Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., “before leaving” twice). Use linking words to connect routine and reason. Try to keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a short reason or example.

例: I don’t look in the mirror very often; usually I check it in the morning before leaving home to make sure my appearance is neat. I also use it when I’m doing my makeup, so I can fix any small details.

提案: Make the response more natural by combining ideas into one concise answer and fixing grammar (e.g., “easiest” → “the easiest”). Add a brief reason why you chose that mirror (size, design, or usefulness) and use a linking phrase for clarity.

例: Yes, I have. A few months ago I bought a small, compact mirror to keep in my handbag because it’s the easiest way to check my appearance on the go. I chose it because it’s lightweight and fits neatly in a pocket.

提案: Fix word order and remove stuttering/repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific supporting detail and a linking word (e.g., “because” or “especially”). Keep it concise and natural-sounding.

例: Yes, I always carry a small mirror because it’s essential for me. It’s especially useful for checking my makeup or hair after traveling on crowded buses.

提案: Combine ideas smoothly and correct grammar (e.g., “feels brighter”). Provide a specific placement example and a brief reason for the choice. Use one linking word to connect cause and effect.

例: Yes, I would. I put a large mirror opposite the window because it reflects natural light and makes a small room look bigger and brighter.

× Not too much, I usually look at the mirror in the morning before leaving before leaving the home in order to see if my appearance is good and also I look at the mirror while doing makeup.

✓ Not too much, I usually look in the mirror in the morning before leaving home to see if my appearance is good, and I also look in the mirror while doing my makeup.

Use 'in the mirror' not 'look at the mirror' in this context and omit the definite article before 'home' (say 'leaving home'). Removed duplicated phrase 'before leaving' and streamlined wording. Added 'my' before 'makeup' for natural possession and used infinitive 'to see' for purpose. Grammar problem type ID:17

× Yes, definitely. A few months ago I bought a small mirror in order to take it with me in my handbag. It's really cosy and easiest way to see my appearance anytime.

✓ Yes, definitely. A few months ago I bought a small mirror to take with me in my handbag. It's really cosy and the easiest way to check my appearance anytime.

Added 'the' before 'easiest way' because superlative needs a determiner. Changed 'in order to take it with me' to 'to take with me' for conciseness. Replaced 'see my appearance' with 'check my appearance' for natural collocation and clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Yes, of course. It's an essential item for me and always I, I take it with with me. And it's very convenient for checking my appearance throughout the day, especially after travel on crowded buses.

✓ Yes, of course. It's an essential item for me and I always take it with me. It's very convenient for checking my appearance throughout the day, especially after travelling on crowded buses.

Moved 'always' to its typical position before the main verb. Removed duplicated 'I' and duplicate 'with'. Changed 'after travel on crowded buses' to 'after travelling on crowded buses' to use the correct verb form and natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:20

× Well, yes of course. I use mirrors to decorate my room because they make a small room look bigger and they reflect light so the room feels like brighter. For example I put a large mirror opposite.

✓ Well, yes, of course. I use mirrors to decorate my room because they make a small room look bigger and they reflect light so the room feels brighter. For example, I put a large mirror opposite the window.

Removed 'like' before 'brighter' — use 'feels brighter' not 'feels like brighter'. Added commas for natural pauses. 'Opposite' is incomplete; added 'the window' to complete the idea (specify what the mirror is opposite). This fixes adjective/adverb misuse and sentence completeness. Grammar problem type ID:13