Art— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答基本直接，也提供了童年经历和原因，但有明显语法和搭配问题，例如“ I too”应改为“I do”，“love the drawing pictures”应改为“love drawing pictures”，“it makes”前后时态要统一。建议使用“过去经历+现在感受”的清晰结构，并用一个具体例子结尾。

例: Yes, I do. When I was a child, my teacher encouraged me to draw and sometimes gave me small rewards for my pictures. Since then, I’ve found drawing relaxing, especially when I want to take my mind off my studies.

提案: 观点明确，但“which draw by artists”应改为“which are painted by artists”，“valuable for me”表达不自然，“over the world”应改为“around the world”。“艺术是一个国家的财富”略显空泛，可以补充参观画廊时的具体收获或感受，使内容更自然有效。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy going to galleries because I can admire paintings and learn about different artists’ ideas. Galleries also help me understand a country’s culture, so I’d love to visit famous ones around the world.

提案: 回答结构清楚，使用了“When”和“By contrast”来组织细节，内容也比较具体。需要改进词汇和语法，例如“a good thing for me to express”可改为“a good way to express”，“colorful pigment”可改为“bright colours”，“on the paper”可改为“on paper”。

例: Yes, definitely. I think art is a great way to express my emotions. For example, when I’m happy, I use bright colours, whereas when I’m upset, I tend to draw in black and white. That’s why I’d like to learn more about different artistic techniques.

提案: 回答包含童年经历，但句子连接混乱，且“posted my paintings on a competition”应改为“entered my paintings in a competition”，“got a champagne”不符合语境，可能想表达“won a prize”。建议按“参加画画俱乐部—参加比赛—获奖—感受”的顺序组织，并避免不完整句子。

例: Yes, I did. My parents enrolled me in a painting club when I was young, where I learned some basic drawing skills. Later, my teacher entered one of my paintings in a competition, and I won a prize. I was extremely proud and happy.

提案: 回答有观点、感受和具体场景，但存在多个语法错误和句子残缺，例如“when I drawing”应为“when I draw”，“it can also let me feel”可简化为“it makes me feel”，“Can also make friends”应改为“it also helps me make friends”。建议控制在3—4个完整句子内，避免重复使用“feel”。

例: Yes, I do. Art is interesting and it helps me relax, especially when I design posters for my university. I also enjoy taking painting classes because I can meet people who share the same interest. So, art is both enjoyable and social for me.

提案: 回答过于简短，且“pay some pictures”应为“paint some pictures”，“at that time I just want”应改为“at the moment, I just want”或“I only wanted”，“can't up to the professional level”应改为“can’t reach a professional level”。建议先直接回答，再说明兴趣和职业选择之间的区别。

例: Not really. I enjoy painting as a hobby because it helps me relax, but I don’t think I’m skilled enough to make it a career. I’d rather keep it as a creative activity in my free time.

提案: 回答有明确选择，也尝试使用“By contrast”进行比较，但“appreciate anticipates”明显用词错误，可能想表达“appreciate antiques”或“appreciate traditional art”。句子重复使用“beautiful/attractive”，并且存在断句问题。建议给出一个具体原因，例如传统艺术的历史、技法或文化意义，同时更客观地比较现代艺术。

例: I prefer traditional art because I’m interested in history and cultural heritage. Traditional paintings often use techniques that have been passed down for generations, and they can reveal a lot about a society’s values. However, I also appreciate modern art because it can be creative and thought-provoking.

× Yes, I too because when I was a child my teacher asked me to draw some pictures and then gave me some rewards.

✓ Yes, I do, too, because when I was a child, my teacher asked me to draw some pictures and then gave me some rewards.

“Yes, I too”后面缺少谓语动词。回答一般疑问句“Do you like drawing?”时，应使用助动词“do”，所以应说“Yes, I do, too”。

× So I love the drawing pictures and I thought it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ So I love drawing pictures, and I thought it made me feel relaxed.

表示“喜欢画画”时，动词“love”后面通常接动名词“drawing”，不需要使用“the”。“love drawing pictures”表示喜欢画画这一活动。

× So I love the drawing pictures and I thought it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ So I love drawing pictures, and I thought it made me feel relaxed.

主句使用过去时“thought”时，后面的宾语从句通常也使用过去时，因此“makes”应改为“made”。

× Yes, I do, because I can appreciate the beautiful paintings which draw by artists.

✓ Yes, I do, because I can appreciate the beautiful paintings which are drawn by artists.

“paintings”是“被艺术家画出来的”，表示承受动作，所以要使用被动语态“are drawn”。被动语态结构是“be + 过去分词”。

× I think they are very valuable for me and they are the treasure for a nation.

✓ I think they are very valuable to me, and they are a treasure for a nation.

这里的“treasure”表示“一种宝贵财富”，是泛指，应该使用不定冠词“a”，而不是定冠词“the”。

× So I want to visit a variety of galleries over the world.

✓ So I want to visit a variety of galleries around the world.

表示“全世界各地”时，固定搭配是“around the world”，不能使用“over the world”。

× On a competition.

✓ In a competition.

表示“参加比赛”或“在比赛中”时，通常使用介词“in”，所以应说“in a competition”。

× On a competition.

✓ My teacher entered my paintings in a competition.

“On a competition”只是介词短语，没有主语和谓语，不能独立构成句子。应补充完整的主语和谓语，例如“My teacher entered my paintings in a competition”。

× So I got a champagne and I felt very happy.

✓ So I got a bottle of champagne, and I felt very happy.

“champagne”通常是不可数名词，不能直接和“a”连用。表示一瓶香槟时，应使用可数表达“a bottle of champagne”。

× What's more, it can also let me feel over the moon when I drawing some pictures, especially when I design some posters for our university.

✓ What's more, it can also make me feel over the moon when I draw pictures, especially when I design posters for our university.

“when I drawing”缺少谓语结构。这里表示经常性的活动，应使用一般现在时“I draw”，不能单独使用现在分词“drawing”。

× So it makes me feel relaxed and. Can also make friends when I have painting lessons.

✓ So it makes me feel relaxed and can also help me make friends when I have painting lessons.

原句中的“and.”把句子错误地截断了，后面的“Can also make friends”也缺少主语。两个动作的主语都是“it”，可以合并为“It makes me feel relaxed and can also help me make friends”。

× Not really because at that time I just want to pay some pictures to let me feel relaxed, but I can't up to the professional level.

✓ Not really, because at that time I just wanted to paint some pictures to help me relax, but I couldn't reach a professional level.

“at that time”指过去的时间，因此“want”应改为过去式“wanted”。后面的“can't”也应根据过去时间改为“couldn't”。

× Not really because at that time I just want to pay some pictures to let me feel relaxed, but I can't up to the professional level.

✓ Not really, because at that time I just wanted to paint some pictures to help me relax, but I couldn't reach a professional level.

情态动词“couldn't”后面必须接动词原形。原句中的“up to”不能直接接在“can't”后面，应使用“couldn't reach”。此外，“paint”是“画画”的正确动词。

× Not really because at that time I just want to pay some pictures to let me feel relaxed, but I can't up to the professional level.

✓ Not really, because at that time I just wanted to paint some pictures to help me relax, but I couldn't reach a professional level.

表示达到某种专业水平时，通常说“reach a professional level”。这里是泛指一种水平，因此使用不定冠词“a”，而不是“the”。

× I think these classic paintings are very beautiful and it can also express the artist's emotions, so they are very nice for me.

✓ I think these classic paintings are very beautiful, and they can also express the artists' emotions, so they are very nice to me.

“these classic paintings”是复数名词，代词应使用复数“they”，不能使用单数“it”。同时，若指多位画家的情感，应使用复数所有格“artists'”。

× I think these classic paintings are very beautiful and it can also express the artist's emotions, so they are very nice for me.

✓ I think these classic paintings are very beautiful, and they can also express the artists' emotions, so they are very nice to me.

“对我来说很不错”更自然的表达是“nice to me”。“nice for me”通常表示“对我有益”或“适合我”，在这里不符合原意。