Advertisement— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence naming one memorable ad, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (what the ad showed, why it impressed you) using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'commercials' and past-tense verbs). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes. A cereal commercial with a funny cartoon mascot impressed me when I was a child. The ad showed the mascot dancing and offering a free toy, which made it exciting for me. Because it was colorful and catchy, I remember the jingle even now.

提案: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary. Say where you see ads, how often, and one reason. Use linking words like 'because' correctly and finish your sentence. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train every day. The ads are often colorful and placed on windows and walls, so I notice them during my journey.

提案: Clarify your opinion and give a brief explanation. Use a clear topic sentence stating whether you like ads, then add one or two reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I used to work as an advertising editor' and 'ads influence my life').

例: I have mixed feelings about advertisements. Although I worked as an advertising editor in the past, I often find ads intrusive; however, some ads influence my shopping choices because they introduce useful products.

提案: Good topic sentence and relevant vocabulary. Improve by giving a specific example and a reason with linking words. Use smoother phrasing like 'AI-related advertisements' and avoid repeating words.

例: I prefer AI-related advertisements because I'm interested in artificial intelligence. For example, I enjoy ads that show new AI tools or apps, since they explain how the technology can improve daily tasks.

提案: Respond directly and concisely. Say how often and why, using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like 'compulsory'.

例: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and computer because I watch many YouTube videos and I don't have a premium subscription, so ads play before and during videos.

× When I was a child, I saw a lot of commercial on TV because I often watch TV at my house and I thought I didn't like advertisement.

✓ When I was a child, I saw a lot of commercials on TV because I often watched TV at my house and I thought I didn't like advertisements.

Multiple errors: 'commercial' and 'advertisement' need plural forms when referring to many items (singular/plural issue). Also tense consistency: 'saw' (past) should match 'often watched' (past habitual) rather than 'watch'. Use plural nouns 'commercials' and 'advertisements'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for countable items and keep past tense consistent for past time frames.

× When I was a child, I saw a lot of commercial on TV because I often watch TV at my house and I thought I didn't like advertisement.

✓ When I was a child, I saw a lot of commercials on TV because I often watched TV at my house and I thought I didn't like advertisements.

The clause 'I often watch TV' conflicts with the past context 'When I was a child' (present tense used incorrectly). Use past habitual 'watched' to match the time frame. Suggestion: ensure verb tenses align with the time expressions in the sentence.

× Yes, I say adorable advertisement on trains and, uh, taxi because I commit to work to ride on uh, trains and uh, before I went to.

✓ Yes, I see adorable advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train before I go to the office.

'Advertisement' should be plural when referring to multiple items. Also 'taxi' should be plural 'taxis' if general, and 'say' is incorrect verb form here. 'Adorable advertisement' also sounds odd; 'advertisements' fits. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns and correct verb 'see'.

× Yes, I say adorable advertisement on trains and, uh, taxi because I commit to work to ride on uh, trains and uh, before I went to.

✓ Yes, I see adorable advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train before I go to the office.

'I say' is wrong verb choice and form; the intended verb is 'see' (first person present 'I see'). Also 'commit to work to ride' is incorrect; 'commute to work' is correct. Suggestion: use correct verbs and verb phrases for intended meaning.

× Yes, I say adorable advertisement on trains and, uh, taxi because I commit to work to ride on uh, trains and uh, before I went to.

✓ Yes, I see adorable advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train before I go to the office.

The phrase 'before I went to' is an incomplete past clause and conflicts with the present habitual idea. Use 'before I go to the office' or restructure to past: 'before I went to the office.' Suggestion: choose consistent tense and complete the clause.

× Actually, I don't like good advertisements, but the previous three my work, I worked as an editor in the advertisement. But advertisement, it's influenced my living life.

✓ Actually, I don't like most advertisements, but for the previous three years at my work, I worked as an editor in advertising. Advertising has influenced my life.

Multiple tense and word choice issues: 'good advertisements' likely meant 'most advertisements' (adjective misuse). 'previous three my work' is incorrect word order and missing 'years'. 'Editor in the advertisement' should be 'editor in advertising' or 'an advertising editor'. 'Advertisement, it's influenced my living life' is ungrammatical; use 'Advertising has influenced my life' (present perfect for past influence). Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and present perfect to describe an influence continuing to present.

× Actually, I don't like good advertisements, but the previous three my work, I worked as an editor in the advertisement. But advertisement, it's influenced my living life.

✓ Actually, I don't like most advertisements, but for the previous three years at my work, I worked as an editor in advertising. Advertising has influenced my life.

'Good' was likely the wrong adjective; 'most' fits the intended meaning. 'Living life' is redundant; 'life' suffices. Suggestion: choose precise adjectives and avoid redundancy.

× I think I like watching AI advertisement because I'm interested in the AI and I'm into new techniques and skills.

✓ I think I like watching AI advertisements because I'm interested in AI and I'm into new techniques and skills.

'Advertisement' should be plural when referring to ads in general. 'the AI' is incorrect when speaking generally about artificial intelligence; use 'AI' without 'the'. Suggestion: drop definite article when referring to general concepts and pluralize countable nouns.

× Of course yes, I often watch videos on YouTube and I don't. I'm not premium. So I compulsory have to watch advertising advertising during watching the YouTube.

✓ Of course, I often watch videos on YouTube and I'm not a premium subscriber. So I have to watch advertisements while watching YouTube videos.

Several issues: 'advertising advertising' is duplicated; 'YouTube' shouldn't have 'the'. 'premium' needs noun phrase 'a premium subscriber'. 'advertisements' plural. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and avoid repetition.

× Yes, I see adorable advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train before I go to the office.

✓ Yes, I see adorable advertisements on trains and taxis because I commute to work by train before I go to the office.

Original contained 'commit to work to ride on trains' which used incorrect prepositions and verbs. Use 'commute to work by train' to express travel method. Suggestion: learn common prepositional patterns for transportation: 'by train', 'by taxi', 'on the bus'.