Mirrors— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid repeated filler words, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Not really. I don't often look at myself because I'm not very confident about my appearance. However, I do check the mirror frequently when I need to fix my hair or adjust my clothes before going out.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and reduce hesitation. Use linking words to make the sequence clear (for example, 'because' and 'so'), and mention one or two specific details (where, when, or what type).

例: Yes, I have. Once the mirror in my bathroom broke, so I went to a local supermarket and bought a replacement. It was a simple rectangular mirror that fit the space well.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid unclear phrases and repeated words. If you do check your appearance often, explain how (e.g., using public restroom mirrors or a compact mirror) with one linking phrase.

例: No, I don't carry a mirror with me. Instead, I usually check my hair in restroom mirrors or reflective windows because I like to make sure it looks neat before meetings.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence. Use natural vocabulary (e.g., 'decorate' rather than 'declaration') and give a brief reason or example of placement and usefulness.

例: Yes, I would. I think one mirror per room is sufficient because it saves space and is useful for last-minute checks. I would hang it near the door or in a corner where it reflects light and looks decorative.

× To be honest, I don't actually consider myself as a handsome person, that's why I don't like to look at the mirrors very often.

✓ To be honest, I don't actually consider myself a handsome person; that's why I don't like to look at mirrors very often.

Use of articles: 'consider myself as a handsome person' is incorrect—after 'consider' we use the noun phrase without 'as' in this context, so 'consider myself a handsome person'. Also 'the mirrors' is incorrect because we mean mirrors in general, so use the plural without the definite article: 'mirrors'. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses rather than a comma splice.

× However, uh, because of, uh, fixing my hair, I look at the mirror very often, Uh, moreover.

✓ However, because I fix my hair, I look at the mirror very often.

Definite article: when referring to a specific mirror (the one you use to fix your hair), 'the mirror' is acceptable. Also the phrase 'because of fixing my hair' is awkward; use 'because I fix my hair' or 'to fix my hair'. Remove filler words and extraneous 'moreover' which is unnecessary and creates sentence fragmentation.

× Yes, I once bought a mirror because the mirror in the toilet fell to the ground and broke into the pieces and uh, I got, I went to the, uh, supermarket and uh, bought a new mirror for the toilet.

✓ Yes, I once bought a mirror because the mirror in the bathroom fell to the ground and broke into pieces, so I went to the supermarket and bought a new mirror for the bathroom.

Tense and word choice: Past tense is used correctly overall but wording is awkward. Replace 'to the ground' with just 'fell' or 'fell to the ground' is fine; 'broke into the pieces' is incorrect—correct is 'broke into pieces' or 'broke into a few pieces'. Also avoid repetition ('I got, I went to the, uh,' -> 'I went to the supermarket'). Use consistent noun ('bathroom' instead of 'toilet' in general speech).

× I never take mirror with me, but uh, as I mentioned, my hair is very soft and I do check uh, my 7 in front of the mirror every time, every, every place I go.

✓ I never take a mirror with me, but as I mentioned, my hair is very soft and I do check myself in front of the mirror every time I go out.

Articles and pronouns: 'take mirror' needs the indefinite article 'a mirror'. 'My 7' appears to be a transcription error; likely intended 'my hair' or 'my face' or 'myself' — context suggests 'myself'. Use 'in front of the mirror' (definite article because it's the mirror you use) and 'every time I go out' is the correct phrase. Remove repeated filler words.

× One mirror per room is full enough for the declaration of the room.

✓ One mirror per room is enough to decorate the room.

Word choice and structure: 'full enough for the declaration of the room' is incorrect and awkward. Use 'enough' after the adjective and a correct verb: 'enough to decorate the room'. Subject-verb agreement is okay, but the sentence needed rephrasing for natural expression.

× Uh, just placed at the corner of the room and you can check yourself in front of it when you are going out.

✓ Just place it in the corner of the room and you can check yourself in it when you are going out.

Prepositions and verb form: Use the imperative 'place' to match 'just' instruction. Use 'in the corner' (not 'at the corner' for interior placement). 'Check yourself in front of it' is acceptable, but 'check yourself in it' is more concise if referring to a mirror; alternatively 'check your appearance in it'. Also 'when you are going out' is acceptable but 'when you go out' is more natural.