Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，但两个独立分句之间缺少连接词或标点，属于逗号拼接。可以使用“and”连接，并补充具体的绘画类型或绘画带来的感受，使内容更具体。注意使用现在完成进行时表达从过去持续到现在的习惯是合适的。

例: Yes, I do. I’ve been drawing almost every day since I was young, especially simple portraits and landscapes. It helps me relax and express my creativity.

提案: 回答有原因和补充信息，但“because... so that...”搭配不自然，逻辑关系应改为“because... and...”。“the famous masterpiece”应使用复数或泛指形式，如“famous masterpieces”；“art history”前通常不加“the”。建议说明你在画廊具体学习什么，例如色彩、构图或艺术家的风格。

例: Yes, I really enjoy visiting galleries because I can learn from famous masterpieces. I usually pay attention to the artists’ use of colour and composition, and this gives me new ideas for my own drawings.

提案: 回答结构清晰，也表达了未来目标，但“one time”在这里不自然，应改为“one day”。“be accepted by an art institute”语法可以理解，但“be admitted to an art school/institute”更地道。可以具体说明想学习的艺术领域，从而增强内容的有效性。

例: Yes, definitely. I’d like to learn more about art history and different painting techniques. I keep practising because I hope to be admitted to an art school one day.

提案: 主要问题是时态和词语搭配：“since I was a kid”表示持续到现在，不能与一般过去时“learned”直接搭配；可改为“When I was a kid, I learned...”或“I’ve learned... since...”。“drawings technique”应改为“drawing techniques”，“from the professors”也不准确，网上资源通常来自“professional artists”或“art teachers”。建议加入父母教你的具体内容。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents taught me the basics of drawing, such as lines and shapes. Later, I watched online tutorials by professional artists to improve my drawing techniques.

提案: 回答有明确观点、例子和原因，内容较完整。“artwork pieces”重复且不自然，建议使用“artwork”或“works of art”；“mitigate our stress”过于正式，口语中可用“reduce stress”。“relax ourselves”应改为“help us relax”。

例: Yes, I’m very fond of art. I enjoy decorating my home with paintings and other works of art. I think art can reduce stress and help us relax after a long day at work.

提案: 回答直接自然，但第二句重复使用“I love”，且“house”与前文相比可以统一为“home”。建议加入成为艺术家的具体原因或未来计划，例如举办展览、学习专业技能等，使答案更有层次。

例: Yes, becoming an artist has always been my dream. I love drawing, and I’d like to share my work with other people. In the future, I hope to study art professionally and hold my own exhibition.

提案: 回答有比较结构，但语法、词汇和逻辑需要改进。“the famous artist”应为“famous artists”，“the history”可改为“history”；“While in terms of...”不应单独作为句子开头，最好与前句连接。“contemporary chain”用词错误，可能想表达“contemporary trends”或“current society”。建议分别说明两种艺术的特点，并使用“whereas”进行清晰对比。

例: I like both, but I slightly prefer traditional art. It helps me understand history and appreciate the skills of famous artists, whereas modern art reflects contemporary ideas and encourages people to think about the future.

× Yes, I like drawing, I have been drawing every day since I was young

✓ Yes, I like drawing. I have been drawing every day since I was young.

原句用逗号连接两个完整句子，形成逗号拼接错误。应使用句号将两个独立句分开。

× I enjoy going to the gallery because I like drawing so that I can learn a lot from the famous masterpiece and also know more about the art history.

✓ I enjoy going to the gallery because I like drawing, so I can learn a lot from famous masterpieces and also learn more about art history.

“masterpiece”在这里表示泛指的多件名作，应使用复数“masterpieces”。另外，表达泛指概念时使用复数形式更自然。

× I enjoy going to the gallery because I like drawing so that I can learn a lot from the famous masterpiece and also know more about the art history.

✓ I enjoy going to the gallery because I like drawing, so I can learn a lot from famous masterpieces and also learn more about art history.

“famous masterpieces”和“art history”在句中都是泛指，不需要使用定冠词“the”。“art history”表示艺术史这一学科时通常不加“the”。

× Yes, I learned drawing from my parents since I was a kid and later on I searched for online resources from the professors to learn more about drawings technique.

✓ Yes, I learned to draw from my parents when I was a kid, and later on I searched for online resources from professors to learn more about drawing techniques.

“learned”是一般过去时，不能和表示持续时间的“since I was a kid”直接搭配。因为这里描述的是童年发生的事情，应使用“when I was a kid”。

× Yes, I learned drawing from my parents since I was a kid and later on I searched for online resources from the professors to learn more about drawings technique.

✓ Yes, I learned to draw from my parents when I was a kid, and later on I searched for online resources from professors to learn more about drawing techniques.

“learn”后面通常接不定式“to do”，所以应说“learned to draw”，而不是“learned drawing”。建议记住“learn to do something”的固定搭配。

× Yes, I learned drawing from my parents since I was a kid and later on I searched for online resources from the professors to learn more about drawings technique.

✓ Yes, I learned to draw from my parents when I was a kid, and later on I searched for online resources from professors to learn more about drawing techniques.

“drawings technique”搭配错误。“technique”前的“drawing”在这里作定语，应使用单数形式“drawing”；如果指多种技巧，应将“technique”改为复数“techniques”。

× Yes, I do like art very much. I love to decorate my home with artwork pieces and I think art can mitigate our stress and relax ourselves after a long day's work.

✓ Yes, I do like art very much. I love to decorate my home with artwork, and I think art can reduce our stress and help us relax after a long day's work.

“ourselves”只能在主语和宾语是同一组人时使用。这里的主语是“art”，不是“we”，所以不能使用“ourselves”。应说“help us relax”。

× I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about the history and also the famous artist. While in terms of modern art, I can learn more about the contemporary chain and more about the future.

✓ I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about history and famous artists. In terms of modern art, I can learn more about contemporary changes and the future.

“the famous artist”表示多个著名艺术家时，应该使用复数“famous artists”。泛指一类人时，通常使用复数形式。

× I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about the history and also the famous artist. While in terms of modern art, I can learn more about the contemporary chain and more about the future.

✓ I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about history and famous artists. In terms of modern art, I can learn more about contemporary changes and the future.

“history”和“famous artists”在这里表示泛指，不需要使用“the”。只有在特指某段历史或某些特定艺术家时，才使用定冠词“the”。

× I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about the history and also the famous artist. While in terms of modern art, I can learn more about the contemporary chain and more about the future.

✓ I like both modern art and traditional art. In terms of traditional art, I can learn more about history and famous artists. In terms of modern art, I can learn more about contemporary changes and the future.

“While in terms of modern art...”以从属连词“While”开头，但后面没有与之对应的完整主句，因此形成句子残缺。这里不需要使用“While”，直接改为“In terms of modern art”即可。