Emails— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons. Fix article and plural errors (e.g., “a format letters” -> “formal letters”, “an important documents” -> “important documents”). Avoid redundancy and keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I don’t often send emails; I usually use text messages. I only email when I need to send formal letters or important documents to my teachers.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence and then specific examples linked logically. Correct word choice (“secretive” is odd for documents), remove filler phrases, and avoid repeating ‘text’ for email. Use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘also’ properly.

例: I usually send emails for official or private matters. For example, I email when I need to send confidential documents, inform teachers about an absence, or submit important assignments.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar and collocations. Use one clear reason and a specific example. Replace vague phrases like “must are popular” with confident, correct expressions and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I think emails are popular in China because schools and universities use them to distribute information and receive assignments. For instance, professors often send course materials and submission instructions by email.

提案: Give a concise main idea, then provide one or two clear reasons with simpler, accurate language. Avoid wordy phrases like “as we are approaching the era of modernization.” Check subject-verb agreement (devices that make). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘therefore’ correctly.

例: I think emails will become more popular because people rely increasingly on the Internet and digital devices. Therefore, professionals and students will continue to use email for projects and official communication.

× No, I usually use text messages instead because I only use emails when I want to send a format letters or an important documents to my teachers.

✓ No, I usually use text messages instead because I only use emails when I want to send formatted letters or an important document to my teachers.

The phrase 'format letters' is incorrect; 'formatted' is the past participle adjective (verb + -ed) modifying 'letters' which describes their state. Also 'an important documents' mixes singular article 'an' with plural 'documents'; change to singular 'document' to agree. Suggestion: use 'formatted letters' and ensure noun and article agree.

× I send emails when the documents are too important and secretive. The to add on. I also use emails when I want to text my teachers and to complain about my absence.

✓ I send emails when the documents are very important or confidential. In addition, I use emails when I want to message my teachers or explain my absence.

'Secretive' describes a person, not 'documents'; 'confidential' or 'private' fits better. 'The to add on' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'In addition'. 'Text my teachers' is acceptable but 'message' is more appropriate for email. 'To complain about my absence' is awkward; use 'explain my absence'. Also conjunctions 'and'/'or' fixed for clarity.

× I would say yes, I think it must are popular all over the world because mainly universities and also schools use emails for them to do and send in their assignments and projects.

✓ I would say yes; I think emails must be popular all over the world because universities and schools mainly use them to do and submit their assignments and projects.

'Must are' is incorrect: modal 'must' should be followed by base verb 'be' not 'are'. 'Mainly universities and also schools' needs reordering to 'universities and schools mainly'. 'Use emails for them to do and send in their assignments' has incorrect pronoun 'them' and verbs; use 'use them to do and submit their assignments'. Subject-verb agreement and modal structure were corrected.

× Personally, I think that it will become more popular in the future because as we are approaching the era of modernization, people will tend to use more Internet and also focus on gadgets and devices that makes their life easier, thus using emails to do projects and works.

✓ Personally, I think that it will become more popular in the future because as we approach the era of modernization, people will tend to use the Internet more and also focus on gadgets and devices that make their lives easier, thus using emails to do projects and work.

'As we are approaching' is acceptable but 'as we approach' is more concise in this context (present simple for general trend). 'Use more Internet' should be 'use the Internet more'. 'That makes their life easier' has subject-verb agreement error: plural 'devices' require 'make' and 'their life' should be plural 'their lives'. 'Projects and works' is awkward; 'work' is uncountable here. Adjust tense and agreement for natural English.

× ...gadgets and devices that makes their life easier...

✓ ...gadgets and devices that make their lives easier...

The relative clause refers to plural subject 'gadgets and devices', so the verb should be base form 'make' (no -s). Also 'their life' should be 'their lives' to match plural antecedents. Ensure verb agrees with subject in third person plural.