Relax— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., use present perfect/simple present appropriately).

例: Recently I have been going to the shopping mall with a friend to relax. We usually walk around the stores and sit in a café, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a brief reason or example. Use a clear topic sentence and a linking word to introduce the additional detail. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'all with myself'.

例: I usually relax by myself because I enjoy quiet time to read and think. However, I sometimes relax with a close friend when we want to chat or watch a movie together.

提案: Good direct answer and relevant reasons; improve by making reasons more natural and grammatical. Use linking words and specific examples of types of music or situations when it helps. Avoid redundant phrasing like 'to keep your mind off about'.

例: Yes, I find listening to music very relaxing because mellow tunes help me concentrate and block out stressful thoughts. For example, I often play soft piano music while studying to calm my mind.

提案: Be more specific and natural: name particular activities and when you do them. Use correct word order and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide one or two concrete examples and a linking word to connect ideas.

例: To relax, I usually listen to music on my phone and browse short videos for a few minutes after work. Alternatively, when I want deeper rest, I go for a short walk or read a book to clear my mind.

× Oh recently I go with to the mall with my friend the relaxed and have fun.

✓ Oh, recently I go to the mall with my friend to relax and have fun.

The sentence has incorrect word order and extra/misplaced words. 'go with to the mall' is wrong order; 'the relaxed' is not correct. Correct structure: 'go to the mall with my friend to relax and have fun.' Suggestion: place the prepositional phrase 'to the mall' after 'go', keep 'with my friend' together, and use the infinitive 'to relax' to show purpose. Grammar problem type ID:26

× All with myself most of the time, but with my friend, yes.

✓ I relax by myself most of the time, but sometimes I relax with my friend.

Original lacks a clear subject-verb structure and misuses 'All with myself'. Use 'I relax by myself' to show the subject performing the action. 'Sometimes' clarifies frequency and makes the sentence natural. Suggestion: include subject 'I' and verb 'relax' and use 'by myself' for alone. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, I do think listening to music is relaxing. It helps you focus and to keep your mind off about something or negative thoughts.

✓ Yes, I do think listening to music is relaxing. It helps you focus and keeps your mind off negative thoughts or other worries.

Two issues: incorrect phrase 'to keep' after 'helps' and unnecessary 'about' after 'off'. After 'helps' use base form or third-person singular present for parallel verbs: 'helps you focus and keeps your mind off...'. Also use 'negative thoughts' without 'about'. Suggestion: make verbs agree and remove extra preposition. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I mostly do use phone to relax and listen to music all of the time. It keeps my mind off and it keeps me distracted.

✓ I mostly use my phone to relax and listen to music. It takes my mind off things and distracts me.

Remove unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in affirmative statement. Add possessive 'my' for 'phone'. 'All of the time' is redundant with 'mostly' so simplify. Use natural phrases: 'takes my mind off things' and 'distracts me' for concision and correct verb-object order. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary auxiliaries and include possessive determiners. Grammar problem type ID:26