Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and use linking words to list examples. Use plural/singular correctly and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "types of ads", "pop-ups").

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and laptop. For example, I usually encounter banner ads and pop-up ads on websites, and occasionally full-screen ads in apps, which can be quite distracting.

提案: Organize the story with a clear topic sentence then give specific supporting details in chronological order. Avoid hesitations and repeated words. Use past tense consistently and include the ad’s impact or why it impressed you.

例: Yes. One commercial that impressed me as a child showed a little boy and his grandmother shopping. When the wind blew a ten-rupee note away, the boy chased it down, which made the scene very memorable because it highlighted their caring relationship.

提案: Be specific and correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement, then give two or three concrete examples and explain why they are effective, using linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Avoid unclear phrases like "while race."

例: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, buses often carry full-body ads and there are posters on the backs of passenger seats; these are eye-catching because commuters can read them while waiting or traveling.

提案: State your opinion directly, then give balanced reasons and specific examples. Use linking words like "however" to contrast positive and negative points. Correct grammar (e.g., "producers" -> "producers/companies", "it appears").

例: I think advertisements are useful for companies to promote products; however, I find social media pop-up ads very annoying because they interrupt app usage and slow down the experience.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence, then provide two clear reasons with examples. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use precise phrasing like "video ads" and explain how they help (e.g., demonstration, storytelling).

例: I prefer video advertisements because they demonstrate how a product works and often use storytelling, which helps viewers remember the message. For instance, a short video showing how to use a kitchen gadget is more memorable than a static image.

× Yes, I often see advertisement on phone and laptop.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and laptop.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural because the speaker refers to ads in general (countable, multiple). Also add possessive 'my' to indicate the speaker's devices. Use plural for general occurrences: 'advertisements'. Suggestion: use 'advertisements' when speaking about multiple instances.

× I mostly see it on website.

✓ I mostly see them on websites.

'Website' should be plural 'websites' because the speaker refers to multiple sites in general. Replace 'it' with 'them' to match plural 'advertisements'. Use plural nouns and matching pronouns for general statements.

× Umm there are many type of advertisement like uh banner, floating et cetera info.

✓ Umm there are many types of advertisements, like banners, floating ads, etc.

Multiple errors: 'type' should be plural 'types'; 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; list items should be plural and consistent ('banners', 'floating ads'). Use 'etc.' for 'et cetera'. Ensure plurality agreement across the noun phrase.

× It is mainly by using app in between.

✓ They mainly appear while using apps in between activities.

Original sentence is unclear and lacks correct verb form. Use 'appear' (present simple) to describe where ads show, and plural 'apps'. Also clarify 'in between' as 'in between activities' or 'between app usage'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun form.

× Yes, there is an advertisement that pop ups in my mind it is a little boy with his grandmother going out to buy grocery.

✓ Yes, there is an advertisement that pops up in my mind: it shows a little boy with his grandmother going out to buy groceries.

Use third person singular 'pops up' (subject 'advertisement') and 'shows' to describe content. 'Grocery' should be plural 'groceries' when referring to items. Also add punctuation or conjunction to separate clauses. Ensure correct verb forms and plural noun.

× So when his grandmother took a ₹10 note from first it blow away because of the wind.

✓ So when his grandmother took a ₹10 note from her pocket, it blew away because of the wind.

Use past tense 'blew' (not 'blow') to match 'took'. Add phrase 'from her pocket' for clarity and include correct past action sequence. Maintain past tense consistency.

× So the little child was uh, you know he was, he was going after it and uh.

✓ So the little child was, you know, running after it.

Simplify and use past progressive 'was running' or past simple 'ran' to convey action. Avoid repetitive 'he was, he was'. Use concise verb form for clarity.

× Yes. I have seen any transportation with advertisement on it.

✓ Yes. I have seen advertisements on various types of transportation.

'Any transportation' is incorrect here; use 'various types of transportation' or 'transport' and make 'advertisement' plural to match multiple occurrences. Use plural and proper quantifier.

× Mostly I have seen uh outside of the bus getting uh advertisement and also on passengers seat that is backside of the passenger seat in uh, the advertisement will be there and it is eye-catching for the people because it is easy to read while race.

✓ Mostly I have seen advertisements on the outside of buses and on the back of passengers' seats; the ads are eye-catching because they are easy to read while traveling.

Prepositions and noun forms corrected: 'on the outside of buses' (plural), 'on the back of passengers' seats' (use possessive), and 'while traveling' is the correct phrase rather than 'while race'. Also convert to plural 'advertisements' and make sentence concise and grammatical.

× In my opinion, an advertisement is a good option for producers to advertise their product but I feel a little annoyed on how they market on social media because whenever it appear between apps like pop up apps, it's so annoying while using the app.

✓ In my opinion, advertisements are a good way for producers to promote their products, but I feel a little annoyed by how they market on social media because whenever ads appear between apps as pop-ups, it's very annoying while using the app.

Use plural 'advertisements' and 'products' for general statements. Use 'a good way to promote' instead of 'option to advertise', and correct preposition 'annoyed by'. Use 'appear' matching plural 'ads' and 'pop-ups' for plural. Improve clarity and agreement.

× I prefer video advertisement because it helps, uh, users to understand what is the product and what are, are the, uh, producers are in meaning of that product.

✓ I prefer video advertisements because they help users understand what the product is and what the producers mean by that product.

Use plural 'advertisements' and plural pronoun 'they' to refer back. Correct word order in indirect question: 'what the product is'. Remove redundant words and fix 'producers mean' for clarity. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× And also, uh, this video type ads will make people to remember that scene.

✓ Also, these video ads will make people remember that scene.

Remove incorrect infinitive 'to remember' after 'make' (make + object + base verb), and use 'video ads' instead of 'video type ads'. Use concise structure: 'make people remember'.