Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (use singular/plural and proper verbs), and give one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “breathe in a Duolingo.”

例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, when I use apps like Duolingo or browse social media, banner and video ads frequently appear between lessons or posts.

提案: Answer directly and use clear reasons and examples. State which ad impressed you, explain why it was memorable, and use linking words like “because” or “for example.” Also correct grammar and avoid vague phrases like “who knows what.”

例: Yes, an ice cream TV commercial impressed me when I was a child because it made the ice cream look very delicious. For example, it showed children laughing and colorful toppings, which made me want to try it.

提案: Give a clear, organized response with specific examples and linking words. Use correct nouns and phrases (e.g., “advertisements for cars, DVDs, and local businesses”) and avoid filler sounds. One or two concise supporting details are enough.

例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. For instance, there are ads for car brands like Toyota, DVDs, and local restaurants placed on windows and seatbacks.

提案: State your opinion clearly and give brief reasons with specific examples. Use linking words such as “because” or “for example,” and keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I enjoy watching some advertisements because they can be entertaining and informative. For example, I like ads for food like noodles and ice cream because they show appetizing images and cooking ideas.

提案: Be specific about the type of ads you prefer and explain why with clear vocabulary. Avoid repetitive words and unclear descriptions; instead describe features (colorful visuals, fresh ingredients) using linking words like “because” or “such as.”

例: I prefer food advertisements, especially for noodles, because they often show fresh vegetables and steaming noodles that look tasty. For example, an ad that highlights green vegetables and generous portions makes the product more appealing.

× Yeah, I often see advertisement when we are on phone or computer.

✓ Yeah, I often see advertisements when I am on my phone or computer.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple occurrences. Also pronouns and articles: use singular first person 'I' and possessive 'my' for 'phone', and include the determiner 'my'. Use 'am' for 'I' (present tense). Suggestion: say 'I often see advertisements when I am on my phone or computer.'

× I usually use it on a phone screen when I breathe in a Duolingo.

✓ I usually see it on my phone screen when I use Duolingo.

The verb 'use' fits the context (using the app) rather than 'breathe in'. 'Breathe in' is incorrect here. Also 'on a phone screen' should be 'on my phone screen' for possession; 'Duolingo' is used as an app so 'use Duolingo' is appropriate. Suggestion: replace 'breathe in' with 'use' and correct articles and pronouns.

× In that case the advertisement come and Outlook.

✓ In that case the advertisement appears and covers the screen.

The verb 'come' should be present tense third-person singular 'comes' if kept, but 'appears' is more natural. 'Outlook' is incorrect in this context; perhaps intended 'out of view' or 'covers the screen'. Use a clearer verb phrase. Suggestion: use 'appears' or 'comes up' and replace 'Outlook' with 'covers the screen' or 'pops up'.

× Yeah, who knows what the ice cream advertisement made.

✓ Yeah, I remember an ice cream advertisement that made an impression on me.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and proper structure. 'Who knows what' is informal and unclear. Use a clear subject 'I remember' and a relative clause 'that made an impression on me' to match the examiner's question. Suggestion: rephrase to state memory and impact explicitly.

× Many boosts because the ice cream looks so yummy.

✓ It made me very excited because the ice cream looked so yummy.

'Many boosts' is ungrammatical; likely intended to express strong positive reaction. Use a clear subject 'It' and a past tense 'looked' to match 'made an impression when you were a child' (past). 'Made me very excited' conveys the idea. Suggestion: express emotional reaction with proper verb and past tense.

× I see a lot of the advertisements of the transfer blanket Toyota cars or the DVD and the, uh, others.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transport, like car ads for Toyota or DVD ads.

Preposition 'of' is incorrect; use 'on' for locations where ads appear. 'Transfer blanket' is incorrect phrase; likely 'transport' or 'train'. Also article 'the' before 'advertisements' is unnecessary in general statement. Suggestion: use 'advertisements on trains and other transport' and list examples clearly.

× Yeah, I really like to watch what type of advertisement, like for noodles advertisement ice creams or some some transports.

✓ Yeah, I really like watching different types of advertisements, like those for noodles, ice cream, or transportation.

Use gerund 'watching' after 'like' rather than infinitive 'to watch' for preferences. The list needs plural nouns and consistent forms: 'ice cream' (no 's' when uncountable or use 'ice cream ads'), and 'transportation' is more natural. Remove repeated 'some'. Suggestion: say 'I like watching advertisements for noodles, ice cream, or transportation.'

× I really like advertisement of the noodles that the noodles meant like wow, so the greenery, greenery of vegetables and the weights of noodles.

✓ I really like advertisements for noodles that show fresh vegetables and generous portions of noodles.

Use plural 'advertisements' and preposition 'for' rather than 'of'. The clause 'that the noodles meant like wow' is ungrammatical; express intended meaning: ads that emphasize freshness and portion size. 'Greenery' is awkward; use 'fresh vegetables'. 'Weights of noodles' should be 'generous portions'. Suggestion: simplify to 'ads that show fresh vegetables and generous portions.'