Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng là bạn thường nhìn vào gương hằng ngày, nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và sự lặp lại như “I'd love to looking my to look” và “I'd often like have”. Hãy dùng cấu trúc đơn giản “I look at myself in the mirror every day” và thay “check my status” bằng cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn như “check my appearance”. Bạn có thể thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về việc chỉnh tóc hoặc quần áo, nhưng chỉ nên giữ trong 2–3 câu.

例: Yes, I do. I look at myself in the mirror every day, especially when I go to the bathroom. I usually check my hair and clothes before leaving the house.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời “Yes”, nhưng phần mô tả loại gương đầu tiên không rõ nghĩa và có vẻ dùng nhầm từ “bowl” thay vì có thể là “small mirror”. Câu trả lời quá dài, thiếu cấu trúc và có lỗi như “a lot of kind of mirrors”, “the one that's it take” và “doing some makeups”. Hãy nêu số lượng hoặc loại gương, sau đó giải thích công dụng bằng một câu ngắn. Dùng “put on my desk” và “apply makeup” sẽ tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I have. I’ve bought two mirrors: a small handheld one for my bag and a larger one for my desk. I mainly use the larger mirror when I’m applying makeup.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính phù hợp, nhưng bị lặp từ “whether” và “in order to”, đồng thời kết thúc dang dở ở “make sure that I'm in the”. Cụm “check my status” không tự nhiên trong ngữ cảnh này; nên nói “check my appearance” hoặc “touch up my makeup”. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, nêu lý do và thêm một ví dụ ngắn về thời điểm bạn sử dụng chiếc gương.

例: Yes, I usually carry a small mirror in my bag. It’s useful for checking my hair or touching up my makeup during the day. I especially use it before meetings or social events.

提案: Bạn đã đưa ra quan điểm và lý do, nhưng câu “I feel like I'm really I can break it anytime” bị sai cấu trúc và ý “decorate and build” chưa phù hợp. Hãy nói rõ rằng bạn không muốn dùng gương lớn vì sợ làm vỡ, sau đó có thể đề cập đến một lựa chọn thay thế như gương nhỏ hoặc gương treo tường. Dùng cấu trúc “I probably wouldn’t..., because...” để câu trả lời tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn.

例: I probably wouldn’t use a large mirror to decorate my room because I’m afraid of breaking it. However, I might hang a small decorative mirror on the wall because it would make the room look brighter and more spacious.

× Well yes, I'd love to looking my to look at myself in the mirror on like a daily basis.

✓ Well, yes, I would love to look at myself in the mirror on a daily basis.

After would love, use the infinitive with to: would love to look, not would love to looking. The phrase looking my is also incorrect because look must be followed by the preposition at and the reflexive pronoun myself.

× Every time I go to the toilet I'd often like have a quick look at myself in order to check my status.

✓ Every time I go to the toilet, I often have a quick look at myself to check my appearance.

The structure would like requires to before the verb, but the original sentence also contains unnecessary hesitation and repetition. The expression check my appearance is more natural than check my status in this context.

× Yes, I bought a lot of kind of mirrors such as the one that's it take a bowl and can bring good meal around and the bigger one which I put on my table in order to look at myself when I am doing some makeups.

✓ Yes, I have bought many kinds of mirrors, such as one that looks like a bowl and can hold food, and a larger one that I put on my table to look at myself while doing my makeup.

After many or a lot of, use the plural form: kinds, not kind. Makeup is normally an uncountable noun when referring to cosmetics, so use my makeup or some makeup, not makeups.

× Yes, I bought a lot of kind of mirrors such as the one that's it take a bowl and can bring good meal around and the bigger one which I put on my table in order to look at myself when I am doing some makeups.

✓ Yes, I have bought many kinds of mirrors, such as one that looks like a bowl and can hold food, and a larger one that I put on my table to look at myself while doing my makeup.

The relative pronoun one refers to a singular object, so the verbs need the third-person singular form: looks and can hold. The original phrase that's it take is not a correct relative-clause structure.

× Yes, I always have a mirror in my bag, whether whether in the small size or the makeup size in order to I bring it in order to check my status, my makeup and also my hair to make sure that I'm in the.

✓ Yes, I always have a mirror in my bag, whether it is a small mirror or a makeup mirror, so I can use it to check my appearance, makeup, and hair and make sure that I look presentable.

The original sentence contains repeated words, an incomplete phrase after whether, and the incorrect structure in order to I bring it. Use whether it is ..., or ... and so I can use it to create complete and logical clauses. The phrase I'm in the is incomplete because it lacks a noun or adjective complement.

× Yes, I always have a mirror in my bag, whether whether in the small size or the makeup size in order to I bring it in order to check my status, my makeup and also my hair to make sure that I'm in the.

✓ Yes, I always have a mirror in my bag, whether it is a small mirror or a makeup mirror, so I can use it to check my appearance, makeup, and hair and make sure that I look presentable.

Whether is unnecessarily repeated. The standard paired conjunction is whether ... or ..., as in whether it is a small mirror or a makeup mirror.

× Well actually I don't have a big mirror in my room because I feel like I'm really I can break it anytime.

✓ Well, actually, I do not have a big mirror in my room because I feel that I might break it at any time.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two clauses: I feel like I'm really and I can break it. Use might to express possibility: I might break it. The phrase at any time is also a clear and natural way to express this possibility.

× So I don't think it's a good option to decorate and build.

✓ So I do not think it is a good option for decorating my room.

After the preposition for, use the gerund form decorating. The original phrase build does not fit the meaning because the topic is decorating a room, not constructing one.