I don't really take time to open them.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'see' and the general plural sense. 'Give time in opening it' is incorrect phrasing; use 'take time to open them' and match pronoun number. Also the original is a comma splice; split into two sentences.

× I don't really give time in opening it.

✓ I don't really take time to open them.

Use present simple 'don't take' for habitual action. 'Give time in opening it' is unidiomatic; 'take time to open' is natural. Match pronoun 'them' to plural 'advertisements'.

× I don't remember that I'm impressed with an advertisement.

✓ I don't remember being impressed by any advertisement.

Referring to past impressions requires 'being impressed' (gerund) or 'that I was impressed'. 'Impressed with' can be used but 'impressed by' is more common for advertisements. Use 'any' for negative statements.

× I don't often watch TV when I was a child.

✓ I didn't often watch TV when I was a child.

The time expression 'when I was a child' requires past tense; change 'don't' to past 'didn't'.

× So maybe that's the reason why I'm not impressed of any of it.

✓ So maybe that's the reason why I wasn't impressed by any of them.

Use 'impressed by' not 'impressed of'. Also match past tense 'wasn't' with childhood time frame and plural 'them' to refer to advertisements.

× Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains or other transport.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transport.

'Advertising' can be uncountable but here 'advertisements' is clearer and matches 'a lot of'. Use 'and' to list 'trains and other transport'.

× Some of it I saw it in television, but I don't really give time in dealing with it because I'm not interested on it.

✓ Some of them I saw on television, but I don't really spend time with them because I'm not interested in them.

Multiple errors: 'Some of it' should be 'Some of them' to match plural; 'saw it in television' -> 'saw on television'. 'Give time in dealing with it' is unidiomatic; use 'spend time with them' or 'pay attention to them'. Preposition 'interested on' should be 'interested in'.

× Yes, I do like advertisements.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements.

'Do' is unnecessary for a simple affirmative present statement. Use 'Yes, I like advertisements.' for natural speech. This is not an error but stylistic simplification.

× Some of them give me knowledge and information about a certain product which I don't know and through that advertisement I need to know some things that I didn't know before.

✓ Some of them give me information about products I didn't know about before, and through those advertisements I learn things I didn't know.

Unnecessary repetition and awkward wording. Use 'information about products I didn't know about before' and 'through those advertisements I learn' for clarity. Change tense to past for prior unknown facts.

× I like advertisement pertaining to beauty products.

✓ I like advertisements pertaining to beauty products.

Use plural 'advertisements' to match general preference.

× Nowadays people love to enhance their beauty so I always search and find new things that will make myself presentable all the time.

✓ Nowadays people want to enhance their beauty, so I always search for and find new things that will make me look presentable.

'Make myself presentable' is reflexive but unneeded; use 'make me look presentable'. 'Search and find' should be 'search for and find'. 'Love to enhance' is better as 'want to enhance' for intent. Avoid 'all the time' redundancy; 'look presentable' is clearer.